| Antidisenstablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 8:00:22 PM | Hi everyone!
Just thought I'd request a profile review in case there are any glaringly obvious misgivings impeding my chances to attract attention from the ladies!
I was expecting plenty of Fish, but all I'm getting is plenty offish- and that's plenty official! | |
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| Antidisenstablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 8:06:12 PM | | Well I've got nothing for ya man. If that is who you are all the best to you because it's going to be a while before you meet someone. I think the profile's just a huge joke but these days anything goes it seems. If you want a profile review I suggest reading the Profile Writing Tips, making a complete transformation while maintaining your sense of humour, and then come back to us. Until then, good with all that! | |
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| Antidisenstablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 8:13:44 PM | First, remove the second "n" in your thread title word. Never use a $64 word unless it's spelled right. I had to learn that word for a spelling bee more years ago than you are old, and it stuck.
Second, I think I'm going to leave a genuine review of your profile to the review "experts" here. I don't think I have the strength to do it. You profile stunned me, and not in a good way. It's all a joke. Right? If your profile content is seriously who you are, then I wish you all the luck in the world fishing in this pond.
Sorry I couldn't be more positive. | |
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| Antidisenstablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 8:14:38 PM | Since you're looking only to "Talk/Email" with women, I think your profile is probably fine as is. Your pics, however, are not.
You could delete the main one, which is so dark that I can't really even make out your features, and the miscellaneous one of statues -- btw, no, they're not supposed to be allowed. All pics must have you in them. But hey, you got away with one.
Put some well-light, in focus shots OF YOU up, with a nice close-up of your main.
If you actually want to make contact in person with a woman (or women), you should change your settings to "dating."
Don't know how well your frequent alcohol consumption and drug use are going to go over, though, but I'm glad you're being honest about it.
All things being equal, I personally would choose to go to your roommate's hot-knife party. | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 8:28:59 PM | I've seen profiles with similar content done better, but it's cute. I don't know about the main picture where you look like Uncle Fingerpants trying to ply his young nephew with a glass of cardboard-Cabernet. I second ursulamajor's suggestion to change that.
The only problem I can foresee is that your profile might not appeal to very many women of your age. I just barely get away with my bullsh-t profile because I'm 22 and people have a pretty low standard for what passes for wit at my age. You're going to be held to a higher standard, buddy. | |
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| Antidisenstablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 8:52:54 PM | I have no clue why you don't get messages......
You drink more than 3 times a week and do drugs more than 3 times a week.....who couldn't love you??
And correct your spelling in your thread title...antidisestablishmentarianism... | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 10:10:50 PM | Okay....you got me...the former profile was a complete ruse.
So I've taken some of the advice (which for, by the way, I would like to thank all the participants insofar) in response to my request for criticism.
How does it look now? Are the photos okay?
P.S. I knew there was no 'n' following the first 's'; just testing y'all! | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 10:15:41 PM | | Wow, that's got to be the most drastic change in a profile I've seen to date! LOL Keep plugging away at it. The first date section was pretty good, but you cuold stand to describe you and the woman you are seeking in detail. The main picture is pretty good actually too... | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 10:20:00 PM | | Does seem better, but lacking a bit of humor now. The "prefer not to say" under "do you use drugs" is a pretty major red flag. If you smoke a little weed, you could mention it in your "about me;" a lot of women are okay with that whereas they wouldn't be with harder drug use. | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 10:56:11 PM | I'm impressed that you took the feedback to heart.
Overall, I find I don't have much of a sense of who YOU are. You say you are a fun and interesting person - give us a few insights into that. Pick a few of your interests and expand a bit on why it makes you happy.
Many of the Interests you have listed seem rather... submissive. I'm not sure where to go with that. Maybe this isn't the right site for you. Or maybe you are completely misrepresenting yourself. I'm not sure. Message me for clarification.
First Date is actually pretty good (better than average). At first, I didn't like the smoke rings thing... but after reading it again, I think it works. Your best writing is in the first date section - it's a bit playful and it's evocative. Try to extend that mood into the rest of your profile.
Hope this helps.
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/15/2008 11:42:21 PM | To Duece: Thanks for the confidence vote, buddy!
Yes, I feel my profile now paints a fairly accurate portrayal of who I am. Of course I'm still open to more suggestions...I greatly appreciate the timely responses! Once again I offer my gratitude to all those who acknowledged my request.
Cheers! | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/16/2008 6:31:26 AM | I posted late last night and was half asleep so I’ll give you a not-so-half-azzed review now! =)
While your headline is cool, it is sort of dismissive and****, but not in a good way. You could probably retool this line to make it sound more inviting or positive. It should entice the reader to read on.
Pictures… #2 is neat but it’s kind of blurry and dark. Keep it if you like but I’m on the fence here. Your main still is your best shot. The third one is too much of a blurred contrast, so I’d consider doing away with it. Number five… I have no idea what to say there! LOL
Your interests are really good. Nothing to add here aside from revise Online Publishing so it hyperlinks for search purposes.
You are a student at 31 so I think it’s important to mention what it is you are studying. Do you work in the mean time or how do you earn a living? These are things people will consider. Remember, when most people here the term artist or musician they automatically correlate it with “you’ll have to support my azz while I try and make it big and then I can hopefully support you”, only this time I’ll leave out all the nasty, negative connotations that are carried with musicians and artists.
Change the Prefer To Say in children to undecided/open, or I don’t want kids. You’ve explained it in the About Me text; there’s no need to not say anymore.
Is there a reason that one paragraph is bold-faced?
You should never use phrases like “my friends say that” or “people tell me” or “if I had to describe myself”; they show a lack of confidence in yourself. About as far as you should ever go here is to say “apparently I am xxx” but otherwise you should command the statement.
You do have a few negative comments throughout, such as the cellphone bit, and you hating Edmonton.
You tell us what you like to do but you really make no mention of who you are as a person. Describe your personality in a paragraph, and then take another paragraph to describe the woman you want to meet a little better. There must be more traits that attract you aside from a little older and a sense of humour, as well as a love for music. That describes pretty much every woman over your age.
First date section is still good, however I’d rework the line about refusing to date them if they don’t drink coffee. You could say one of your vices is coffee and hopefully you find someone who has a worse coffee addiction than you so that you can justify the non-problem. Just a thought.
Good luck! Way to accept criticism like a man, unlike others we have experienced lately! | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/20/2008 10:43:53 PM | For Windsor
Perhaps I should clarify:
Before seeking input, I purposefully **stardized my profile. I think that now it is a fairly accurate portrayal of where I am in life. These days my alcohol consumption is limited to evenings when one of my buddies shows up with a six pack or two. Don't get me wrong, I am indeed a thirsty fellow, but lately tea and coffee are the beverage of choice. And as for doing drugs, let's just say that I'm artistic fellow... | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/21/2008 9:56:48 AM | let me say this clear enough so everyone that reads it can understand....
IF YOU DO DRUGS YOU HAVE TO LIST IT OTHERWISE YOU ARE L-Y-I-N-G. Just trying to help you save face. If you do drugs a bit or for creative reasons, list it in your About Me section... "while it says Yes to drugs, I smoke the occassional joint for creative or relaxation purposes. | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/21/2008 6:50:32 PM | Phew! You're really holding me to task! Don't get me wrong, I appreciate the coaching and all, but is it really to anyone's benefit to not leave anything to the imagination? God, I'm having a hard enough time just meeting someone to go for a coffee...I mean what if my usage is considered less than occasional? On the same token, I can see how trying to glamorize such things might be perceived by some as being evasive...
What if it were to come to the attention of my folks? I mean, it would break my poor Mothers heart!!! My Father wouldn't understand. And they're getting so old! You know, I'm just not sure about this whole online dating thing anymore. I'm surely enjoying the time I spend here, but I'm now beginning to think that the pictures gotta go if I'm to be so forthright! | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/21/2008 6:56:41 PM | If you think ol' Mom and Dad won't know what "reefer" means when they see your profile (that has somehow come to their attention), you're sorely mistaken. "Reefer" has been used as a slang term for marijuana since the 1930s.
It irks me to see you answered "no" to "Do you use drugs?" yet refer so delightedly to smoking reefer in your "about me." | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/21/2008 9:37:25 PM | Maybe you should consider dropping the dope before the pictures. Just a thought. You know, it IS illegal. People don't frown upon social drinking normally. I've smoked a half joint here or there over the years, when someone sparked one up at a party or something. I'm not totally against it. But I know the legal ramifications and for that reason I abstain for the most part. But would I list what I have done in the past ten years on my profile as doing drugs? No. If you do it more than once every couple months I think you should be putting it on your profile. But then again I golf with this guy who doesn't ever quit smoking weed, and he runs a multi-million dollar corporation he built from the ground up, and any outsider would NEVER know it.
You aren't worried someone in your community might tell someone else you smoke dope or whatever, who might in turn leak it to your parents?! Leaving the fact that you like comic books or sci-fi movies out is in the interest of leaving stuff to the imagination. Drugs are deal breakers for many/most, and can impact their lives heavily. | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/22/2008 12:16:19 AM | Fair enough, Deuce. You know, I highly doubt it would get back to the folks anyhow...they live far, far away.
Honesty is always the best policy, and seeing that I am seriously looking for someone compatible, I think your advice is right on the mark.
BTW, I am under the impression that in my country, simple possession under a certain amount is considered non-criminal according to the law. Perhaps I should look into it again! | |
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| Antidisestablishmentarianism
Posted: 5/22/2008 12:47:18 AM | | Hey, you're Canadian also! I never even noticed that, and in fact just assumed you were from south of the 49th. I'll save you some time and hassle... unless a bill has been passed recently that I'm unaware of it is illegal to possess any amount of marijuana, or other controlled substance. The Liberals tabled a bill a few years back to decriminalize it, where you could possess up to 15 ounces of marijuana or an ounce of hash for recreational use and all you'd face would be a fine of up to $400 if caught, plus you'd lose your dope. But that bill was scrapped. | |
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