| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 9:36:33 AM | Hello there all. I was wondering if I could get some help with my profile.
I'm wondering if there's any way I can fix up my profile to maybe help out my odds a little.
Basically... my profile describes me... more or less. It's hard to really describe who you are with just words.
I wonder if maybe I make myself seem TOO geeky for some... though I am a proud geek. :p
Because I do go out and have fun too... as I've stated.
I just seem to be suffering from the dreaded "Read/Deleted" syndrome. And I was wondering if there was something I could do to hopefully find some more success.
I'd really appreciate any help you ladies can give me. After all, you are the ones I'm trying to make a good impression on. ;)
Thanks to everyone who takes the time to give me a hand. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 10:49:16 AM | I don't think it makes you appear "too geeky".
If you consider yourself to be a "proud geek", then I'd think you're profile should reflect some of that geekieness, so that it may help you to get noticed by women who'd be interested in such a guy.
The problem I do see in your profile, has nothing to do with appearing "geeky".
The problem is that you appear to be too eager to prove that you're some kind of chivalrous nice guy who's ready to come to a woman's rescue.
Get rid of some of this crap:
Chivalry isn't dead.
treating a woman like a princess
charging around on my white horse 
A nice guy I may be 
My shoulder is always there to cry on By making too much of an effort, to publicly proclaim yourself as the nice guy who's ready to offer a shoulder to cry on, you're likely gonna frighten off a lot of women.
Being chivalrous and nice is a good thing.
But having a need to publicly announce that you intend to be chivalrous and nice, makes you seem like some kind of weirdo who's about to smother women with attempts to prove that you're mister nice. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 10:53:44 AM | Hmm... I can see your point.
I guess I just say it because, well, it's the way I am. It's all the things I keep hearing from others.
So, I figure it would make a good description of how I am. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 11:43:51 AM | Crop and utilize the picture of yourself in the gray shirt.
I'd switch your subheadings to the top and put the rest lower. As much as I love Shadowrun myself... most women here aren't going to be gamers... you should lead with the nice focused sections. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 12:49:19 PM | | I think the profile is pretty good. Nothing wrong with the geek stuff. I do agree with Someplace on the sappy crap - I'd cut some of that out. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 3:47:23 PM | Adam, I started reading your profile and got kinda bored right away. But, I kept reading because I see you in Forums all the time and read your posts, and I know that you are a gentle and sensitive man, and wanted to give you some hopefully helpful input.
How To Recognize a Geek 101 - They say "I'm not a geek." Well, you proclaim yourself a geek and proud of it, good for you. No problem here.
How to Recognize a Doormat 101 - They say "I'm not a doormat." Take that off. You don't need to either flag yourself for women who like to take advantage of you or make the other women wonder if you are spineless.
Your First Date section seems to roll through all available options. Pick something definitive and put that out there, and sound open to alternatives. In other words, make it sound like "i can make a choice, also willing to lisen to your ideas".
I'm a big proponent about putting your best material first to hook them and make them want them to read more. Your opening doesn't really hook a reader. It might help to rearrange your material but I think you need to create a new opener.
A poster wrote something to you about the suggestion that you want to appear to a be a nice guy or chivalrous guy. We women do read that a lot and we are skeptical when we read it and it does raise a red flag. You don't need to focus on that so much, especially considering that you appear to have many other interesting aspects to your persona. Leave it to the guy who has nothing else going on to write ad infinitum about his chivalry.
So, best wishes and good luck on your updates and I'll see you around the Forums! | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/15/2008 4:14:06 PM | Ok, first off, you're very organized! Wow! A guy who is organized... Love it.
However, it's a bit long. You've lost me about half way through. Perhaps taking out about half of all sections, keeping what matters most to you? Leave it alone for a day and read it again to see if it's still too long.
I would change your main photo, even if it was taken at 3 am, the caption doesn't show until you click on the profile. I'd use the last one but crop it a little bit. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/16/2008 10:23:12 AM | Okay... thanks for the great advice.
I've tried editing it up a bit more.
I'm not quite sure what to remove though...
I did change the picture. Better? | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/16/2008 10:39:48 AM | Yes, much better. It captures the great smile you have.
One suggestion that I would make is create paragraphs. Right now, it's a bunch of sentences and although they flow ok, it's not in paragraph form. It looks too much like a list.
I would also suggest removing the explanation of the pics. I think you have captions on the photos already so it's taking unnecessary space in your profile.
To me, profiles are a work in progress. Don't hesitate to rotate or change info. Also, I'm not sure about the testimonials. I don't know, I find them to be a double edge sword. It could means you're quite the ladies man and I'm probably going to be just one of many, many, many women you know and date in this site. I don't know how others feel about them, personally, I don't quite like them. | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/16/2008 10:49:39 AM | Okay... so I made it into paragraphs instead of just sentences.
I've tried to think of how I can reword things to better show my sense of humor and all that... but, well, I guess I'm not all that good at describing myself in such a matter.
I can joke about things... but trying to do so while still explaining who I am is harder than I thought. LOL! | |
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| I think my profile needs a tune up. :)
Posted: 3/16/2008 2:42:47 PM | Looks very good. Resist the temptation of putting everything in your profile, leave tidbits for people to find out.
My art teacher used to tell me ".... leave it alone, take a few steps back, a break, and look at it with fresh eyes, otherwise, you overdo it and it shows." It's a work in progress. Look at it once more in a few days then go fishing again. Best of luck. | |
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