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Posted: 2/9/2008 6:16:34 PM | Ok before i decide to give up. I'll put my profile up for review to all the forum. I've made changes over time. Been true to how i view myself. Yet it gets me know where. Any and all suggestions and comments oh and recommendations would be great.
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Posted: 2/9/2008 8:19:39 PM | I have no idea where to start! So here goes.
You like Karaoke. Great, why isn't that in your "about me"? In my experience karaoke people are happy and fun loving. I don't' get that from your profile. You must know some woman from your social life. Show them what you wrote and ask for help.
Your geek is showing.
Your not very readable.
Read and learn from the profiles of the women that interest you.
Will gladly review again if asked. We geeks need to stick together. | |
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Posted: 2/10/2008 3:28:20 AM | Here's my guesses...
You need big smiles in your photos. Throw out all but 2,3,6 and 7. Then set 7 as your main photo until you can get a really happy, thoughtful looking photo (face closeup).
You're in IT, that suggests intelligence (as someone else said - we nerds should stick together). So to ensure you appear intelligent, carefully check your spelling and grammar (paste your profile into Word to check it).
Throw out the first three sentences - you need to sound confident. Then go through the rest and remove all the "buts", "though"s and anything negative. Remember, a woman will be reading it as if you are writing to her. So perhaps it would be better to say "when you are with me, you'll know my attention is entirely with you".
If your singing is good - say so. For your date, offer to sing her a love song (or a duet) that will... (insert romantic phrase or lyrics here).
Throw out the second to last paragraph too... (don't mention past heartaches - we all have them including "her").
Good luck, I'm off to look at my profile to make sure I followed my own advice. | |
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Posted: 2/10/2008 6:56:23 AM | | I looked at your profile and I did see a lot of negativity. I've kind of reworked it for you and tried to send it to you privately. I'm going to try it again. I hope you don't mind the changes. | |
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Posted: 2/10/2008 2:48:24 PM | Thank you all for the comments.. hoping to hear more..
Cyn_1969 unfortuanlty i did not get your private msg with your rewrite. | |
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Posted: 2/14/2008 12:32:29 PM | | I know I tried maybe you have a restriction on who can contact you first. Send me a message. I copied and pasted it into a draft message on my yahoo account so I could send it to you. | |
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