| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/11/2008 4:31:06 PM | | hmm, im not geting much action here lol. i know im decent looking lol, so im not sure what the deal is. i need some cute girls to check out my page and review it for me. thanx = ) tell me what yall think, any advice is welcome. | |
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| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/11/2008 5:42:01 PM | I'm not cute at all!
I can get crotchety. Just kidding (my bark is usually worse than my bite.)
Poor spelling and poor use of the English language does not make for a very becoming profile. That one of yours needs a complete overhaul.
What you have put down is not bad or boring. Just very poor command of the English language is a turn off. Every sentence should start with a capitol.
Get a good spell checker.
The second picture should be your main picture, it is clearer than the one you have for a main picture. | |
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| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/11/2008 5:46:33 PM | Wow dude, I do not even want to read it to review it! Take the previously given advice,and do a good grammer/spell check on it. When your finished post back on this thread and we will help you tweek it.
best wishes
OFCB | |
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| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/11/2008 7:55:10 PM | Where's the barf emoticon Shirley or Mag? I'm passing on your profile dude until you decide to reread it and get real.
And by the way... if you were all the things you said you are the the girl wants to be with in your first paragraph, wouldn't she be with you already? Just something to think about. You can implant all the thoughts you want in that mind of yours but until you put your money where your mouth is and stop putting your mouth around dark, dirty crevices you are always going to be that guy on the periphery believing that he could treat her so much better.
If you want to have a few decent reviews of your profile how about you take another crack at this and call us when you are ready for a serious review. | |
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| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/12/2008 5:46:36 AM | I am pretty cute, in a rugged, slightly weathered, large male kind of way. Sort of hairy though. I will assume that qualifies me.
Please use this: http://www.spellcheck.net/ and do not be afraid of your shift key. You seem to have a love hate relationship with it. Work with it, not against it.
First time I have seen 1 Corinthians in a profile, good work on that. Slightly more cheesy than I imagined possible. The worst part is it stands out because it is the only part written properly.
" love working with kids" - men should never ever say that, especially on the internet. "youll just have to wait and see!" - lamer than me limping home after spraining my ankle whilst running and rolling down a hill last week. The difference is a bit of ice and rest fixed me. That needs more work.
Pay attention to what everyone has said. You will get proper reviews when you fix the basic stuff first. | |
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| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/12/2008 9:37:29 AM | I don't know what difference "cute" makes.
That was really a stupid line, OP. .... It makes you sound like a jerk.
Are you a jerk?
I'm not a cute girl, I'm just a grown woman, so I'll get off my soap box now. | |
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| i need some cute girls to help me out here
Posted: 5/12/2008 9:51:13 AM | As others have mentioned, the text portion of your profile is a terrible chore to read. I can't say that I managed to read it very attentively, but I tried. All I can come up with that hasn't already been said is this: your first paragraph and your last paragraph seem almost to belong to two different profiles. The first sells you as a good-time type of guy; in the last paragraph I'm introduced to Mr. Goodguy and his love for children and animals. You can be both, but those two aspects of your personality should be either combined or connected logically by a transitional section (an incorrectly punctuated quotation doesn't count).
In your main picture your face is hidden in the shadow of your cap. Nobody wants to date a faceless ballcap. Switching your pictures so that the one where your face is visible shows up as your main photo would probably increase your popularity. | |
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