| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/18/2007 1:46:07 PM |  Hi all...
I wear my heart on my sleeve. Take chances and fail often.
From my heart comes my confidence and my boldness of word.
I am strong, secure and kinda alone too..
This profile is a creative relection of my honest self. It's bold on purpose.
I like the way it turned out. But will it get me anywhere?
The ones I want to catch are scared off. Why?
I'd appreciate a honest critic here.....
RZ | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/18/2007 1:52:56 PM | yeah, I'm opening myself up to all..
Lay it on me,,,,,I can take it...
I'll try to be as gentle as you are folks...
 Cheers... | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/18/2007 2:04:27 PM | Oh boy, get rid of all those smileys! I see all those and I am already turned off to your profile. I know you like to smileys, but please limit them to just a few.
Get rid of the "little angel, little devil" part. Everyone has a little angel and a little devil in them. You are not unique in that. Get rid of the cheer for whatever team.
I'm confused with the Thumb's Up!... huh?
I would strongly suggest you use sentences. Maybe even some paragraphs with sentences in them.
Old folks?... again, huh?
doin' your duty?... I am immediately thinking of Ice Age, where the big mammoth is just "doin' his duty" trying to fornicate with the other mammoth (maybe that's just being a mom) and the other thought is coming from the rest room.... Neither thoughts are good!
You can completely get rid of the Thumbs Down! paragraph. We want to know all the positive things in your life, not the negative. We don't want to know about what you hate.
Get rid of all those smileys and the comments after them! There are no positives coming from them.
The entire last section... you need to reword it all! Your profile should flow, there shouldn't be anything negative. You also should avoid those adjective sentences. Example: I am, cute, cuddle, sweet, caring, kind, blah, blah, blah, blah. It gets old. Instead of telling us you are those things. Tell us about instances where you are those things. Like you like to help old ladies cross the street or something.
I would scratch it all and start over. Give your profile some POP.
In your first date, yes ever girl is going to be different but we want to have some idea about what you might want to do with us. Will you be doing the dinner and a movie thing or something more creative? This is your chance to really set yourself apart from the others.
You have 8 favorites so you must be a sweet guy. Try showing that in your profile.
Happy Fishing! | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/18/2007 2:18:40 PM |  Hi there pnkpmpkins,
Awwww..I don't think ya liked it...
But I feel, you are just yankin' my chain to entice me to argue...LOL
It's not that bad...is it?
Have a happy day! | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/18/2007 3:39:26 PM | Yes, Fish Deep it is that bad.
Too many emoticons...delete them all and use full sentences. Twelve year old girls use numerous emotes, not 45 year old men. Some of your interests are a given and seems like you are just trying to use up space, and some are just twelve year old boy immaturity.
Delete the redundant negatives... | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/18/2007 4:01:57 PM |  OK , I have to admit... I like to use emotes.,./
They add color. Can be useful to denote subjects of interest and I like the banana guy, 
I must have some 12yr old in me still. I still giggle, and have a playful style...
Can't give that up to be a sheeple that must conform to the critics will..
 Lord no...
But i get the point about sentance and word structure...not my forte'...
Thank m'Lady...Vixineyes... | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/19/2007 7:41:57 AM | You said you wanted "intelligent".
You won't get "intelligent" with that profile. It will appeal, however, to anyone that speaks the same way you do...specifically those who feel comfortable dropping the "ing" in favor of "in", i.e. "droppin'"
Only YOU know what you want and who you want. If you enjoy others who use affectations of speech, then you will be happy with what you receive in the way of contacts with this profile.
The one big long line of labels in your <img src=http://www.plentyoffish.com/smiles/icon_201.gif border=0> is just a waste of your typing skills....no one reading your profile is going to say to themself, "DAMN. I'm a POSER! I better not write this guy!"
I like your picture. You need a body one, however, to prove the "athletic" claim. Lotta great information in your profile, but its presented disjointedly. Lose the emoticons. Run spellcheck.
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/19/2007 8:22:51 AM | | From what I've read, people give you help and you're just ignoring it saying, "No, I like the way it is." Are you using this forum just to meet women? That's what this seems to be, that you're not really interested in changing your profile, you're just trying to find another way to get women's attention. | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/19/2007 8:57:13 AM | haha i got a decent laugh outta that. makes me feel good about my own.
i don't think you have a chance of scoring anyone as decent as you probably deserve with a profile like that... or actually, maybe you do deserve the girl that would respond to that.
but hey, you got 8 favorites... that's 8 more than I have. go get 'em. :tiger: | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/19/2007 10:04:37 AM | OK...
Kinda cute but too arrogant and self centered for my tastes. Can't take a joke would seem to fit, as well!
Very attractive but feet stuck in spokey town so of no use to anyone who's not move there.
Some good points like sharp wit and curvactious tounge.
Nice lady except for above details. Of course, my opinon is just that.. mine
Good luck to the fair hair lady. | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/19/2007 11:43:16 AM | Putting it on the forums is a great way to attract attention
It does make me wish you were in my district.....
The pictures gotta go and the main picture looks like you should be on a post office wall.... kinda scarey, you know? | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 11/19/2007 5:26:49 PM | 
I'm open to "all" hear dude.
Didn't think I'd meet "her" here bashin' me 'bout my spellin'...
Have you tried that...the hidden lure thing...
Better to be honest, eh? | |
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| This is me...what do ya think?
Posted: 1/20/2008 7:24:33 PM | | I liked it ..but one thing i have to say is ..there pickels not bananas..haha..what do you all think .. ..it says banana but is it really...?? | |
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