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Posted: 12/4/2007 11:14:16 AM | | be honist please i feel like i have to change it and that people viewed but no reply for a long time its been like thise i am feeling low no one loves me and that what do u lot think i could do to change profile cheers | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 11:35:30 AM | I would drop the bottle picture as women could assume that you hold 1 all the time.
I would make sure the spelling is good.
You could write more in your profile about your social status and your view of the dating game.
I don't think there is a wrong way to do a dating site profile... but if you want replies you may want to spend some more time doing the profile wording. | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 11:37:28 AM | | ok thanks i will do but i was not much good at english in school though | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 11:37:49 AM | Wow, one sentence. Does one sentence really sum you up? And in that one sentence, you repeated your age (already in that box that says your age), you misspelled "laugh" and you didn't capitalize a thing.
I'm sorry but your profile screams lazy. Put some effort into it. You're trying to sell yourself here. There are a tons of guys on here trying to catch the same fish you are. What separates you from them?
Show some personality in your profile and you should do better.
Good luck | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 11:43:28 AM | | i made some changes still rubbish i no | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 12:41:43 PM | For such a short profile you still have four spelling errors and a handful of grammatical ones. That's only speaking to the technical aspect of your profile. You really need to flesh it out a lot more.
There are plenty of people kind enough on this site to review and make suggestions to help you with the punctuation and grammar, but when there is nothing to the actual profile it is very difficult to help much. Put more meat to it, get more comments, edit, return. Do this until you have something much better than what you have now. It will require some effort, but it will be worth it in the long run if you're serious. That profile is not a serious attempt at all.
Good luck. | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 12:53:04 PM | Fact is, you're only going to get out of this site what you put in.
Get a friend to help with the writing. It needs fixing in the worst way.
How about a close-up of you smiling? The one close-up you have is fairly grim.
Good luck 
Martin | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 1:50:14 PM | | thanks i made a few more changes i think its getteing there now | |
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Posted: 12/4/2007 8:27:02 PM | No offense, but put in some real effort and then come back. You are still very, very short and rife with spelling and grammatical errors. Like the wise words above, you only get out what you put in, and my friend you are not putting in very much. If you're at a loss as to what to include, just try viewing a few other profiles for some ideas. That should get you started. If you're not fond of the public profile review idea and perhaps are sensitive about the spelling errors, just put some thoughts down and you can email them to me and I'd gladly help you with the grammar.
Cheers | |
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Posted: 12/5/2007 1:06:18 AM | | dude.be who you are and worry about having fun.grammer shmammer.your not well educated oh well.what makes you a fun guy?be honest.find a picture that is what you is.lol.if thats the one than make sure your happy that it reflects who you are.after that if the messages you send dont get answered at least you know you are giving the truth.the ones that do come in will want you. | |
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Posted: 5/15/2008 11:35:35 AM | better now i think any one think so | |
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Posted: 5/15/2008 12:29:08 PM | Alright, you've made like five revisions already since you opened this thread OP, and it still is non-existent virtually. Your description of both you and the woman you seek are all assumed traits. Most everyone wants an honest, caring, sweet, fun girl! And most everyone thinks they are fun, reliable, honest, and smart! Use some adjectives that are unique and make you stand off the page.
What I encourage you to do is after you've read the Profile Writing Tips, and you've gone through your profile and erased anything that says LONER/LOSER in it (the headline is a grrrreat start my friend) then you should take a bit of time and go through about 4 dozen profiles in these review threads. Look at the reviewers and also at some of the people who've posted their profiles for review and have received some positive acclaim for them. Take notes. When you feel you've got a good idea what a profile is go back to yours and delete the whole thing and start from scratch. THEN come to us and tell us you want it reviewed... in this thread of course. We'll be more than happy to help you shape it then. Until then, adieu mon ami. | |
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