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Posted: 5/7/2008 11:15:30 PM | | Could somebody review my profile please? I am unsure what I am doing wrong. I wish to get reponses. For over two years I have tried this whole internet dateing thing to no luck. Does anybody have any advice they could give me? Thank you. | |
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Posted: 5/8/2008 12:29:04 AM | Hmmmmmm, two years? That is interesting! Your profile says you are 18 and joined on 5/8/08 . Unless I got some bad info somehow,what you have written in your request for a review is a lie. Your profile is woefully inadaquate, and displays very little
"drive to succede". I recommend reading "profile tips" at the top of the review page,then apply some thought about what you write before requesting help. We can NOT write it for you,we can only help you refine it.
best wishes
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Posted: 5/8/2008 12:36:44 AM | OMG~~~Where do I start?
The pictures need to go. They scream at me and not in a good way. You can have up to 8 photos on here, take advantage of a digital camera and get to work. The main image should be a close up of your smiling mug. The others can be anything except like the 2 that you have now.
You need to list more interests as these come up in searches. There is a whole process to filling these sections out properly.
The about me section you played hit and miss with, which makes you look like your too lazy to date. Take some time and put some effort in here, or you will be going home with an empty stringer for another 2 years. This section is for describing yourself, who you are. Write a couple of paragraphs that define your personality and character traits. After that include a separate paragraph the describes the type of woman you're looking for. Her qualities and traits that you would be attracted to.
How is anybody supposed to know anything about you or have a clue as to whether you would like them or not if you don't write it down. Guessing games don't count here.
Delete your first date plan and use your imagination to come up with a new all~improved version. See this is the last chance you get to grab someone's attention before they hit the back button and exit your profile. Make the date scenario interesting enough that the lady will look forward to it.
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Posted: 5/8/2008 1:16:58 AM | | Be honest- this is one of those joke profiles for an online review or someong doing an experiment of some sort. Come on, you can tell Uncle Crazy, it can be our little secret. | |
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Posted: 5/8/2008 1:53:55 AM | OK, I agree with loser magnet in every thing she has said. PLEASE, Do not take this the wrong way. I do not mean to be mean in any way. Do away with the clothes. Sorry dude, But a lot of women will not even give you a second glance the way your dressed. I know you say you like metal music and that is OK but if your going to attract a woman you need to dress the part. And please, Let your hair grow out. When it gets some length to it have it cut to suit your face. I see that your not but 20. Look around at the profiles. Look at the kind of women your attracted to. Look at how they dress. I hope you understand what i am trying to get at here. If they have a good profile read it and take in what they say. I will tell you like i tell all the others, READ THE FORUMS. You can learn a lot. One more thing. The pictures you take, Get close enough so a woman can see your face. Good luck OP | |
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Posted: 5/8/2008 7:12:02 AM | So where’s what I take from the little bit that you have in your profile: I’m a head-bangin’ metalhead that overdresses for the part, is very smiley and chipper, loves family, friends, work, fun, is inviting, and enjoys long walks in the park or dinner out. Oh, did I mention you don’t drink, smoke, OR do drugs, and you have no hair TO bang. Okay, did I wake up at the wrong station and step out into oncoming traffic this morning or WTF just happened here?! If you take away the first part of that list, being the headbangin’ metalhead dude, and you stripped you down and stuck you in a pair of jeans and a button down or a polo/rugby I’d be like “here’s a kid that’s got a good outlook on life, is happy, and could be a lot of fun! Right now I, and the rest of the masses, are seeing poser.
All that aside there’s really no help we can give you as there’s nothing in your profile. We can’t construct it for you as someone just said. Follow the advice given by Couboy and in the Profile Writing Tips and try again. Come back to us when it’s revised heavily. Good luck, brah. | |
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Posted: 5/8/2008 10:49:15 AM | | I did at one point in time have pictures of myself in a dress shirt and dress pants. I got absolutely no responses and I sent out about 38 messages. Then when I put the crazy looking pictures back up I met someone. Things didn't work out but I still met someone. No I am not a poser. I really am a positive happy individual with a great outlook on life. I just wear what makes me happy. Id rather not sell out and meet someone superficial who doesnt like the real me. I just figured Id be myself and dress my regular way and find someone who trully likes me for me. As for the hair, I look stupid when it has length and It is always gviving me bad hair days. Yes I am substance free. Nothing wrong with that. Guess I just have to make my profile longer and elaborate more about my personality traits. | |
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Posted: 5/8/2008 12:22:25 PM | Listen Dude. The only point i was trying to get across is when you are trying to attract a woman look the best you can. But, You may as well know that on here you will get a lot of read/delete/ignore anyway.
You don't have to make your profile a mile long. Just enough to let the woman know a little of who you are inside and the kind of woman your attracted to. My best advise to you is speak from your heart. When you message a woman have something to say. Elaborate a little about her profile. Let her know that you read it and understand it. If she still doesn't message you back move on. Don't get mad and send out some nasty message. It will only hurt you in the long run. Again, READ THE FORUMS. You will learn a lot. | |
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Posted: 5/8/2008 1:40:14 PM | Personally i would get some more pics like suggested. You say you are writing a book yet there is little creativity on your profile.
I would lose this line. It will make girls go EEK!! in so many ways, you could mix it along the lines of looking for friends, maybe more.
'I wish to find a lovely woman whom I may talk too and possibly date. '
Anyway good luck with whatever you do :) | |
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Posted: 5/9/2008 12:07:19 AM |  So I did some revisions to my profile What do you all think? The new photos will come soon. very soon. The main body of my essay is a bit long but describes me perfectly and has a lot of information about my character. Also I elaborated on the first date. Tell me what you think. | |
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Posted: 5/9/2008 12:47:45 AM |
Well, this is MUCH better! Good job! Here are my thoughts on "tweeking".
1. "Thank you for taking the time to read my profile." They have not read it yet,if you want to thank them, I suggest waiting untill the end. Say hi (or better yet something creative)rather than thank you if you want to open with a greeting.
2. "Many people cast me aside due to my way of dress. This is a negative statement and should be removed.
3. "I can assure you I am one of the nicest most gentle guys you will ever meet." Don't SAY this,SHOW this in your writing. I think you do by the way.
4. "Emotional baggage and dramma are heavy turnoffs. Please do not include me in any of this. I am not desperate, and will not cave in to the first woman that comes my way. It takes alot to impress me. This is likely to turn them ALL away,even the ones you would love to get to know. I suggest removal.
5. "Looks are a mask used to cover up the evil that dwells within the heart. If you are not pure of heart and have evil intentions please stay away. I think this is a VERY interesting thought. However,you are approaching it from a negative viewpoint, use your imagination,and figure out how to say the same thing in a positive way, and I think you will have a winner.
6. "I am tired of games and empty promises." aren't we all sick of this? do you really think a game player will honor your request? This has been stated in thousands of profiles, long before YOU were here and it has NOT changed. It will NEVER change,no matter how much you would like it to. You REALLY need to remove this.
7. "If any of this has sparked your interest please feel free to message me. Id love to hear from you" Remove this, close with some kind of a thank you instead.
I hope this helps you!
best wishes
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Posted: 5/9/2008 2:22:13 AM | Hey man, That's a lot better. It sounds like you spoke from your heart. I am in complete agreement with OFCB. I am sorry, but there is one thing that will not change. People go by the way you dress. I tell you what you do, compromise. Put some pictures up showing the other side of you. Understand what i am saying? I understand you not wanting to hide who you are as far as dress goes. But show potential dates that this is another way you like to dress. In other words it lets them see that if they were interested in going out with you, (For lack of better words, Please don't take this wrong) that you clean up nicely. (Not that you look bad) I know, I am walking on thin ice here. Believe me, I don't mean it as a put down. Try it, But also stay true to yourself and remember. This is Internet dating. You may get ignored. You may see a lot of read /delete. Just don't get discouraged about it. It just goes with it. Once you get your profile set up the way you want it post on the forums. Sometimes a woman will see a picture of a man that she thinks she might like but she doesn't message him right then. A lot of women from what i have learned after being here for a while, Read the forums. It gives them a little more in site on a man that they think they might be interested in. So post, But be careful. But most of all be honest. You never know who is reading. Hope i have helped you.
One more thing. You say your a poet, Show it. Write something and put it on your profile. It doesn't have to be long. Just enough to show you are who you say you are. Something nice and romantic but not to mushy. | |
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Posted: 5/11/2008 6:57:20 PM | | Im lazy with the camera, but I will take some new photos here soon. You do have the right idea about a montage of different photos. It could be casual and dress up photos t0gether. I guess variety is the spice of life. Thank you for your advice. So far lengthening my profile has helped me immensly. I am actually getting messages. Thank you. -Dre | |
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Posted: 5/11/2008 7:06:19 PM | | I really liked your profile until the negative last paragraph. Is there any way you can say any of these things without sounding the way you do? If you want to make your profile better, I say get rid of that last paragraph. Some of the sentiments are all right, but the way they come out isn't. In my opinion you need to really think about how you come across here, and fixing it will ensure you more success. | |
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Posted: 5/11/2008 10:18:34 PM |
Hi Dre, The young lady is ABSOLUTELY correct! You know I am a straight shooter? Right? You and I have come a long ways since I first chewed your you know what.Right? We have been here for you this whole time? Right?You are almost there,don't give up on us now. You are VERY adamate about the things in this paragraph are HEAVY TURN-OFFS. What you can't seem to grasp is that the ladies are going to see some of what you written here as the same HEAVY-TURNOFFS.
I noticed that you thanked us for helping you,you are very wecome! Now, what I am going to ask you to do is just trust us on this. You really NEED to edit this section!
You need to delete the following lines.
1."Emotional baggage and dramma are heavy turnoffs."Do yourself a favor Dre, DELETE
2. "I am not desperate, and will not cave in to the first woman that comes my way. This is having the exact OPPOSITE effect that you want it to. Trust us Dre! DELETE
3. "If you are not pure of heart and have evil intentions please stay away. I am tired of games and empty promises." DELETE Trust us Dre, you are actually scaring some of the ladies with this statement. Some VERY nice young ladies that you would love to talk to. Replace it with this line, " I am searching for a young lady that is pure of heart." They will eat that up! Trust me!
Now,with that said,I want to issue a challenge. Remove what the young lady and I suggested for one month. If your number of contacts don't increase, you can always put it back in. What do you really have to lose by taking it out Dre? Really think about that question Dre.
Best wishes
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Posted: 5/11/2008 10:24:56 PM | | well i"ve found the best advice is not on what your profile is because no 2 people are alike..we need things to make us different..but the messages we send...think about the message you send after u send .. noting what u trying to get across, what they are going to even read, will they read 2 lines and move on.. look for a small deatil that they note throughout their profile and make a comment on it.. simple short message..sometimes less is more.... | |
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Posted: 5/11/2008 11:01:09 PM |
Holding her hat in hand.
LACK OF INTEREST?
What can you tell me banger?
HATLADY
Well, there's my "WTF" moment for the day. | |
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Posted: 5/12/2008 12:24:48 AM | Hi all,
Could some one male or female (actually both would be better then i can get an honest view from both genders) take a peek at my profile then let me know what you think please.
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Posted: 5/12/2008 12:48:10 AM |
Could some one male or female (actually both would be better then i can get an honest view from both genders) take a peek at my profile then let me know what you think please.
Be happy to darlin, only one problem. They call this "highjacking" a thread. You need to start your own post for a review.
best wishes
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Posted: 5/12/2008 7:29:27 AM | How can it be "Highjacking" when the thread is about profiles? dohhhhhh!!!!!
Have to say i've noticed that you personally have dominated this thread so if anyone has "Highjacked" this thread i figure it's you. Go figure !!! | |
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