| which would you choose?
Posted: 11/15/2007 4:38:38 AM | A young man stands waiting patiently for his bus to arrive, he glances around, normally there would be several others waiting beside him yet today he is alone. After some time he becomes nervous and fretful, his bus has never been this late before. It is a good hour walk to his home and the evening is beginning to creep in, bringing the chill of the night air. Turning up the collar of his lightweight jacket he begins the long journey, he has only gone a short distance when he notices the shop. Funny, he must of past it a hundred times in the bus, but he couldn't remember seeing it before. The lights are twinkling inside and odd looking bits and pieces are hanging from the walls, draping even odder looking furniture and strewn carelessly around the counters. Boxes overflow with strange items he has never seen. Curious, he enters and makes his way carefully around the cluttered maze. And there, standing alone amidst all this jumble is a table. A perfect antique phone table, dark mahogany wood, without a scratch or mark of any kind. Upon the table sits a box. plain blue velvet, it's lid is open and as he peers inside he sees four different coloured disks, each the size of an olympic medal. He picks up the box and from the weight of it he knows that the discs are made of some kind of metal. There are no markings on either the disks or box, nothing at all to indicate what they are or what anyone would do with them. Intrigued he looks around seeing for the first time a middle aged woman standing behind one of the counters. She nods her head slightly, but otherwise does not acknowledge his presence.
Finally, he walks over to her and asks what the strange disks are all about.
With a soft hypnotic voice, using her piecing blue eyes to pin his gaze to hers , she explains.
You may choose only one disc. Each one has a special power, it is up to you to select that which you most need.
He stood transfixed as she quietly told him what each disc represented.
The yellow one is happiness... choose that and you will never know a moment of sadness for the rest of your life
The red one is love...with that everyone you care about will love you deeply and eternally, you will never be alone again
The white ......health........you will live to a great age and die peacefully in your sleep, you will never be ill in mind or body
Black....much wealth....you will never go hungry or homeless. Nor will you have to wait in line for a bus or worry about paying a debt, all the gold you could ever wish for is here at your fingertips.
The young man gasps, his eyes bulging and his hand raches out over the blue velvet, ready to grasp at a disk...but which one...his hand hovers, undecided
Which one will you choose? I will finish this story on request if anyone is interested in the ending | |
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 11/22/2007 8:04:32 AM | I would love to hear the end of the story. You got me. But I would choose love. It's the only thing that really matters. Thanks in advance for the story.  | |
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Posted: 11/24/2007 5:04:31 AM | Ending:
The woman behind the counter stands as still as a statue, her eyes do not flicker, her breath is silent, the young man barely notices, his eyes tranfixed on the discs.
Time stood still. Neither the young man or woman noticed the creeping darkness outside. Patrons had purchased their goods and hurried home to their families. Shopkeepers had sighed with weariness and locked their doors.
His hand reached into the box but before he could place it around his selected disc, the sudden movement of the woman startled him and he jumped back as if bitten.
He glanced up and immediately his eyes locked with hers, he could not look away or move a muscle as she whispered....
"Before you choose, think on this. Each disc, will give you what I have promised, but that is all you will ever have".
The young man paled, twas not what she said that made the colour drain from his face, for he didn't really understand her meaning, twas the way that she said, which made him pull back and reconsider his choice.
Once again the woman had turned to stone, not even the sligthest movement to show that she was real and not imagined.
A clock, somewhere amidst the jumble of goods, ticked loudly in the silence.
The young mans face flittered with thought...each passing across his features as he began to understand the meaning of her cryptic words.
Time passed, how much, who knows but finally the young man gave a deep sigh of regret and as he did so the ticking of the clock ceased. It was as if everything in that odd little shop was waiting.......silent and breathless for the young man to speak.
Finally he did............
If I choose the yellow one...happiness, that would be wonderful but how would I appreciate it...if I never know sadness
If I choose the red.....love....am I not getting a false love, for it is not their choice to love me, but is given by the power of the discs. I want to be loved for who I am and I want it given freely
If I choose the white....health...I will live to a grand old age, but I will watch everyone I love and care about die. How can I enjoy the thrill of life if I know there is no danger to face...no chance to take
And the Black...wealth.....True, with it I can buy whatever I wish. I can help my parents who have struggled so hard to raise me and give me what I need....but what good is money if that is all I have...without the promise of the other discs it is usless to me.
I thank you for your offer, but I will decline...none of those discs can give me what I truly want in my life.
The woman behind the counter smiled broadly, she had the most beautiful face he had ever seen. Strange how he had not noticed before, but now as he looked at her he could see her flawless skin...not even a wrinkle and perfect white teeth and they didn't look false either. Her hair. luxurious and long, jet black and not from a bottle.
She made her way to him and enveloped him in an enormous bear hug, surpised he stood frozen, arms limp by his side.
She stepped back and motioned him to follow her. Reluctanly, not sure of what she was going to do...he hesitantly peered around the curtain she had disappeared behind.
The woman was over near a bench, kettle in hand making her way to the sink to fill it.
He noticed the little table and 2 chairs and she told him to sit down and rest while she made them a drink and something to eat.
A little bemused he did as she requested. A few minutes later a plate was sat in front of him...chunks of fresh bread and cold meat, sliced tomato and swiss cheese.......mmmmmm his favorite. She told him to eat and for the first time he realised how hungry he was.
A steaming cup of coffee was set beside the plate and the woman took possesion of the other chair.
As he munched away on the food and gulped at the coffee she began to speak.
You are a very wise and special young man...vey few have chosen not to take a disc and as you have foreseen they have paid dearly for their decision.
As he neared the last bite of his bread, she rose from the table and with her back to him, made her way over to a battered wooden dresser in the corner of the small kitchen. When she turned around, she had a disc in her hand....a shiny gold disc attached to a gold chain. Much smaller than the discs in the blue velvet box, but so much shinier and special...somehow.
She placed the chain around his neck and he smiled, revealing a gap where his front 2 teeth should have been, she gently patted his cheek and sat down in her chair.
When she spoke her voice was light and breezy, like that of a much younger woman and he listended intently.
You have known sorrow Arrod, pain and poverty. You have worked hard to help your parents and you have been the most wonderful son to them. I know of all the good things you do for people....the old folks home you visit each Saturday...the children you tutor free of charge, the animals you have saved from certain death. I give you this disc because you are most deserving of it.....this is the disc of life Arrod, all it's joys, all it's sadness....all it's love. You will experience it all, but now with greater understanding and acceptance...and with it much happiness and love . Wear it with pride for you are one of the chosen few, who will lead this world into everlasting peace . Go home now Arrod....my driver is waiting out the front for you... | |
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 11/24/2007 6:54:19 AM | | Thank you so much imto0shy and to the others who asked me to finish it | |
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CESSKA
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Joined: 10/24/2007
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 11/24/2007 4:12:47 PM | it is a wonderful story, a classic, u should be published. thank u 4 the lesson.
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Posted: 11/24/2007 8:47:17 PM | | That was absolutely refreshing to read...thank you for sharing that little with treasure for everyone to read. | |
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Posted: 11/26/2007 5:20:48 AM | i would choose red
could u please finish the story for me
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Posted: 11/27/2007 8:43:10 AM | | Beautiful story -- beautiful lesson -- I agree, if this is your original work, it SHOULD be published .. check poetry.com for one of their upcoming contests -- this is a WINNER!! | |
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Posted: 11/27/2007 7:23:55 PM | | Thankyou butterflygal2. Yes it is original and thank you for the tip I will look into that | |
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Posted: 11/30/2007 8:01:48 AM | Your story is wonderfully written! This little lesson will stay with me. Thank you again,,,,beautyful! | |
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Posted: 12/2/2007 10:09:59 AM | I agree with the other posters, GREAT STORY! Very well written and it kept you on the edge of your seat waiting to see the outcome which is a great reminder to us all as to what is truly important.
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 12/3/2007 3:14:52 AM | i admit i read the ending but i know i would not have chosen any simply for the reasons you so wisely quoted, it was a good story and something all people need to consider . every choice we make has its consequences and not all choices are for the best no matter what we're led to believe.
look forward to your next story
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 12/6/2007 12:44:27 PM | NOTE THAT NOT ALL POSTERS ACTUALLY ANSWERED THAT ONE....
OK - I've got guts enough to choose...
GIMME DA RED ONE BABY!!!!!!
If I HAVE to choose - that's the one.
No regrets - because I can repay the love I'm given - and since I'm not an A$$,
I'm sure the person giving me their love to me would be profitted greatly by mine!
WIN WIN SITUATION - | |
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 12/6/2007 1:43:46 PM | That is a great story! You have great skill at descriptions. Alright go ahead and mail me the black disc since Arrod is much wiser than I and won't be needing it...
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 12/6/2007 3:33:24 PM | | I think you should add a disc that gives one a 15" penis. Just to spice it up. | |
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| which would you choose?
Posted: 12/9/2007 5:57:14 PM | | lol bighead9, but no woman would touch it, so what good would it do ya? Then again....you never know | |
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