| Anyone game for a review? Come on, I won't bite.....teehee
Posted: 3/27/2008 10:20:07 PM | I will be happy to give you my thoughts and creative criticism/suggestions...I will be honest and fair...but never rude or hurtful 
Okay...so, who's gonna jump feet first? ....Whoa, not everyone at once now...LOL
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| Anyone game for a review? Come on, I won't bite.....teehee
Posted: 3/29/2008 2:09:43 PM | Hi Joel:
First, I love picture #5....shows a better side of you, I would use it as your primary :)
all-in-all, your profile is pretty good. I think with a little tweaking and you could see many "fish"in your boat 
**repulsive is an awfully strong adjective to use, especially in the 2 dimensional world..consider omitting it all together...try replacing your turn-offs with the qualities that you "are" looking for rather than what you are not searching.
I advise you go back and check your grammar, spelling and punctuation- it may sound trivial, but I promise, women notice
Good luck fishing and keep me posted 
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Posted: 3/29/2008 2:17:37 PM | Hi Timberwolf :)
Yes, you are a cutie 
The first thing I suggest you do is go back and check your grammar and spelling. I know it sounds petty, but trust me on this. It matters. Have a friend help you if English was not one of your better subjects.
Also, add some of the qualities that you are looking for in a woman...there is a wide variety out there from demure' to demented, so close the gap a little.
Other than that, I think you started out pretty good.
Happy fishing!!
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Posted: 3/29/2008 2:31:43 PM | Hi RnB
The first thing I suggest you do is lose your opening line. If a woman sees that you are on here "just for kicks" she is going to hit the next button before you draw your next breath.
Also, you may want to tone done your "into" list to just a few. I began reading them and zoned out after the fist few...try separating them into individual sentences like you did in paragraph 3.
Your aspirations sound great!
The rest of your profile rolls along smoothly..I like it.
Try the changes and let me know :)
Happy Fishing,
Lisa
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Posted: 3/29/2008 3:02:47 PM | Hi ????
The first thing I noticed is that your profile has no name - and unless your name is "Prince" that is just not going to work here. Women want to respond to a name - any name.
Also, 90% of profiles with out a picture get passed completely over. I know, it may sound shallow, but let's be honest here, you must attract the eye before you can attract the ear. If for some reason you are unable to load a photo, make that you opening quote, such as **Pictures arriving soon** and then explain there absence in your profile.
I don't have a Harley, no tattoos, no SUV.... shorten this list and omit the double negatives... also lose the boob jobs, the fake tans... line altogether - although the paragraph that follows is quite tasteful and sincere sounding. Good job on that!! Your response to first date is whimsical, I like it..but shorten it some and share the highlights with your contacts :) Your profile exemplifies creativity and articulation both very redeeming qualities. :) Keep me in the know and Happy Fishing!!! Lisa | |
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Posted: 3/29/2008 3:08:30 PM | Wow..Lance58.
I'm impressed. You profile is VERY well written. You describe your self and what you are looking for beautifully. I only suggest you go back and tweak you capitalizations and punctuations (some of your sentences had me out running out of breath before I came to a period )haha
I also suggest using your las picture as your primary. It shows your handsome face.
Good job!!
Good luck to you and Happy Fishing
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Posted: 3/29/2008 3:19:10 PM | Hi Trilus
Then only thing I can tell you is that if I were a "cougar" you'd be in trouble 
Your profile was perfect...very well thought out and honest.
You are absolutely adorable :)
I have a feeling you will not be on here for very lon
Good luck and happy fishing!
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Posted: 3/29/2008 3:25:03 PM | Travelicious,
You are darlin' (that is "darling" in Mississippi )
I loved your profile. A bit on the short side but poignant..so it works well :o)
Besides the English carry a special place in my heart 
Happy fishing
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| Anyone game for a review? Come on, I won't bite.....teehee
Posted: 3/29/2008 3:30:31 PM | Hi kriesybear,
I liked your profile :) the only thing I would suggest is to go back and add necessary punctuations where they are needed. I found myself having to read a few sentences over because they ran together with the next one, but aside from that "KUDO's " to you!!
Too bad you don't live closer to me (maybe some "Southern Hospitality" would do a body good  )LOL
Happy fishing,
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Posted: 3/29/2008 3:34:55 PM | To Fishnutz:
Why thank you very much...it's nice to have the "teacher" graded
I appreciate the kind words, and yes, I do read each and every one thoroughly. Otherwise I would be doing an injustice to those that requested my opinion right? :)
Thanks again love..
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Posted: 3/29/2008 3:41:56 PM | Hi Dazzajim,
Mercy, another Englishman...be still my beating heart
I enjoyed reading your profile...I particularly liked how you tucked your accent in there :)
very creative!!
If talk/email is all you are looking for, then you may get slow response, try -hang out- but if your are looking to date some, go ahead, show that daring side you say you have and put it up there
Good profile!
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