| Am I putting people to sleep?
Posted: 5/11/2008 6:22:03 PM | I think maybe my profile is too short and a little boring. I like to keep things short and too the point, but it sometimes is a detriment to me.
Any suggestions or comments would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much! | |
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| Am I putting people to sleep?
Posted: 5/11/2008 7:07:42 PM | Looking at your photos you have two reasonable ones and one that to me stands out to be the least favourable photo above them all.
The fairy suit may have been fun to wear but it is not flattering to you in that photo .
the dating section could perhaps use some work but the text looks ok for the bulk and to be honest its the extra photo that needs deltetion badly that hurts your response times.
get rid of the purple and green monstrosity of a photo and im sure you will see results. | |
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| Am I putting people to sleep?
Posted: 5/11/2008 7:40:12 PM | Hello babeeblue,
I think your profile is pretty good. Plenty of interests and your "about me" section gives me a pretty good idea of who you are as a person.
Be sure to add more pics when you can. You may want to expand on what you're looking for in a man.
I’m looking for a guy that can appreciate me for who I am. I can be happy with a group of friends at a sporting event or in a more intimate setting one on one.
That's all I have to go on. Unless you are wide open when it comes to looks, etc.
Hope this helps some.
Havoc | |
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| Am I putting people to sleep?
Posted: 5/11/2008 9:12:15 PM | Hi Babe,my thoughts are these.
1." Does that sounds too cliché?" This is "filler" and is NOT going to help you find what you are looking for. DELETE
2. "I am not a one-night stand type of person, so if that is what you’re looking for, pass me up." Do you think that just because you wrote this the boys will "respect your wishes"? DELETE It will ATTRACT them! lol
3. "I’m looking for a guy that can appreciate me for who I am" isn't EVERONE pretty much looking for someone like this? This is what I call an "assumed given" it is rather pointless to say it IMO. I recommend deleteing it.
4. "I am a well rounded woman with a variety of interests and am open try new things.
Move this up to your about you section.
5. You really should think of at least two UNIQUE personality characteristics to describe both YOU and HIM. It is very impotant that the man feels as if he knows you after reading your profile, you are not there yet IMO.
best wishes
OFCB | |
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| Am I putting people to sleep?
Posted: 5/11/2008 9:32:14 PM | Seems okay to me. I would say you need more pics.
Avoid key words like "intimate." I know what you meant, but...well, you know.
Other seemingly-innocent words/phrases to avoid:
Looking for something to fill the void
Open-minded
Play/playful
Fun times
dirty/naughty
indoor activities
lonely
flexible/bendy
hot/sultry/sweaty
doorknobs (ask LoserMagnet about this one)
monkey love
water sports
happy endings
Hope this is helpful. | |
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| Am I putting people to sleep?
Posted: 5/11/2008 9:57:15 PM | | I think it is not too long but u need to get rid of the little rusty.. shows lack of confidence and guys could mistake it for anything..otherwise good with info.. need more of what u do in your time...in the end that is what defines you.. and attracts someone with similar interests.. use your imagination how u word it..more descriptive with less words.. like a book someone cant put down.. | |
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| Am I putting people to sleep? - Revised
Posted: 5/14/2008 12:24:43 PM | Looks much better this time aorund. There was only one tiny statement that made my eyebrows jump:
I spend the better part of the holiday season baking gallons of cookies for my single male friends.
This confused me for two reasons; 1) I didn't know cookies could be measured by the gallon, and 2) if you have so danged many single male friends, why aren't you getting with one of them?
It raises the question. | |
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