| Ladies and gents please review my profile, suggestions welcome
Posted: 1/25/2008 10:34:07 PM | | If you have the time take a look at my profile and let me know what you think. I am not sure what I need to improve on. I may need to rewrite certain parts or maybe the whole profile. Should I be putting emphasis on different aspects, maybe some I do not have listed. | |
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| Ladies and gents please review my profile, suggestions welcome
Posted: 1/26/2008 1:10:10 PM | Well an interesting set of pasttimes you have, thats a good place to start. However, I read through your description and, if I'm being brutally honest it was a little repetitive - I'd have been put off by the "I am...I am...", maybe you can be a wee bit more creative with language. Split it up into smaller paragraphs too, long prose essays turn people off.
I hope this helps! | |
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| Ladies and gents please review my profile, suggestions welcome
Posted: 1/26/2008 2:47:04 PM | You have a nice profile! But here are some suggestions for ya... Every guy says he's a gentleman - not saying they're not, but I would leave that part out. A lot of times we women can tell by the rest of your profile if you're a gentleman or not.  I would combine some of your sentences, and maybe add a few more exclamation points here and there. I would leave out the "never married and no children" part. They can see that in your answers above that. Here is how I might write it: (But like I said, you did a nice job initially!)
Hello - thank you for checking out my profile! I consider myself to be an easy going and open minded person. I am very sociable and usually the one who plans social outings, whether for myself or others. I have a great sense of humor, and bet I can get you laughing! I enjoy dining out, dancing, playing pool, or just chatting over a few drinks. Down-time is always important, so I do like to hang out around home sometimes. Summertime brings local festivals, camping, fishing, golf, mountain- or dirt-biking and an annual rafting trip. During the winter I can occasionally be seen flailing down a ski hill, and I curl in a couple of leagues. I like to try new things - whether it be a new restaurant, event or activity. I am financially stable (and emotionally - just in case you were wondering!). I would like to find a woman who is outgoing, fun, honest and caring. Someone who enjoys going out once in a while, but is also happy just hanging out at home once in awhile. If I have piqued your interest, please send me an email. Take care and Good Luck in your search! | |
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| Ladies and gents please review my profile, suggestions welcome
Posted: 1/27/2008 12:28:44 PM | | I will get rid of the repetition and look at being more creative. I did write a profile that was a little off of the wall and sarcastic just to be different. I thought that it may have been a little too much, but I will revisit it. Thanks. | |
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