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Posted: 4/23/2008 8:19:18 PM | Hi,
I am newly back in the pond after almost half a year and have rewritten my profile. I am not certain how it comes across so would like some honest, constructive feedback.
Thank you in advance for taking a look. | |
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| Newly created profile, please provide feedback
Posted: 4/23/2008 8:33:05 PM | Just a couple of quick suggestions then I'll leave you alone since you're a returned fishie :-)
The text was well written, I prefer paragraphs but that's just me. I did get that you are loyal, social, creative and have a sense of humor. Maybe a bit about the type of man you're looking for on this voyage.
Liked the pics. you have as well, but it would be to your advantage to put at least one full body shot on as well. They're going to ask anyways :-)
I think I would add these in the interest section; silver smithing, beading, chip carving, stained glass...etc.
(splng: acquaintances)
Welcome back and good luck | |
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| Newly created profile, please provide feedback
Posted: 4/23/2008 9:12:08 PM | Thank you! I knew I spelt it wrong but forgot to go back and correct it. LOL
Only had one shot in the last year that qualifies as a full body shot so I cropped it and uploaded. Also moved the silver smithing, etc. to the interests section. Also added a bit of what type of person I would like to meet.
Thanks very much for your feedback. Much appreciated. | |
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Posted: 4/23/2008 9:27:30 PM | All in all, it's just on the verge of being "topknotch." You have a nice variety of pics, and a very appealing way of expressing yourself.
I'd say, while it's true that your first meeting should be in a public place, it's probably not best to remind the reader of it. It seems out of place with your welcoming, friendly tone.
Also, I'd try tossing in a first date scenario that sounds like fun to you. Help the reader imagine what going out with you might be like. | |
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| Newly created profile, please provide feedback
Posted: 4/23/2008 9:33:18 PM | I've added a bit more of what type of fish thank you LM.
Shirleyujest, very good point. I removed that bit of negativity and added a bit more of a suggestion for a first date while trying to still leave it very open and flexible.
Thanks to both of you. | |
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| Newly created profile, please provide feedback
Posted: 4/24/2008 5:36:05 AM | Fizzy:
As others have said, overall it's a fairly good profile - better than average.
A few additional points:
In your 'About Me' section, you have a P.S. where you discuss you 'favourites' list. I'm not really sure if this is necessary? Have you received any notes from people asking about that? Do you know if it has turned anyone off?
There's been a lot of debate on the POF forums about 'favourites' (worth while? pointless? how many is too many?, who pays attention, etc), but only 27 people have listed you as a favourite (no, I'm not making any cracks about your 'popularity'). Twenty-seven isn't a lot. When you get up to 92 or 257 then you can add a note to your profile (but you probably won't get those kind of numbers without a bikini photo or seven ;-).
In your 'First Date' section, you say "...meet for the first time in a group setting...". Again, I don't know if that might be the best phrase to use. I imagine that you put something like that there because you might be apprehensive or nervous about meeting someone whom you've only communicated with via the internet. Such an idea might be ok if both you and a gentleman are part of a common group (say, church members going to a church social). However, most guys would be very apprehensive about meeting you if they knew that five of your friends are going to come along as an audience. The standard coffee 'meet-n-greet' - just the two of you at a popular, but not too crowded place - is probably the best for security, simplicity and easygoingness (word?).
Good luck with your fishing.
P.S. curious question: Profession = DBA. What does DBA mean? | |
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Posted: 4/24/2008 8:10:16 AM |
P.S. curious question: Profession = DBA. What does DBA mean?
In my circles as IT professional, DBA is Data Base Administrator - except that Ms Fish did not have any computer interests, so I am not sure. If it is the right term, I would expand it - it is not common enough.
www.acronymfinder.com is a good source for answers for these types of questions. IMNSHO. | |
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Posted: 4/25/2008 11:18:25 AM | TravellerMike I have seen a lot of comments about people being on lots of favourites list as being a negative. Seems that those with a very high number that get clicked by. I have removed myself from several who had me as thier favourite since I never heard from them anyway, used to be way higher. Since it isn't a high number I will remove the PS about it. Don't really want any negativity in the profile as it is a real turn off for most people, including me.
Yes Yevgeny DBA = Database Administrator.
Thanks for the help! | |
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