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I would like a review done please trying to figure stuff out! Posted: 7/10/2012 11:15:54 AM
For the messages - proper capitalization, grammar, and spelling can make a big difference.

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I would like a review done please trying to figure stuff out! Posted: 7/10/2012 12:39:34 AM
My suggestions would be to lose the bathroom/shirtless pics and the picture of the car. You're a good looking guy, but those types of pictures generally don't go over very well. You say hardly anything about yourself or what you're looking for; I think you should write a paragraph or two. What kind of messages are you sending?

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Needs to be reviewed Posted: 6/18/2012 6:41:35 PM
I like this main picture with the red sweater much better than the one you had before, but I don't know if the caption stating that it's a few years ago is a good idea. I like the outdoor picture too. I still say you should get some new pictures with a smile though. :)

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Thank you Ladies for reviewing my profile Posted: 6/18/2012 6:28:46 PM
I agree with the lion of ireland about the pictures being good, but I don't think those last lines on the 'first date' section need to go. It don't think they look needy like some of them can - to me it just gives the impression that if I were to message he would respond. I think - in this profile - that they come off more inviting than anything else.

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Thank you Ladies for reviewing my profile Posted: 6/18/2012 6:21:40 PM
Not to make each listed sentence into a paragraph, but to turn all the information listed into a paragraph or two. Oh I believe you weren't meaning to imply that you wanted that serious relationship right away. To me you don't seem the type, but it can be hard to read a person's meaning in the little bit of text that is supposed to encompass 'who a person is' on a site like this. The tiniest things take on a life of their own! A picture at a bar? Drunk. Typing in text-speak? Immature! Misspellings? Unintelligent! Uneducated! Probably jobless. ;) I've seen a lot of advice to men instructing them to remove any pictures they have showing another female in the frame, because apparently that signals some sort of 'player' or catty competition... everything is magnified and extrapolated to 'mean something.' I personally think it's a good thing to lay your cards on the table and let people know what your long-term goals are and what you're looking for here. For the ladies it's scared off, just think of how much time you've already saved! I'm glad you got a chuckle out of my profile. My intention was to save time too! The 'How R U' messages get old fast. Now I only get messages from the brave, lol. There are a lot of nice people on here.

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Profile Review 21 [M] Posted: 6/17/2012 1:24:59 AM
I think for your age group it's a good profile. It has a lot of humor and substance to it. When I first looked through the pictures I had an impression of someone who spends a lot of time partying and I was pleasantly surprised at how well-written the profile is. I enjoyed reading it. I just graduated from Sinclair yesterday. Best of luck to you!

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PLEASE REVIEW MY PROFILE Posted: 6/16/2012 11:42:28 PM
You might want to add a little bit about what you're looking for in a lady.

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PLEASE REVIEW MY PROFILE Posted: 6/16/2012 11:39:46 PM
Me being the old lady that I am, I don't care for profiles that feature video games, but in your age bracket that might not be a problem. I personally don't see the problem with having pictures that show another female in them; I assume that most people have both male and female friends, and that picture shows a nice smile.

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Thank you Ladies for reviewing my profile Posted: 6/16/2012 9:45:28 PM
Hi Robert, I think it would be helpful if you changed the list format of your "about me" to paragraphs. Paragraphs are friendlier. I would remove the warning at the end...I don't think it's enforceable at all... You could add more of what you're looking for in a lady. You seem like a very active guy! That might scare some women off - wondering if they're fit enough or have enough energy to be on the go all the time - but if you're looking for someone who can keep up then it's good for them to know that up front. I think that women are being truthful when they say they don't want players, but - for me - I'd also be leery of people wanting to get too serious too soon. There are few things more uncomfortable than having a guy want that instant relationship before you even get to really know each other, and that MAY be what goes through a ladies mind when you tell her you're looking for "the one." I think your first date gave some very good advice! Other than that, you're handsome, appear successful, and healthy, and most importantly you seem very nice. If I were fit and in Florida I'd message you.

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!!!!!Needs to be reviewed!!!!! Posted: 6/16/2012 9:25:45 PM
I personally don't like the pictures. It looks like you're smirking and not smiling, and it's not very inviting. I think you should take out the interests in the "about me" section since you already have them in the "interests" section. I would also suggest that you write something about what you're looking for in a woman. Best of luck to you!

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Have at it please!! Judge me. lol Posted: 5/26/2012 9:29:56 PM
You asked people to judge you. She judged you. I didn't like your profile either. The pictures are awful. Pictures taken in a mirror, especially a bathroom, are never attractive and if you're going to insist on taking pictures of yourself in the mirror at least clean up the mess behind you. Pictures of arms aren't useful either. Or liquor bottles. Women can meet drunken dope fiends in any local bar any night of the week, they don't need to look for it online. If you have a job, list it. The feeling I get from your profile is that you don't, which shows lack of stability, ambition, and responsibility. You're not going to find many women on here looking for an adolescent stoner who's going to end up laying on the couch playing video games mooching off them. Again, that's what the local bar offers. No one cares about your pride in your facial hair, or about descriptions of your tattoos. You give the impression of someone who would be an obsessive, suffocating, needy kinda guy. Not attractive at all. In my judgment - which you have asked for - the entire profile should be trashed and redone.

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Could use some help Posted: 4/15/2012 4:38:19 PM
I agree with CutTheCurtains. A little more information spread into paragraphs. I love that skydiving picture!

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Am I doing this wrong? Posted: 3/10/2012 5:26:56 PM
I'm not sure why you aren't getting incoming messages or answers to the ones you send out. You're adorable, your profile makes me think you're an intelligent, capable, witty and fun woman. Maybe that's the problem! You don't come across as someone looking for a one night stand, or someone who NEEDS a guy to complete her (guys love to be needed, it gives them some power in the relationship). You might just be intimidating to the men on here. :)

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Review away Posted: 1/6/2012 12:29:20 PM
Well, you asked for advice. I can't make you take it. It's a minimal effort with spellcheck and if you don't want to make it then don't make it.

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Review away Posted: 1/5/2012 11:02:23 PM
I agree with MrRiiight. Bad spelling will definitely scare people away. It can be taken for low intelligence, or laziness, or just not really caring if you find someone or not. Think of it this way, if you were going out on a date you would take some time to shower, comb your hair, brush your teeth, put on something that looks nice and clean - you would care about the impression that you made on that other person. It's the same thing here. Bad spelling/grammar/punctuation say that either you don't know how to 'clean up' or that you don't care enough to put the effort into making that good impression. You're showing up in smelly torn sweatpants with bedhead and no deodorant! That's my opinion anyway.

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Can get some profile reviews please? Posted: 1/5/2012 3:03:40 PM
You write "I am an ambitious, passionate, and fun loving man who has a genuine sense of herself and is willing to share that unconditionally, respectfully and honestly. " I'm pretty sure that should be Himself rather than Herself.

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whats wrong wit it Posted: 1/5/2012 2:46:10 PM
I agree with the previous posters. There is no substance to the profile and you come across as a drunken adolescent looking for a one night stand.

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help please - profile review Posted: 1/5/2012 2:09:12 PM
It looks good to me. The only thing I would suggest is maybe transferring it over to a new profile; I think the new ones get the most hits. Unless you're sending rude or two-word messages out, I'm not sure why you're not getting replies.

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How can I improve my profile? Posted: 10/26/2011 7:00:11 PM
I liked what you had on the profile. I think more pictures are always good, and that you should include something about what you're looking for.

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tired of not recieving any replies to messages Posted: 10/16/2011 8:43:36 PM
Being an older woman I may not be looking at the same things that someone your age would be, but here are some things that I didn't like about the profile. I didn't care for the pictures you chose. They all have the same expression, which isn't very welcoming. I would suggest some pictures where you look happier. I didn't like the look of your about me section; it seemed more like a list. I think it would be better if you wrote some paragraphs instead, and started your sentences with capital letters. In my opinion, not using capital letters when called for just seems lazy. For me, seeing unemployed in the profile makes it unlikely that I would contact that person unless it looked like they were actively working towards something. Your profile left me with the impression that it was made by someone who was stuck as a teenager. All I could imagine was you sitting on the couch playing video games all day and hanging out not doing anything productive with your life. That may be nowhere near how you actually are, but that's the impression the profile gave me. I'm also curious about the content of the messages that you're sending. What do you typically say when you contact someone?

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