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 Author Thread: Just brushed up my profile, open to some criticism
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Just brushed up my profile, open to some criticism
Posted: 3/30/2012 8:37:21 PM
Thank you both. Anything else? Anyone?
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Profile re-write
Posted: 3/15/2012 12:44:55 AM
Your income doesn't show in your profile. It only asks for the purpose of adjusting your search results.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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What do you think of my profile?
Posted: 3/15/2012 12:25:40 AM
A few things about what you look for in a woman would help. Just make sure that they are simple things. The goal with this is to make it seem like a fun challenge rather than a narrow requirement.

JT

PS I have a thread under profile reviews. I like to offer help to others, but could use a bit myself, as well.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Any suggestions would be great!
Posted: 3/15/2012 12:14:54 AM
Oh dear. I'm sorry, but I lost track. Looked at it again and everything seems just fine. Sorry.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
Msg: 26 (view)
 
be honest does my profile come off as too strong?
Posted: 3/15/2012 12:03:40 AM
I don't mean to harp on grammer, however, starting sentences with a capital letter will help. Not just for correctness, the text was hard to read. Having first letter caps makes it easier on the viewers eyes. Having a description that doesn't force you to have to back track to make sure you read it correctly will be a big help, I think.

JT

PS you go first has a good point. You cannot wait around for what you are looking for, you have to hunt a bit for it. Sending the first message will put a guy on the spot and could force him to show his true intentions sooner.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
Msg: 3 (view)
 
So wadda think of my profile
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:50:53 PM
Intrests, intrests, intrests. These are your springboards for conversation. With so few listed, people might think your boring, or hiding something(women hate secrets that they are not in on).

JT
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Redid the whole Profile constructive critisim?
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:45:36 PM
You may consider adding a few more interests. In your description, you spoke of putting on the mitts and kicking butt, so I take it you've had some training. You could list your martial arts/self-defense training as an interest.

Also you don't live in the Denver Metro area, but thats more my problem, I guess. Being with a woman who could put my face in the the dirt would definitely be a big plus in the attraction department.

In any case, hope that helps.

JT
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Review Me Please
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:33:39 PM
Short and sweet is good but one thing I saw could use some elaboration. You could go into more detail about TV. Bring up a favorite show, it can serve as a springboard for conversation.

JT
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Feedback please.
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:25:03 PM
A bit of detail can go a long way. Maybe cutting down on two or three activies you like to do, in the last paragraph. Instead focus on some short specifics, such as, why you enjoy them.

JT
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Help Please
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:12:16 PM
A short paragraph about what you seek in a partner may help. Just zero in on two or three points that you feel are important. Try to present them as a fun challenge rather than requirements.

Hoping that helps,
JT

P.S. As for the pix, try to smile and don't squint. Friendly and inviting are the keywords to follow.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Just brushed up my profile, open to some criticism
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:02:09 PM
Please take a look. A little advice and proofreading would be most appiciated. I feel shortchanged on relpies(only have gotten two in the first week) and would be most grateful for a bit of your time. Thank you and I hope you all find what you seek.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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review me?
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:34:33 AM
I can listen to about anything except alot of rap or country.

This is a big one because of where you live(I can relate to this personally). Consider where you live. Many people who live in Kansas enjoy country music. Most people who read your profile are local to you. Bottom line...It's ok to post a dislike or two on your profile, but you may want to rethink this one.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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can someone help?
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:19:55 AM
On the second paragraph of your profile's description, consider removing either the first or second sentence. They pretty much say the same thing.

Aside from that, I have the same problem that you do. So many messages sent and only 2 replies, both of which stopped after awhile. I don't know what the problem is. I have many theories, but I don't have all day to write. Suffice to say the problem is not you so much and that you are not alone in having it.
 Roughneck720
Joined: 3/10/2012
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Any suggestions would be great!
Posted: 3/14/2012 11:04:03 AM
Just a few grammer errors but I don't see anything major. Sorry if I'm not being very helpful, I play the writer most of the time, not the editor.
 
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