| Would someone be kind enough to review my profile
Posted: 4/22/2008 10:21:54 AM | Hey all, I would love some tips on how to improve my profile. I'm not exactly sure what I am missing but it feels like something isn't there that should be. Your help would be greatly appreciated.
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| Would someone be kind enough to review my profile
Posted: 4/22/2008 10:46:33 AM | Headline - about average, I think. Not horrible, not wonderful.
Pictures are good, except for second one. Not very flattering. On the other hand, pink hat is great.
Interests are pretty good, except that too many are guy interests. Might want to scour profiles of women your age and see if there are interest in them that you can legitimately list as your own, so that you can be found on interest search.
Text is mostly about your interests, but not a lot about your personality or your match. I'd add to that. I'd also rephrase the last sentence - it comes out a bit too negative. Try to express that sentiment as a positive one - something along the lines of "My life is full of interesting stuff". Women like when you lead a full life a lot more than what this sentence comes out as - "I don't have much time for you".
First date is conventional, but it should be that way. No changes I see needed there. | |
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| Would someone be kind enough to review my profile
Posted: 4/22/2008 1:50:41 PM | I'm going to have a go at your pictures. Please understand that this is friendly fire here, because we're both above "average" in height and have huge melons for heads. You're seven inches taller and quite a bit larger, so everything I've experienced has affected you to a greater degree. You need to figure out how to take a picture without having the camera pointed at your chin. Get a taller photographer or have someone stand on a chair but get that camera somewhere near eye (yours) level. Additionally, if the camera is close with the lens zoomed out, our facial features will come off quite unflattering. Make sure you're no closer to the camera than 5-6 feet. That means those "at-arms-length" shots so popular on MySpace and FaceBook are a no-no.
Shave. Shave when you first get up in the morning, then shave again when you intend to take your picture. You have dark hair and even the slightest stubble will have you looking like Fred Flintstone. Also, here's another reality of having a shaved head. Dark hair + light skin = green complexion. This is tough to counteract without makeup. I'd suggest to always try to stand under or close to the light source. You know how when you're standing for a group photo and they say "tall people to the back"? Well, screw that. No light gets back there and we once again end up looking like Schreck. Walk to the front of the group and take a knee. Why, because you can. If one of the short folks complains, tell them you'll grind their bones to make your bread.
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| Would someone be kind enough to review my profile
Posted: 4/22/2008 9:12:11 PM | Well, I agree with SubSonicBoom, but not Constance. I think you are *WORKING* that fuzzy pink hat, and yes, they are awesome.
Now, you say you're, "full of humor and laugh at everything I can, including myself." But there's not a scrap of that humor in your profile. Don't TELL us you're funny, show it! If you "laugh at cynicism everyday" (which is an intriguing concept), tell us how. Give us an example of what you mean so we can understand you better.
As a friend, I am asking you to not shave your head anymore. Grow hair until you can't anymore.
Your idea of going for coffee or dinner for a first date is a snooze. Come on! You're different! Use your creativity and humor to come up with a fun or funny first date idea that will leave us with a strong impression about you - good or bad. | |
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| Would someone be kind enough to review my profile
Posted: 4/23/2008 8:48:43 AM | I absolutely agree with ShirleyUJest and Yevgeny, and yes, you are working that fuzzy pink hat, it rocks.
You have a very well written and expressed profile. My one suggestion is to trim the length by 10%, but it is only my opinion, and it is a great profile.
All the best. | |
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