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| Is it me, or does my profile suck (woman preferred, profile is geared to woman)
Posted: 1/18/2008 3:15:20 PM | Ok I know you really like you're dogs but could I suggest removal of all text from you're pictures We know who you are and you're dog isn't looking for a date...
Also you can mention you're dogs thats fine but the first line of you're profile says to me "single man, urm.................. Ooo! I have a dog!" you are trying to garner interest in yourself and though you're dogs are obviously a big part of you're life which is fine you cannot attempt to use them as bait as it just comes off as to be frank kinda creepy and i'm a dude.
Try to tell them more about you, what you like, what you enjoy doing (here would be a good point to mention you're dogs as they would be in context and not simply seem to have been thrown in for lack of something else to talk about) where you enjoy going. Then talk about what you have to offer but in such a way that you niether under sell you're sell or appear big headed. It's hard to get the balence but if you keep making adjustments you will find the balence eventually.
Please do not take any offence from anything I have said, upon proof reading I have seen one or two statements which i feel I can't really rephrase any better but they are offered simply as advise.
I hope you find the one you are after friend,
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| Is it me, or does my profile suck (woman preferred, profile is geared to woman)
Posted: 1/18/2008 5:07:58 PM | | Get rid of all your photos. Ask a friend to take a good digital photo of your smiling face. I hate photos of men with their legs open. Very Freudian. Get rid of the first paragraph of your profile. I respect that you love your dogs, but you sound a bit mad (as in crazy) in that first paragraph. | |
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| Is it me, or does my profile suck (woman preferred, profile is geared to woman)
Posted: 1/18/2008 5:18:40 PM | OP: How many times are you going to post a thread about your profile....TODAY alone, you've done it twice. Don't let the moderators find ya! lol.
Remember earlier today I posted this on your first thread:
OP: I just read your profile. Now going from memory here the only two things I can remember about what you said is politics and dogs. You mentioned each about 3 times. So if I clicked on your profile and had to try and remember something about you....it would be those two things. I wouldn't be thinking "oh yeah that guy with the great sense of humor" or "oh yeah that romantic guy" or "oh yeah that guy who sounds like a ton of fun". Nope I'd remember politics and dogs. Ask yourself, is that the impression you want women who read your profile walking away with? If it is...then you've done a great job! If it's not, then you need to re-vamp it.
Also your pictures are good. You have interests listed...that's good. You need to do a spell check. There are quiet a few grammatical and spelling errors. Big no-no. Make it more exciting, more fun because at this point if I'm a non-political cat lover I'm moving to the next profile. Good Luck!
Thought maybe you wanted me to post it here for you too! lol | |
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| Is it me, or does my profile suck (woman preferred, profile is geared to woman)
Posted: 1/18/2008 10:58:21 PM | There's lots of good advice here already but I'd leave your full body photo alone except change the one with your dog to the main image. Even though head shots usually show up better in the 'my matches' thumbnails, I think it's a nicely balanced photo and there already is a head shot. Guys just sit like that. Hell, I'm a girl and I have a hard time not just sitting like that when I'm at home with nobody to impress or tell me to be more ladylike...I'm wearing thick winter pants for Pete's sake, what more can they ask?
As for the points you want to get across about yourself, why not edit the actual profile down to the bare bones. Then post an anecdotal story about snowboarding to a thread. Say something that reflects where you stand in a political thread too. Keep going even if you have to write posts on Word and cut & paste later until you have five truly illustrative posts about yourself. The type of volunteer work you enjoy would be good. Then leave your profile alone for a while.
Do the best job of 'show me don't tell me' that you can with it. If you're screen name in anyway implies you are ready for the paper shredder (old file, washed up, or whatever) then change that too. Maybe post to the thread about the meaning behind your screen name if need be.
Fill out the needs assessment and personality sections too. Then contact women with the same interests as you and see what happens. | |
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