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 Author Thread: my page! is it too much???
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 15 (view)
 
my page! is it too much???
Posted: 11/22/2009 5:52:26 PM

hey im nathan im not sure wat im lookin for i jus wanna meet some new face etc etc, im into lots of stuff like goin out and im a hard worker lol well hope to hear from some1 soon so i can get out lol


look, bro, this is not a profile. You are a good looking guy and you could pull with a very small simple profile, but you are letting your mouth get in your own way. Take the time to properly spell outy your profile and that is it. The previous response was right on the money. it sounds like you did your profile stone drunk one night.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 8 (view)
 
tiger_fan81 Ideas
Posted: 11/22/2009 4:56:31 PM
Ha ha!! The first response of messagethe women that look at your profile at first sounded snarky, but she is absolutely right!! Do that!

next, your pictures. The one picture that you have up where you are not hiding behind dark sun glases is heavily shaded. The point of the pictures is for us to get a look at you.

In your interests you should drop romance and slow kisses. The romance part is tacky and the slow kisses is both not an interest and frankly a bit too much to soon.


About Me...
I'm always looking forward to the future and finding the good and fun parts of it.

not bad but not great. You want to really open up strong. Make some emotiional connection really quickly.


I'm extremely confident but I know my shortcomings.


Truly confident people do not have to tell you that they are confident. drop this.


I know to admit when I'm wrong. I know how to treat a woman with a breakfast tray. I'm affectionate, have my romantic but original moments, appreciate fun and funny talk....

Do what you want with your profile, but I never believe in pandering or trying to sell yourself. It sounds like you are trying to convince the reader about what a great guy you would be, instead of just saying some interesting things about yourself. It sounds vaguely desperate.


. I'm the proud dad of a twenty-one year old that attends Clemson.


Again not bad, but not great. At this point I know more solid things about your son than i know about you. He attends Clemson and is 21, but you have not said anything about how you spend your time or what fills your day.

I'm past the breakup and divorce proceedings and excited to meet some good people on here.

Choke. Look, it is expected that you are over the divorce. Any mention of it here screams that it is still an issue. Why are you even talking about it?


Friendship is not at all out of the question. It's welcomed.

Drop this unless you are seriously looking for friends. We are all adults here. There is no need to play games about it. Simply say that you are looking for a romantic relationship not a platonic one. It comes off as timid. Kinda the opposite of the 'extremely secure' guy that you talked about.


I have tried and experienced many things, (some I would like to forget). I’m sure I will meet many new friends and have new experiences in the future, but l would most like a woman to take care of, to love, to inspire and be inspired by....

Drop this entire thing. It's too much. Look, you are just trying to score a first date here. that's it. Forget the whole inspired thing. It's over the top. it makes you sound like you will be clingy!
You need to actually talk about you. Who you are and how you spend your time. You need to talk about traits and qualities that you posses in SOLID terms. Avoid talking about what you will do for them (like bring them breakfast in bed).


About You...
You can make me smile even when you're not with me. You can be passionate and spontaneous. You can love deeply and be loved. You don't live in the past and expect the best of the future. You would never take me too seriously and could make me laugh in case I took you too seriously. You have a great looking little black number as well as an old pair of jeans that have become part of the family. You act younger than you look because I like mature women who haven't forgotten what it's like to be a girl. You know how to change your mind at the last moment and make it seem the most sensible thing in the world. You love and adore me despite all my imperfections and you always will……

This was bad. Half of it was about you not them (They can't make you smile, something about them makes you smile.) they will adore you? It's just too much. You talk like a school boy fantasy of a girl and how she would feel about you, not who she is. Is she artsy? Is she an outdoorsy person? Does she like art? Would she rather go out dancing or to an art opening? Does she like to garden? Give the reader some idea of the things that you find attractive and think would make a good match with you. If you like camping and she is an urban woman then you would not be a good match.
You want the reader to be able to potentially see herself in your description.


Don't be shy ladies, send me a message and lets see if that "chemistry" is there....

this is something that I call a final reminder of how desperate that I am! There is no need to ask them to contact you. We al know what to do if we are interested. If they are interested they will message you or find some other way to make it plain that they want to talk. Again, don't pander. You want to simply present yourself in a nice but honest light and then wait for the people that find you attrative to message you. Of course you want to get out there and message them too1
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 5 (view)
 
Need a profile review!
Posted: 11/22/2009 1:27:13 PM
Pamsfl is correct about it being boring. It seems thta you have missed the point about your profile. The point of the profile s for the reader to get a sense of who you are. After reading your profile the reader gets no sense of who you are, how you like to spend your time and what you are about. It is fine to talk about what you want, but you need to tell us about you as well.

Pamsfl is right about the hair. I would call you salt and pepper, but your body type seems like average to me.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 9 (view)
 
Could you look my Profile over Please.
Posted: 11/22/2009 11:56:59 AM

about the chat issue, sweetie that just happened . Everything else you said I find to be true , so thank you

There is no longer a chat funtion here. Has not been for months. You did not get a chat request recently. Perhaps you had a 'message' asking you to chat, but you could not have had what is refered to here as a 'chat' request. They no longer exist here.

Drop the portion at the top of your profile where you discus finally having finished the profile. We expect it to be finished. It's not like a blog where we will constantly keep checking in. You have one chance to make an impression. Also, it's a good idea not to refer to yourself as fun or deep (or intelligent or good looking or funny...) Let the reader decide those things for themselves. Fart better to display those qualities than try to convince us of them by just telling us.


Looking for:
1. Honest and upfront.
2. Intelligent.
3. No games, and honestly no Drama, leave that for the stage.
4. One that compliments me.
5. Someone to spend time laughing, sharing thoughts, ideas, and at times a little friendly debating.
6. When I want advice I want to value his opinion. So it is very important I respect him. And to do this he has to have ethics, morals and standards of value. Not only have them but live them.
7. One I feel I can trust.
8. One who knows who he is, yet still open to the possibility of learning more.
9. Compassionate.
10. Non- judgmental, non-racist.
11. Fun loving, one who will having me smiling daily,
12. One who will love me for me.
13. One who can put me in his life where he wants to be in mine.
14. One who Loves the Lord.
The above is not a test, just a wish list ...smiles

I know that you are new, so lists are considered bad. They are a poor way to communicate here. Trust me, they are pretty universally frowned upon. Also, this was not a test, nor a wish list. Other than the religion aspect, it was nothing. Just more rambling. These are all base line requirements that we all expect and if they do not have them are generally considered undatable. No one wants someone that they can't trust or will not bring a smile to their face. No one wants someone that will not love you for you. You do not have to say these things. It's expected. Erase this entire thing. What you do want to talk about is some actual solid qualities and interests that he may have that you feel would make a good match or that you find attractive. Do yyou want a man that knows his way around a tool box? An outdoorsy man? Do you want a guy that likes to go out clubbing all night? Is an art fiend? Do you like bald guys? Guys with no facial hair? Actual solid terms.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Could you look my Profile over Please.
Posted: 11/21/2009 3:45:20 PM
C'mon, it's a mess!



Oops, I just was called rude for not answering the chat on here. Well, fact is I am not rude at any time. I just don't see where this "chat" window comes up. I do apologize for my ignorance when it comes to POF Chat.

My Profile I think is finally complete! It was kind of hard. I have so many interest, such a deep person, yet carefree as well its hard to bring that across without facial expressions and hearing a voice. I have done my best to give an idea of who I am. I am a very opened person on most things, there are some things I share with only a select few however. If you have a question/s please do ask. If it is something I am not ready to reveal I will let you know in a very nice fashion =)

Before I begin I would like to make it clear I am not looking for the "Dating Game",I like going out as friends, maybe something will come of it, and maybe one day that ONE Special All Out Number One for Me Soul Mate, will appear. I will not settle and I promise I will not play games with you. So, please don't with me.

I do enjoy making friends and believe the start to anything is first a smile and then friendship, so do say hello. And I promise I will reply to all.

Whew now that was to the point, ha! Okay, Welcome to ... me =)


Your first three paragraphs and then a few lines say absolutely nothing about you. Nothing worth reading that will let the reader get to know you. I then scrolled down to discover that you easily have the longest profile that I have ever seen. And this is from someone that has what is considered a long profile!!
You only have a few lines to get the attention of the reader. After that they will just go to the next profile.
Basically you ramble. You have an entire paragraph as one of your picture captions. Frankly I did not bother reading beyond what I posted as even all of that reading told me nothing about you. Heck, You open your profile with a line that about not replying to a chat request (which POF had for about six months so why are you asking for a review when you won't even review your own profile?) and at the end of the section that I quoted say that you will replyto everyone. That is the straw that made broke it for me.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 8 (view)
 
Critique Please
Posted: 11/18/2009 9:58:51 AM

I'm a bird watcher and a tree hugger... I take pictures of flowers on the florest floor.

Those are fine. I never mentioned the bird watching, nor have any issue with being a nature lover. The issue is the manner in which you present these ideas. Hey if that is you and that is how you really do talk and who you actually are then fine. But understand the contradiction that you make when you present yourself in this way, but end your profile with 'no pretentious women.' Pretentious has negative implications, but that is the sort of woman that will respond to the presentation that you have. Forget the word pretentious and substitute formal or proper and there you go. If what you really want is fun and uncomplicated then understand that your profile does not present you as a 'uncomplicated and fun'. It presents you as formal. Except for the part where you break into bad teen speak.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 6 (view)
 
Critique Please
Posted: 11/18/2009 9:26:13 AM
*sigh* You don't seem to get it.



"Always smile at people you meet because your's maybe the only smile they see that day"

Forget the life lesson. No one cares to be preached at.


"Windsprinter", umm, facetious self-declaration, cause, there is no way I can run 21k in under 2hrs, for now anyway. Still, bloody proud that I ran it better this year.

??? facetious self-declaration??? Are you serious? Do you speak like that in real life? It is a turn off. It is pretentious. Lighten up!



I'm looking for a long standing friendship, who's looking for a friend who can call up and say, 'hey luv, let's go skiing, or cycling, sit on a forest floor and listen to how many birds we can ID, touch minds" something along those lines. My outdoor activities which are very important and varied but relish stability and inspiration in my relationship.

This is just... not good. Touch minds sitting on a forest floor? Lighten up. Remember what I said earlier about being fun and uncomplicated? Would you really call up a 'friend' and say let's go out and sit on the forest floor to 'touch minds'? Really?

[Friends - Dating, but exceptional friendships first is a must.
Sir, good luck with that. That is complicated. It's up to you, but try to ease it up. How about just friends before dating before "Exceptional friends' before dating.


Being out in fresh air is very high on my list of priorities.
Skiing, cycling,fitness running and painting are kinda important cause at least they tell me I have an aptitude for seeking balance.

Good except for an aptitude for seeking balance. Pretentious.



My personality is outgoing and laissez-faire when it comes to folks.

Laissez-faire... and you reallly did not think that it was coming across as pretentious? C'mon!! Lighten up. The effect that you create is that you will be some psuedo-intellectual in person. It comes off like you are trying to hard.


Quiet, but happy and happiest when I'm ripping curves on a blue or single diamond ski run, kick'n gliding on a X-C ski trail or in the endorphin zone happier still with a gal I can touch base with.

In the endorphin zone?? This is just tacky. You all of a sudden started talking like your teen aged kids. You went from pretentious to skater kid. This is what I mean by lighten up. I am sure that you do not talk like this either. Stop the act and just be yourself.



I pride myself on my rather modest but terrific quiver of ski equipment. I love my 4 film camera's 2 bulk loaders of b+w film and miles of negatives and slides.

My next goal is to assemble a modest but productive imaging studio. I love shooting objects d'art and jewelry. After being in biomedical research for so long, my next goal is considerably less mucky/ghoulish or dangerous.

Well, if I'm not skiing running or painting, I'm good for coffee. I'm a quiet fellow but a kind, unpretentious woman's company can't be beat.

Not bad but, you really give us little to actually learn about who you are and what you think about. I walk away from this without a real sense of who you really are and how you spend your average day.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 3 (view)
 
Critique Please
Posted: 11/17/2009 4:35:07 PM
Melangel, You were right on the money. i felt the exact same thing! OP, you ask in your last line for an unpretentious woman and it follows an extremely pretentious profile! It is difficult to read and sounds fake. Relax. Ease up. It seems like a conversation with you would be an attempt to one up each other.

I am a big believer in your profile should show you as fun and uncomplicated. Yours comes off as way too... pretentious.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 6 (view)
 
PROFILE REVIEW
Posted: 11/17/2009 8:23:30 AM
I am going to do you the respect of actually helping you. While yes your weight is a hinderance, plenty of BBw's do well here. The bigger issue is that your profile is boring and lifeless. You make it uninteresting to read by starting most sentences with "I". I this and I that. It is too general and superficial.
Most people reading profiles read a few dozen a day. Yours is just like the profile that they read before it and after it.


I am a caring, loving and honest person. The other person’s feeling are very important to me.

I enjoy spending time with my family. They are an important part of my life.

Yawn. We expect that you will be a caring and loving person once we get to know you. Most people are. We are not related to you. Telling us that we will play second fiddle to your family before we have even met you is a turn off. You are here trying to make new relationships so don't talk about the old ones! As I said earlier, people read tons of profiles when they are here. Generally they will give you a few sentences to get their interest. If you don't it's on to the next. Capture their attention. Tell us things that will make us "want" to learn more about you.


In the summer, I enjoy spending time at the shore, especially the beach. Sitting on the beach and looking out over the ocean gives me that peaceful feeling.

Imagine that. You and everybody else. The ocean has that effect on all of us. So far you have really said nothing. You want to talk about yourself in less general terms. Tell us about some of the unique qualities that make you special.


I am looking for someone who doesn't only look at a person from the outside but will take the time to look on the inside.

Never ever say this! This screams out insecurity! It says that you are not happy with your outside and if you aren't then why would we? Look you seem like a nice person but nice is not enough. You need more than nice to attract someone. You need to let us know about how special you are. It is sounding like you do not see how special you are anymore. Work on that.


I'm looking for someone who enjoys going out once in a while (I'm not a party animal) to a movie or dinner or to see some good comedy (I love stand up). I would like to find a person who besides going out to enjoy themselves is also content staying home, renting a good movie and enjoying each other's company. I like to cook, so dinner at home is always nice too. I’d like to find someone who is kind, thoughtful, loving and funny.

You are mixing your ideas here. You keep flipping back and forth between who you are looking for and then what you like to do. Besides again you say nothing. Everyone likes to go out sometimes and stay in other times. Everyone! The stay home and do movies thing is fine and so is going out, but you are generic. I could just pick any profile out and it would match them (except for the insecurity).

You want to share who you are with us. Tell us things about your personality that are both solid and some of the things that make you YOU! You want to let us know that you are an interesting person well worth getting to know, not just another person. The cut of your neckline on your shirt in your pictures is meaningless!

I am not looking for someone to take care of me, rather, I am looking for someone to share whatever life may bring our way.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 3 (view)
 
Could someone please help me understand whats wrong.
Posted: 11/12/2009 7:28:38 AM
Yup. POF works, but the previous poster has it right. At the bottom of the profile, you can view the mailing restrictions that some posters will put up so that you can't contact them. Things like age or sex restrictions. Distance restrictions. Relationship restrictions like if you are married and the most common one is 'Must not have contacted a user for Intimate Encounter.'
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 8 (view)
 
Not Getting The E-mails...
Posted: 11/10/2009 12:13:25 PM
Terbear1234, You said it perfectly. Bravo.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Where does it say cougar??
Posted: 11/10/2009 10:52:31 AM
Okay. A few things. The first may be kinda minor but, you are showing the nips in pic number three. It's the first thing that I noticed.

Second was this...

Independent, free spirit with a slightly off kilter sense of humor, looking for a fun loving, down to earth guy who gets her jokes. I am shy at first, and sometimes a little slow to warm up, but once I get going, I can be as snarky as the best of them.

Fun loving, down to earth guy says younger to me. Also that gets your jokes sort of says that you may not relate to your own peer group.
And third...

I have all the things some consider important…like a job and a car and a place to live. I have family and friends…even a dog. So I am somewhat responsible and self sufficient. ]
Uhhh, there is a pretty basic expectation that at 47 you have a car, a job and a place to stay. It makes adult readers think that you are not operating with the same expectations that the rest of us are. These are concerns that we have as young adults just starting out.


I am not looking for someone to support me, or someone who needs a keeper. Instead, I am looking for someone to share adventures with. How about it? Are you ready for an adventure?

This is also part of it. A big part. You should not have to say this. It is assumed. When you bring it up and then add the looking to share adventures with. Are you ready for 'adventures?' It sounds to me like you just want a boy toy. You don't want a stable relationship. Not even really date. Just 'adventures'.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
helpful tips
Posted: 11/10/2009 10:40:24 AM
I'll tell you. You kill yourself really quickly. (it seems like the norm today as yours is the third profile in a row that I have reviewed that does this.)

first off most women will not even give your profile the time of day without a picture. Saying that you will have some soon does not cut it. People are not going to keep coming back and checking on you like it's your blog. You get one shot at an impression with each person. It's lke trying out for the football team, but you can't catch a football yet, then just saying to the coach "Oh well I am gonna learn later." It just means that you are not ready to the reader and they will not waste their time.
Then you write this as your first line...

Interesting....lol!!! I deleted my profile only to find myself back on POF... but u can say life was getting the best of me and my views were not depicting who I really am. (What a breaking process will reveal) So I needed to check myself.... I'm back to try this one last time.
I am sure that many readers actually say ' Thanks for the warning' and leave! You actually say that you have issues that you are working through that made you unpleasant to be around. We all have some issues, but you put yours out on the forefront as if they define you. Like many people I did not bother to read any further.
You are kicking your own butt here. You want to get some actual pics first. Frankly you are not even ready to make a profile without them.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 3 (view)
 
Not Getting The E-mails...
Posted: 11/10/2009 10:31:15 AM
Okay first things first. The fizzy blurry, single picture is a big issue.

Second, you went to University. How about showing some of that expensive education and using proper sentence structure and spelling so that it does not read like a 6th grader wrote it.
Your entire profile makes you sound desperate. You don't care how old they are or what they look like. You will simply take them, place them on a pedestal and treat them like 'queens' instead of like people. Brother honestly, most women are not into that. Respect kindness and consideration is fine.
Look you sound like a nice guy and that is good, but you need to bring more to the table than just being nice and loyal. You need to be interesting. You do not try and appear interesting. You try and appear 'safe'.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 5 (view)
 
lots of views, no e-mails. help!
Posted: 11/10/2009 10:21:12 AM
The shark portion is meaningless. Your profile is boring and lifeless. You start pretty much every sentence with "I". I this and I that. It becomes monotonous.


<div class="quote">Hi everyone reading this, my name is Dan.
Perspective will help you out here. You are not talking to everyone. You want to talk to just the reader. Not Hi everyone. Just hi the reader. That said, I would drop this entire thing. Sounds like an AA meeting.


<div class="quote">A little about me: I am intellegent and like to learn new things.
A few things. Again you want to actually 'talk' to the reader, so forget terms like ' a little about me" . It makes this sound like a list. Also if you are going to refer to yourself as INTELLIGENT then you should really learn how to spell INTELLIGENT. That said, do not refer to your self as any sort of subjective term. like intelligent or funny. Let the reader make that decision for themselves. Far better to have the reader laugh at your jokes and be impressed by your mental ability than you simply trying to convince them.


<div class="quote"> I have a sense of adventure and love traveling.
A perfect example. Through out your whole profile there is nothing that shows you to be adventurous. You come across as boring in this profile.


<div class="quote"> I don't like settling for something I don't like to do and do have dreams and currently am persuing them.
Who does like doing things that they don't like to do? That is kinda the point of not liking it. Don't talk about the things that you don't like. Whining about negative things already is pretty off putting. What sort of dreams are you PURSUING? I will stop harping on your spelling. No more corrections. After all you claimed intelligence, so I am sure that you can run a Spell Check.


<div class="quote">I am devoted to my family and friends no matter what and like to be helpful when I can be.
Yawn. Just words without context. It's just filler. Drop it.


<div class="quote">I love japanese food, and Italian food especially pasta, but also burgers and pizza are high on my favorites list as well. I enjoy cooking.
Can you cook well? Can you cook some of the Japanese and Italian foods that you spoke of a moment ago?


<div class="quote">I enjoy listening to music and collect it as a hobby from rarities to popular stuff. I listen to just about anything but not too much country. I have a few favorite artists keep in mind it changes daily, Pop Shuvit, Stabbing Westward, Caprice, Powderfinger, and numerous others. I love rock music the most but enjoy techno, pop, hip-hop, etc. I also love concerts.
Good, except for the every sentence starting with "I". Mixed with the next sentence, it becomes just a rambling list of music and places. Break it up and give it some life.


<div class="quote"> I have been to 3 countries (Dominican Republic, Bahamas, and Canada) and numerous states and I would love to see more like Italy, France, Japan, and Egypt to name a few.
You have now spoke about travel in two different sections. Combine them. I do not like lists and I'll tell you why. Your profile is a perfect example. You have become a 'list' of what you like and where you have been, but we get no feel for your soul. We don't understand why you enjoy these things or how. You talk about listening to and collecting music, but we do not know why? Do you enjoy the music itself? Do you love to dance? Did a friend or relative pass on an interest in collecting and learning about the artists?
How about traveling. Why and how do you travel? Do you stay on resorts or do you book everything yourself and try to learn about the cultures? The list style that you have decided to use simply makes you another guy that falls into the 'list' of other guys that like to travel, instead of you actually sharing a piece of who you are with the reader. You suddenly become unique and an actual person with interests and opinions instead of just another one of the MILLIONS of people that have been to the Dominican.


<div class="quote">I love playing with my dog. I enjoy bike riding. I love playing and watching basketball, watching football, baseball, and the X-games. I love going to the beach and want to own a house on the beach one day. I currently work in radio as a DJ/producer.
Another just random list of random things about you. All of which would be interesting but you reduce them to just meaningless words. What kind of dog? How long have you had him (As in is he a really old dog that has been around most of your life or is he a youger dog that you rescued from the pound? Is it a big slobbery dog that is a real character? A loving and loyal Retriever or a yappy lap dog like a Jack Russel that keeps you running?) You can't play the X_GAmes. More just useless words. What sort of extreme sports do you participate in?


<div class="quote">I love action/adventure, horror, and comedy movies, but I will watch a lot of genres.

Fav tv shows: law & order (any), CSI Las Vegas, burn notice, castle, the mentalist, heroes, flash forward, V, numb3rs.

I enjoy the Cubs, Bears and Bulls, and love to go see the games!
More of the same.


<div class="quote">If you want to know more about me go ahead and send me an e-mail. We are so much more than our profiles aren't we.
This is what I like to call a last reminder of how desperate that I am. Do not ask people to message you. We all know how it works.


<div class="quote">I am seeking a woman with similar interests, who enjoys adventure, is intelligent, has a sense of humor and likes to go out and have fun, but also can stay in and watch a movie.
You obviously simply put this in as an after thought at some point, instead of placing it in the profile at an appropriate place. Fix this.
Let's be honest. This is just more words. Who does not want an 'adventurous, intelligent, funny woman that likes to have fun, yet can stay in sometimes too? Anyone? Just more useless words instead of you actually saying something (anything) that will differentiate you from the profile that she read before and after yours.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Any help would be fantastic!
Posted: 11/10/2009 9:43:57 AM
Sometimes these are just too easy. The description above your profile picture. Pretty much the first thing that we see after your name and tagline...


San Diego... means whales vagina. (If you don't get the movie reference, then don't apply.)


... yet you seem to wonder why people are not applying? You talk about 'whale vagina' and tell anyone that does not like it, get it or understand the movie reference to get lost and seem confused why they have.
Even I was put off enough that I took your advice and did not even LOOK at the profile!!
C'mon dude! Get a clue!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
how bad does my profile suck
Posted: 11/9/2009 2:10:10 PM
Zazenboy. You do a good review.

Op You need to write a profile that is not simply a resume of your interests.


Interests: traveling (been to Dubai, Mexico and Egypt in last two years), sports (playing and watching), riding motorcycle-sportbike, art/music, food

When Zazanboy says you are one rewrite away it feels to me like is is a draft that needs to be fleshed out. The word 'traveling' followed by a few locations in parenthesis is just boring. Same with sports and 'motorcycle'. There is no sentence structure, no personality. Just random words. You love to travel and have been to several places around the world. Mexico, Dubai and Egypt. Next i am planning on going to... I spend the summer traveling the county on my motorcycle. I prefer sport bikes to Harleys. They are far more exciting.
Do you see what I mean? A bit of effort and now you are talking to the reader instead of just point form giving information. This creates connection.


Things important to me: family and friends, ethics and character, my teams (Eagles, Phillies, Temple basketball), making money (it definitely isn't everything but it sucks when you don't have it), comedy/sense of humor; because this world will try to make you miserable, getting out into nature, learning and trying new things

Ugh. Just a random sampling of stuff that you thought up to say. I am sure that your family does. Do you spend a lot of time with your family? What kind of comedy is funny to you? Ethics and character are just words. It's the actual solid characteristics that create the character that means something to you, but we don't know what those are.
To me it feels like you are trying to say the right things rather than the honest things.


I rarely drink, so I don't like spending lots of time in bars or clubs.

I would drop this. Forget telling us about what you don't like doing. It makes you look bad if you are whining already.

Rather go to a concert, restaurant, lounge, comedy club, or just walk around the city with a cool person.

This is 'okay' bit really very little. You need A LOT more about how you enjoy spending your time and the things you enjoy doing.


Favorite Music: Beatles, Pink Floyd, Joy Division, Weezer, Lou Reed, Bob Dylan, Capleton, Bob Marley, Barrington Levy, Steel Pulse, Jadakiss, Biggie, Outkast, Lost Boyz, and many more

Fine, but it really comes off as a point form list. Again avoid that and start talking more.


My goal is to develop a long-term relationship, but I've found it works better when there's no pressure up front; so I'm going into this with a completely open mind and no expectations.

Drop this. It's pointless and just filler.


And I know my pics suck, I'll work on getting some better ones up.

Look you got what you got. This just makes you look like you will settle for a crappy job. Drop this. We are not going to keep checking up on you like it's a blog. You get one chance to make an impression.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 10 (view)
 
take the gloves off!
Posted: 11/9/2009 9:09:45 AM
You are obviously in great shape and good looking. That alone will generate interest, but you list that you are looking for a 'long term' relationship. If that is true the here is the deal. The dates that you get from your pictures will not be with women that feel that they have anything in common with you. They are just attracted to you. The women that actually hope to find a serious guy to try long term with will pass you by as you have nothing to offer in your profile and give the impression that you only care about dealing withsomeone on a surface level. Profession: Does it matter? It does if someone is trying to get a picture of who you are and how you spend your time.
Do you want children: Prefer not to say. Well it's a simple question that it seems everyone has an idea of. For you to say 'prefer not to say' means that you are going to be secretive and deceptive. Another really bad start.
Your profile...

look.....blah blah blah just call email text and we can discover together! I hope to find her, really i do! Until then i am just stuck in the dating game! NOT LOOKING FOR GAMES AND NOT TRYING TO BE SOMEONE I AM NOT JUST LOOKING TO KEEP IT REAL!


Is not a profile. You are completely trying to be someone that you are not. If you are searching for a long term relationship then it seems obvious that you talk a bit about yourself. Just like you would want to know at least something about a person besides how they look (I hope) So do others.
Now you will get plenty of interest due to your pics. Even the shirtless ones, but just realize that the odds of those leading to a productive long term are slim as they will have little in common with you and the only thing that attracted them to you was the drool factor.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Dyslexic not stupid
Posted: 11/8/2009 2:48:01 PM
Afew issues....


I am looking for someone who I can spend time with sitting on the sofa, go for walks and generally having a laugh with

This is just not enough. Siting on the sofa watching tv? Laughing at a comedy show or talking? We all like to sit and laugh. everyone does. You need to add some more detail regarding the things that you enjoy doing so that you are not so generic.


and dose not mind to fact they have to re write my emails and text to work out what I meant to say I'm dyslexic and stupid.

You kill everything right here. people will deal with dyslexic. No one will deal with someone that tells us that he really thinks that he is stupid. Drop the stupid portion.

One of the things that makes me smile about someone is that they can stand on there two feet and don't mined me running off for the day to play out with friends on rainy days.

Do you understand that what you just said here was that you want someone that will f-off when you want them to?

Your profile communicates...
1. You want someone to sit on the couch and laugh with you.

2. You are dyslexic and think you are stupid.

3. That you want to be left alone when you want your own space....

... and that's it. You need to talk about yourself in real terms if you want to attract the interest of someone. How do you like to spend your time? What kind of woman do you hope to meet?
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 11 (view)
 
Just redone my profile and now i feel sick
Posted: 11/4/2009 2:34:40 PM
Well you dropped the crappy parts.
That's a start. Now I read the rest of it (I did not even bother before) and here is my take on it. All in all it is not a bad profile in and of itself. It may even describe you correctly. The problem is that it is not designed to make you sound like someone that a woman would want to date. You do not sound fun. You sound intelligent and even funny but not fun. The best examples that I can give are your pictures. Not one of them make you look good. You are either making funny faces or showing your hand or something, but not one simple smiling look at your handsome face. You ain't ugly, so the impression simply becomes that you are a nice guy that women would want to be friends with. You are aiming at getting a romantic relationship here, not a platonic one.
What sort of things do you like to do socially? What sort of things are you looking for in a woman? How do you spend your time? These are the sort of things that you wanna talk about.
The fact that you do not have a car or a job is irrelevant. You are who you are and need to be honest and say them even if they are not the best most popular things to say.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Definitely something wrong. Help!
Posted: 11/4/2009 2:13:12 PM
Yeah women hate nice guys. That's it.

I think not. Let me assure you that the issue is your profile and not women.
Great pictures by the way. There is one that you have with the fly awy hair at a distance. Drop it.


Hi there.

I'm a nice, chill, educated guy who is honest & straightforward.

Yawn. Nice. Chill. Honest? C'mon! Say something that sets you apart from the literally millions of other guys on here! The point is to try and be interesting, not just list some words that everyone else listed! How does any of those things catch the readers attention?

Yes, I said 'nice'. If you're looking for a big bad dude, I'm probably not it. This is not to say I don't have a temper and aggressive side, but there's a time & place for that. It is almost 2010- long past time for men to get over our macho bullsh*t and rise to a higher level. But if you disagree, I'm happy to listen...

?? Are you serious? That did not sound very nice. It sounded whiny and aggressive. try reading it out loud and see for yourself. Here is a secret, dude. Most guys are nice. Nice ain't nuthin' special or rare. Trying to sell us on how 'nice' you are by telling us that you have a temper and are aggressive and then talking about attitudes being bullsh*t is not working! Trying to sell us on how nice you are period is just bad. Drop this entire thing.


I enjoy hanging with my friends & family. I have a dry sense of humor and can be sarcastic. Food & drink are big interests of mine. I love food, wine, & beer from around the world. Trying something new is always fun.

Not bad stuff here. But details are the key. Do you like Tsing Tao beer from China for it's crisp refreshing summer taste or do you like Xingu Mexican Black beer? Do you enjoy a shiraz from Australia (all shiraz is from Australia. Sirah is the same version just not from Aussieland) or an Spanish red with heavy tannins? I would drop the sarcastic remark.

I tend to choose my own path, not necessarily the one pop-culture offers.

Drop the pop-culture reference. Tend to chose your own path is fine. The rest sounds snotty.

I'm a part-time student working towards a masters degree. Also interested in urban adventures, movies, learning, art, photography, antiques/furniture repair, health, reading, etc. Massage, reflexology, hot tub, and steam saunas are great when I have a chance.

Great. What is an 'urban adventure?

In a woman I appreciate intelligence & education, honesty, self esteem, communication, imagination, creativity,
Good.

and a non-drama attitude whenever possible.

Drop this. Too negative. reads badly.

Usually I'm attracted to dark hair, brown skin, curves, a great smile, and almond shaped eyes.

Really? Dude you just painted a picture of a person, down to the almond shaped eyes. The first impression that I got was you were either thinking about someone specific (Frankly, you just described Angelina jolie) or that you are into Polenesian looking women but were too afraid to say it.
Try not to be so specific in your physical description unless that is all you are looking for. You should describe some of the things that she enjoys doing or how she enjoys spending her time. Is she an artsy person, or does she enjoy going out and paintingthe town red at night? Is she into camping and fishing? Does she share a love of science fiction?
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Just redone my profile and now i feel sick
Posted: 11/4/2009 1:49:19 PM

it's so difficult. I've come back to this thing and I must have sent out about 20 emails. No replies. Several emails from fat, lonely forty somethings. I can't stand these profiles that say 'no players'. I've always been a scumbag, how do I score now at 39?

Hmmm. How do you score? Well if this is what you are all about then not too well. Perhaps the fact that you view people in terms of fat, lonely forty somethings speaks volumes about you.


No negative, up their own aresholes typles pleeease. 'I don't like this and I don't like that, no players etc etc' yawn yawn. 'you know who you are'. 'Hey, it's a contradiction, **** me it's a tautology in fact!!, I don't like that!'. **** off. The same goes for 'looking for Mr. Darcy'. Well I'm Mr. Darcy dear and I wouldn't touch you with a ****ing bargepole. yawn. 'I love to keep fit on the treadmill watching banale spirit-crushing teevee'. No hamsters please.

And after reading the first lines of your profile, I am surprised that anyone gives you the time of day. I bet that it never occurs to you that you are the negative up your own arsehole type with this comment and the comment about lonely fat, forty somethings.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 11 (view)
 
need help , rate my profile
Posted: 11/4/2009 11:29:13 AM

Its clear to me that you just enjoy being critical and then act like you have the high moral ground to do so, evidenced by the by the lecture you've just given me!!!! Im actually not in need of your advice but thank you for trying!!


Again. It was not being critical of the person writing the profile, but of the writing project itself. Obviously you have difficulty separating the two.
Frankly, you choose how I dealt with you by making comments like this...

talk about try to crush someones spirit - i hope you've written that on your profiles!!!

It seems that you are the one that is being critical and trying to act like you have a 'moral high ground.' No one was insulting to the OP or yourself. You on the other hand came out swinging and now have your feelings hurt when you were gently corrected.


For one thing iI didnt say there were no issues with it but i did try to be fair and balance my opinion with what i thought the positives were, as a woman reading it. My opinions were also honest, therefore your statement below is somewhat patronising:

You said that it was fine and that you found the mistakes and issue endearing. That is a world away from what you you said earlier (which is far more accurate) that the issues that he has were hurting him in his profile. You seem to have no issues with coming off as patronizing/having the 'moral high ground'

think you're all being a bit harsh, and over picky,


a bit like the scammers who feed off these sites


To critcise him over his age mistake is laughable

You are also the first and only person to personally attack another here...

talk about try to crush someones spirit - i hope you've written that on your profiles!!!



and he didn't lie he said in his profile text the age was a mistake,

He lied in the profile by saying that he did not use drugs but referring to himself as 'SmokinKroniK' . ( I said referring!! Get it? Get it?) It is interesting that you are so quick attack and point out issues but absolutely silent when they are shown to be correct or not as you said.
Anyway the fact is that he asked for constructive critisim and he is getting it. Apparently you do need the lecture.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 5 (view)
 
Please review my profile - feedback wanted!
Posted: 11/4/2009 11:08:17 AM
Photos #2,4 and 5 are really creepy dude. Like horror movie creepy.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 5 (view)
 
Review required please
Posted: 11/4/2009 11:05:28 AM
You have received some great tips here. Now get to work.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 8 (view)
 
My stipulation...too harsh? Also, is my pic too sexy?
Posted: 11/4/2009 10:33:04 AM

One of the problems with not being any good at something, is that being able to tell IF you're good at something requires the same skills as being good at it in the first place. That line out of your profile says: "I am undesirable and a sh*tty girlfriend." I'm not sure if that's true, but if it is true, seriously, start lying, because a line like that has no place in a profile.


Bwaaaaaa hahahahahahahaaaaa hahah ahahahahaaa ahhah haah ahahahah ahaa

Ohmygawd, ohmy gawd!!
Rothflmmfao!!!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 8 (view)
 
need help , rate my profile
Posted: 11/4/2009 10:09:13 AM
To critcise him over his age mistake is laughable when you are encouraging him to write a profile completely devoid of his own personality, sometimes its imperfections that make someone stand out - and he didn't lie he said in his profile text the age was a mistake, talk about try to crush someones spirit - i hope you've written that on your profiles!!!

Actually many, many people try to use a younger age when they make a profile and then fix it. That is why they give the two week option to fix it. It's not that he has that one descrepancy. It's the drugs lies, that one and then claiming to be honest and trust worthy. Claiming to not like people that play head games yet having conflicting information in his profile. No one told him to write a profile devoid of personality, but he was told to actually put some real effort into what he wrote so that it makes sense and that it is organized. If someones spirit is going to be crushed by a review on a writing project that they did. Literally a few paragraph writing project, then they have other issues to deal with than improving their profile.


perfect prose and grammar on here until you exchange free texts/mails, then find they can hardly write in English. Sure there are a few spelling mistakes that need fixing but to rubbish the whole thing is out of order,

No. There are dozens of spelling and grammar issues. Dozens. The fact is many people are turned off by poorly written profiles. They say it constantly. You do not have to be a great speller. Once you exchange a few emails then you get a phone number and writing is no longer an issue. But far too many women say that they will simply by-pass a profile with spelling issues to ignore it despite what you may think. Besides the idea of deleting the profile was to fix the age issue. If you are gonna literally re-write the entire thing anyway, you may as well take the extra five minutes out and fix it all.


I thought your character came through and you don't seem like a bad person at all, the way you have expressed yourself is in one way quite endearing because it isnt polished. Personally i dont want to read reams about someone elses hobbies.

Yeah he does seem like a decent guy. That is why he was told to start again instead of leave it as is as a warning to others. But that said, there is far ore to write about than simply reams and reams of hobbies. If you found it endearing then... cool I guess. I am also guessing that you are in the minority though. The fact is that he wrote in because he is not getting the success that he wants from his profile. He is asking for help and to rate his profile. He is asking for HONEST ANSWERS AS TO WHAT ISSUES THERE ARE WITH HIS PROFILE AND HOW TO FIX THEM.
If you are not interested in giving him that feed back for fear of crushing his spirit fine, but to pretend that it has no issues is silly. To critize those that point out the issues is worse.
Besides are you not the person that wrote...

Theres also a few spelling mistakes in your text, whether that bothers anyone i don't know, i find it puts me off when i read a profile, as it hints at a persons intellect, unless they are dyslexic.

So you get it. You understand that what you write will have people make think certain ways about you. Like several spelling errors will make people think that you are stupid or lazy. No one knows if you are dyslexic and will not automatically think that you are. If that is an issue then say so or do the work that is required to fix the profile (like run it through a Spell Check)
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 12 (view)
 
I'm great, How about my profile?
Posted: 11/4/2009 9:36:32 AM
I was just going to say - what's wrong with downtown Detroit at 3am? ;) It's not downtown that you need to worry about, it's the areas further out. Did ya see "8 mile"?


I have just two words for you.

Cass Corridor.

Although you are right. Residential Detroit is the truly frightening parts!


Well, nothing's wrong with downtown Detroit at 3 a.m., per se-- I must confess, I forgot to include "unarmed" in the description.

You have obviously not spent much time in Downtown Detroit at 3am!!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 11 (view)
 
My profile
Posted: 11/4/2009 9:28:32 AM

Canam…actually I’m a one size fits none….some Lists I like, many I don’t. Ditto with paragraphs/prose.

Well one size fits at least that size... I never said that you like all lists. Not all paragraph styled profiles are bad, but as a form of communication lists formats are frowned upon here. They are generally considered boring to read.


Lists…GOOD Lists WORK. Bad Lists don’t.

Actually no. Because of the extreme rarity of good lists (as I had said, in all my time I have only seen two) many people will not even bother to read a list to see if it's good.

Prose….GOOD Paragraphs work. Bad ones don’t.

But everyone will try a paragraph styled profile and if it's bad will dislike it or leave it, but that is dependent upon the content of the profile not the actual format.
My proof? You are the only person that I have ever read say that they like lists, yet I read people almost daily say that they hate lists, find them boring or that they are bad. Just because most people like or dislike something does not make it good or bad, but in this venue to automatically turn off a large number of potential readers is silly.
The reason that people do not like lists is that they do not and can not convey much personality. The same reason that people say "That person can make a grocery list sound exciting' is because lists are not interesting by their very nature. The purpose of a list is too effeciently deliver information quickly and accurately. The purpose of a profile is to give you a feel for the writer and a sense of who they are. That is extremely hard to do as the 'feel' does not come from a bullet point list of random facts, but from how the writer choses to express themselves in prose.
The difference is that of a moving funny story and a one-liner. You can't read between the lines in a one liner. You only get what ever surface idea that they wanted to convey.

Either way, our purpose as reviewers is to help people make their profile as interesting to people as possible. Unless they make clear that they are only interested in certain demographics only it is silly to point them in a direction that most readers say is bad and that they don't like, just because we may personally think it's good.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 6 (view)
 
need help , rate my profile
Posted: 11/4/2009 9:02:40 AM
wow.

You should actually take Luvnlife's advice and delete and start again. This is a really bad profile.
Honesty is huge here. The others may not have caught it, but I did. Your profile name is 'Smokinkronik' yet you claim to not do any drugs. Look if you do drugs then cool. There are women out there that do them too. If you don't then cool. There are also women out there that will get down with that, but if you smoke chronic' then man up and say it! You claim to hate people that play head games and claim to be honest and trustworthy yet you start out by playing head games and showing that you are not too trust worthy.
Next your interests.Look, we all have lots of interests. But the point here is to list them. The point is for the reader to learn what your interests are. You seem to not be looking at your profile from the point of view that people are trying to learn about you by reading it. Just like your pictures. They are so dark that we can barely see you in them. The point of the pics are to get a look at you. If you purposely put up dark pics we won't see you.


first Im 38 not 36, missed the limit to change that .

What does the reader get from this? You had the wrong (younger) age up on purpose or you can not be bothered to fix it. (create a new and correct profile. Copy and paste this one and paste it too the new profile.)
Look at this from the readers point of view. Can't be bothered to show me what he looks like (bad pics) lies about his drugs status, will not tell me any of his 'lots of interests' and then the very first words out of his mouth are either I lied when I made this for at least two weeks about my age and I can't fix it now or I made a mistake and can't be bothered to correct it. Either way it is a terrible first impression and I am sure that many people click on to the next after the first sentence. You need to put some effort into this if you want it to work.


im not good at describing myself , so if theres something you want to know please ask me ,

No. That is what your profile is for.


a little shy at first , sometime my mouth runs faster than my brain lol , im honest ,caring , trustworthy , funny , bit of a smart ass , i hate ppl that play head games , I like , biking swimming hunting , snowmobiling , fishing , (not on here ) toboganing , kicking back , did i say snowmobiling ? anything outdoors , video games , ect. i like rock but listen to anything as long as its good ,rarely drink , i kinda have old skool beleifs about relationships ,(not the barefoot and pregnant kind lol) the good parts. i can be persuaded into anything at least twice , lol . Im a jack of all trades master of none , can repair /build most anything , I do my best to treat people like id like to be treated, kids are awesome , no problem with them . been decribed as , funny , crazy , nice , ill tell you anything you want truthfully (sometimes with hesitation but i will tell lol) easy to talk to, bullheaded, (have to agree with that at times lol) im an aries wat can i say ! I normally work as a welder but this year decided to be a roofer , i like working outdoors too lol, im looking for a genuine , honest , maybe even bullheaded, truthfull person that i can spend my spare time with , and hopefully will develop into a life long relationship thankks for viewing , if youve got this far message me , maybe we ll hit it off


Luvnlife is right. You should erase this and start again. It is just a catastrophy! It is full of spelling and grammar issues. You did not even try and it is difficult to read because of it. You start of by saying nothing nice about yourself and even refer to yourself as bullheaded. You have lost (never had) the focus here. You are trying to talk about yourself in a manner that will make other people want to talk to you. You need to sit down for a while and think about what it is that you want to tell people here and how you want to say it. Organize them into sentences and paragraphs where similar things are grouped together. Then run it through a spell check. You just ramble on and say anything. For instance...

easy to talk to, bullheaded,

You may not know this but people do not consider bullheaded folks as easy to talk to. Bullheaded, makes you difficult to talk to because you are BULLHEADED! This profile is a waste of time.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 9 (view)
 
I'm great, How about my profile?
Posted: 11/4/2009 8:25:24 AM
So unless your future travel plans include, say, downtown Detroit at 3:00 a.m. on foot, we can drop the rapspeak "hood", thanks.


Haha!! I actually work in a bar in Downtown Detroit and will be on foot (until I reach my car) at 3am tonight, and I still don't think that I would use the term 'hood' in my profile!!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 7 (view)
 
My profile
Posted: 11/4/2009 8:22:15 AM
Hey, if it's working for you then leave it! That said, the lists are bad. Now we are all different and there is no one right answer but Denversky likes lists. So do other people, but in general most people do not even bother to read lists. They are boring and convey no personality. Yours is no exception. I have only ever seen two list styled profiles that were really interesting and that was because everything that they listed was riveting!
Look at it this way, while some people like lists and some people don't, no one dislikes the conversational paragraph form profile, so why have those that dislike list styles skip your profile because they are turned off by lists? (And trust me, many people do)
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 7 (view)
 
I'm great, How about my profile?
Posted: 11/4/2009 8:02:14 AM
Okay, I agree with the pic comments. Lets get into the meat of the profile shall we, but first before I forget the first date section. Women do this often. Did you not read the instructions? It says describe what you think would be a great first date. Not describe what has to be your first date. It is to give the reader an idea of what you think would be fun and interesting. It is an opportunity to connect with the reader.


Hi guys, I'm Christin.

I believe that a strong opening is hugely important. This is not strong. Try something that shows some personality or is perhaps humourous. Something that will encourage the reader to continue reading.


I am a recent graduate of UCSD with a BA in Political Science. I am currently taking steps to get into law school.

Same thing here. While it is good stuff, it should be further down in the profile. It's kinda like having your job be the first thing out of your mouth instead of who you are and what you are all about. You have defined yourself by this statement.

In the mean time I am trying my best to learn Spanish, I'm not too bad at it either.

Again good information but no personality. What do I mean by no personality? Well try writing that line in Spanish! Now it becomes a fun secret in your profile that will get a reaction from those that read Spanish and encourage them to write. You do not simply want your profile to be a list of facts about you. You want to show some of your personality with your profile. That is what will generate interest. That is what people want to learn about you far more than where you went to school or what you do for a living.

I am a native San Diegan (not too many of us around are there?) I just moved to North Park so on the weekends I like to explore my new hood. Its been pretty hit and miss but that is part of the adventure!

More detail please. What have you discovered in your explorations? What sort of things are you hoping to find? Hidden art galleries? The local motorcycle hang outs? Great paths to hike and jog? Do you want help from a date to find these places? Talk to us.


I'm pretty well rounded. I like everything from sports to cooking, shoes to motorcycles. In the summer I surf, in the winter I snowboard, I ride my motorcycle whenever I get the chance, and play golf on the weekend. I also try to get yoga in a couple times a week.

First off this is good information but, you present it as just a list. You start almost ever sentence so far with "I". I this and I that. it makes for boring reading and turns your profile monotonous.(Try and read it out loud) I keep saying that you need to talk about yourself with detail and personality. Don't just spew out lists of things. What sports? Do you play or watch? What teams? Are you a good cook? Do you cook some ethnic food really well? What kind of motorcycles? If you are into sport bikes and he is into touring bikes then you have little in common, but if you are both into dirt bikes then 'voila'! A connection! Don't just make a list. Talk about yourself.


Life is all about trying new things and experiencing the most you can. I've surfed with dolphins, taken a road trip through China, and I'm looking for my next big adventure! Whose coming with me?

Not bad. Actually good.


Have I piqued your interest? You know what to do!

Yes we do. No need to remind us.
Also you need another section. You want to spend sometime describing what you are hoping to find in a man. In solid terms describe some of the traits and characteristics that you find attractive and feel would be compatable for you. Is he an outdoorsy type? Do you prefer artsy type guys or jocks? Are you turned on by guys that know their way around a tool box? Do you have a soft spot for guys with goatees or long hair?
You also want to descibe yourself in some of these terms. What sort of things do you like to do on your dates? Go out dancing? Go to an art opening? Would you be open to trying a Russian food hole in the wall that you have never been to before? You have given us a good look at the things that you 'do' (surf, ride motorcycles, travel)' but nothing about who you are or what is inside your head. Those are the things that will attract someone to you.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 17 (view)
 
friend zone with ladies (opinions please)
Posted: 10/29/2009 9:22:41 PM
All right. A big improvement. But it can still use some work. First off drop the picture of you in the Nautica shirt. You look twice your age. You do have teeth right? If you do then you need top smile in a few of your pictures. We all look better when we smile.



About me: I love to travel, love the beach and really would love to go to Vegas or on a cruise soon. I enjoy going to movies or just out to eat. I am very easygoing, but in a good way. I love sports --Tennessee Vols fan for life. I enjoy going out with my friends to karaoke or just hanging out somewhere.

Much better. I am a big believer in creating connection with your profile. Instead of writng like it is a writing project, write like you are talking to a friend. It helps to read your profile out loud and see if it sounds smooth and flows. You start too many sentences with "I". Fix this. Try to not appear like a group of just random factoids. Discus yourself. Don't just say I love to travel. Talk about where you have been and why you went. Why Vegas? Do you gamble? Where would you like to cruise too? You enjoy going out to eat. What do you like to eat? Sushi? Thai? Mexican? Polish? How good or bad is your karaoke? Tell us about yourself.



I currently work for the police dept. in Greeneville. I plan to eventually move up into a supervisory position. My goal is to one day start or assist in drug treatment because I like to help people and being a cop I have seen a lot.

So that's what those letters were. Much better. So you are a cop. Great job including it. Look forget the supervisory position stuff for now. It's too much info. Instead tell us about why you like the job. What makes it so worth while to you. Forget the 'because I like to help people' bit. It sounds like something a 12 year old would say.



What makes me unique from alot of guys is my loyalty. I would never cheat on someone I love.

Bad, bad, bad. Loyalty in the way you use it = desperate and clingy. It's not hot. Besides it's way to early to talk about love. It also says that if you don't love her then you may cheat on her... or anyone else. Just drop it. It is really bad.


I have a hard time describing my taste in music and movies because Ilove such a wide variety. If I make you a CD it would contain a few country songs, a few rap songs, and a few rock and alternative. I even like bluegrass.

Someone else already talked about breaking up your ideas into their own separate paragraphs. We learned that in schoool, buddy. It matters. Frankly it makes your profile easier to read and keep your ideas organized. Good job on the music descriptions by the way. That said, talking about making her a CD has a desperate feeling to it. I know what you are trying to say, but drop it.


As far as movies I rarely find a movie i dont like. I love dorky comedies and serious dramas and everything in between!

Meh. This is just filler. It says nothing. Try to talk about things that actually have some meaning to you or things that actually define you. That said, it was well writen.



I would like to find someone who is confident in themselves and has goals in life, as I do.

A few things. We don't know you or your goals so eluding to having similar golas to you is hurting you. You need to use solid and tangible words to describe traits, qualities and interests that you are attracted to or think would make a good match for you. Is she out going? Is she outdoorsy? Is she a sports fan like you are or is she into the arts? Is she a homebody or does she live out on the wild side? Talk about what you would hope to see.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 6 (view)
 
friend zone with ladies (opinions please)
Posted: 10/29/2009 12:43:46 PM
Well I'm not a lady and usually will not respond when only 'ladies' opinions are wanted, but I will break my normal rule and respond to this thread.

Some of the issues are obvious to me. Yes weight is a factor but over weight people (myself included) are able to meet people and date just fine. You say that you are shy, well then work on overcoming that shyness.
I don't know you in real life, but your profile is hurting you.


Self descriptions are usually boring and often not even accurate, so lets not do that. Lets talk about other, better things.

Huh? They are only boring if you write a boring one. They are only inaccurate if you make it so. You opened up with I am possibly boring and dishonest? Bad move, especially since you go on to give a boring list of random things about you.

To start off, I'm just a simple guy. A guy that likes girls. Girls that are funny, cute, interesting, and other various things. TV and talking to friends can be great, but talking to a certain girl can really catch your[a guy's] interest. I don't ask that you are perfect, nor does any other sensible guy. I just want you to be easy to talk to and real. Few things compare to the beauty of a girl that doesn't have any intentions of impressing and is totally genuine. That is the definition of confidence, such a gorgeous thing. There you have it, a brief thought of what I like.

WTF!?! A brief thought of what you like (which it was not by the way. It was neither brief nor what you like. It was a rambling talk about women and confidence and the way that they carry themselves)!?! I thought that you were going to describe yourself so that the reader can get to know you a little bit. It was pointless and rambling.

If you would like an actual description of me then just ask and I will be totally genuine, and won't make an attempt to impress you.

You missed the boat. Creating a profile is about giving a description of you. To not give one is wasting the readers time. Why would the reader just ask? Seriously? It's not like you are Brad Pitt and women will just be drooling over your pics. You need to bring something else to the table to generate interest so that they WANT to find out more about you. Frankly, we are not women. Try and impress them. That was off putting.


a few simple things about me:
*I am very dependable which I often worry makes me predictable and boring.
* I love wrestling
*Tennessee football is da bomb.
*Im a karaoke superstar and i cant sing a lick.
*I dont drink, smoke, do drugs and apparently that makes me uncool.
*I have a very unique sense of humor.
*I dont mind dating girls with kids and would love my own in time
*I cant stand to sit around the house
*I love to workout
*I love to cook, but hate to clean afterwards
*I collect random things
I love girls with unique personalities

Most of this was useless and all of it was boring. Some of it hurt you and you showed a harmful thought pattern here.
The only useful things in this list (And lists are a terrible way to communicate here by the way.Don't use them) was karaoke, Tennessee football and you like to cook.
The rest was bad. For instance we know that you don't smoke, drink or do drugs. You said it already. It's redundant. Ending it with it seems to make you uncool was bad. You seem to say a lot of negative self directed comments. They are a turn off. More than sensitive, good looking or funny women are attracted to confidence and you come across as unconfident. Comments like you colect random things are just a waste of time. It tells the reader that talking to you will be like pulling teeth.
i.e.
She says " So do you have any hobbies or do you collect anything?'
You say " I collect random things."
??? She is left thinking that she will now have to play the 20 questions game to get you to talk, which means that you will simply not open up. Mix that in with shy and it's not fun and people will avoid that like the plague!


-----///\\-----Please
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----\\\- ///----Someone
-----\\///-----Who Died
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----///--\\\---Or who may be suffering from it

RIP Mom, I love you.

Ugh. Are you serious? Look, sorry about your mom, but this is not the place. It's not the friggin' place!! What was fun or interesting about that? Do you honestly believe that pulling strangers into your grieving process will attract them to you and not repel them from you? Dude, we all have loved ones that died of cancer. It's pretty common. Lamenting your mothers passing here while trying to generate interest to get a date is a complete turn off. get rid of the cancer ribbon thing. It's silly. The RIP thing is scary and that more than everything else will repel women from you.
So let's take a look at your profile now that we are finished. You discus nothing about you personally so that a woman can get a feel for what you are like. You say some things that lead the reader to think that you may be insecure. You make it clear from the start that you are not going to try and make a good impression. You ramble. It is entirely possible that you may break down and go into some issue about your mothers passing.
Not very fun and exciting, huh?
You really want to try and showcase your good and positive points here. Talk about the things that people may like about you or want to get to know. You appear to have a badge on in one of your pics. Are you in law enforcement? Some women just go crazy for that sort of thing. They have their own groupies! Talk about it. What do you actually collect? Women like men that actually have some sort of passion or interest in their lives besides sport, cars and beer. Talk about them.
I understand that you said that you are shy but online dating means that you have to open up and share something of your self with the world. If you are not comfortable with that then this may not be the best venue for you.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 17 (view)
 
Am I really not that interesting?
Posted: 10/26/2009 5:42:53 PM

If you don't want to take advice, ignore it, no need to answer to each point defending why you won't change something.
That too, happens way to often here and seems very revealing.

I could not agree more.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 10 (view)
 
Why don't I get responses?
Posted: 10/25/2009 9:42:46 AM
wow Richardo! What a difference! I can't believe that you thought that it would not be interesting to talk about how you are a member of a paranormal investigation team or that you are part of the pit crew for a racing team!! What were you thinking??
You went from a dull dork to a very interesting guy that stands out from the pack and sounds like he would be fun to spend some time around. Also good job on the pictures. You don't look like such a fairy now (except in your main profile picture. This is not a romance novel.You making puppy eyes while laying on the bed is just bad. Drop it), You come across as a strong confident man.

Great improvement.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 2 (view)
 
Feedback required
Posted: 10/24/2009 10:50:33 PM
While there is much more than I can say, start off by erasing these...

I'd like a girl with the same state of mind as myself essentially. I'm actually quite a nice guy despite the cold and 'intimidating' outlook. So, don't be a stranger, drop a line.

Not much in the smarts department though, so if you're looking for an academic genius with Masters and various other types of Degrees; I'd recommend jogging on.


You came across as neither cold and intimidating nor stupid. Actually the opposite. Come on man show some self confidence!
Talk abot yourself a little. you are obviously a body builder and doing a great job at it! We know what you do and did to earn money, now share with us how you like to spend your free time!
You seem interesting, good looking, in great shape and full of life experience! Try and keep it up beat and positive!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 6 (view)
 
Thoughts please - What am I sending out but not getting back?
Posted: 10/24/2009 10:24:30 PM
Hey Crossover Monster!! How are you doing? I have not sen you around in a looong time!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 11 (view)
 
Tell me i'm onto something here! Honest reviews please.
Posted: 10/24/2009 10:23:10 PM

First thing in my profile says " looking for a fish in like waters." This is supposed to be hinting that i also carry this type of personality. Each word listed can be used to describe ones self, maybe people just need to expand the mind more and read between the lines. It seems to be working.

Actually in no way does it say that you are those things. "Like waters" does not automatically translate into you have those qualities. Frankly it is obvious to me that they are just words to you anyways, unless you really are eccentric and zany yet orderly at the same time.

The fact that every woman here has said that your profile is a turn off and you have had to rewrite your profile several times without success means that the one that needs to expand their mind may just be you!

Just sayin'...
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
Thoughts please - What am I sending out but not getting back?
Posted: 10/24/2009 10:06:20 PM
Oh My Gawd!! It's a great profile!! Bravo sir! I have not seen a great one in a while!
There are a few minor issues. The previous poster was right. Drop picture number three. It does you no favours.
The second is drop this.

Life is short ~ Break the rules ~ Forgive quickly ~ Kiss slowly ~ Love generously ~ Care deeply ~ Never regret anything that made you smile

You have this great profile and then you end it with this trite cliche piece of shite!! It's not like you wrote it or anything. I see it once in a while. Don't pander! We get that you are all of those things from your profile anyway. Trust me just drop it. It mars an otherwise flawless profile.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 15 (view)
 
Pet Peeve
Posted: 10/24/2009 9:50:57 PM
Wow. Some of you have issues don't you?

Is this the way you treat all new people on this web site?

I wanted to see how friendly the natives were and I think I've found it. Or at least anyone who responded to my thread.

Thanks for your time. (I Think?)


yeah riiiight...

So you figure that you will find out how friendly he natives are by coming into a forum that has nothing to do with your topic and trashing a large group of people and sharing your 'pet peeves' with us?
Uh huh.
What did you expect to happen? We would all chime in a rant about how we hate when people do this and we hate when people do that? Especially since you yourself are guilty of the same catagory of issue that you decided to complain about? What do you even care for anyway? They have a bad picture that you don't like then click on to the next.
frankly the natives here have proved their friendliness by not jumping on the band wagon and trashing unseen others like MANY other people would have! It shows that they are not petty! Frankly guys, I applaud you!


Same reason people do not read


Hilarious!! I am glad that I read!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
Your help will be very much appreciated
Posted: 10/24/2009 9:17:58 PM
Around here this is what is known as a 'cut and paste' profile. I could erase my profile and glue it to my page and it would apply to me. Same with Phatman9090 and every other guy. Just change that age and voila! A completely honest yet meanless profile! You used a writing project talking about how formidable love is and it's done.

Obviously it's garbage! Erase it and this time actually talk about who you are and how you like to spend your time. Don't say that you are

outgoing, funny, warm, athletic, witty, cute, sexy, and everything else that makes for a well-rounded young man.

Let the reader decide those things for herself. After all she may not find you witty or sexy (not that you aren't just you will not be sexy to every single woman!). Just talk about who you are and those that find that attractive will think to themselves that this cute and witty guy is super sexy!!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
What's your impression of me after reading my profile?
Posted: 10/24/2009 9:05:56 PM
I don't always agree with Halftime dad but this time he hit the nail on the head! He says that saying that you are passionate and like to debate will make you sound argumentative and hard to get along with to which you reply...

<div class="quote">But I do like to debate, lol. I see your point about the impression that this gives. And as you said, liking to debate and being mellow are not mutually exclusive, so it's just a matter of stating these traits differently. If anybody has any hints on that, don't hesitate to provide them!
You did not come across as mellow here. You came across as trying to argue halftime and then correct him on his points.


Also, I guess another note should be the following. Please don't be upset if I write back to debate or argue a point that you make :)

Why not? No one wants to be argued with or debated for giving you their opinion like you asked or. Are you really that eager to argue? It's off putting.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
Too much info?
Posted: 10/24/2009 8:53:48 PM

Your pictures are really dark and you do describe yourself as someone who is really youthful. I'm not sure if that'll fly too well with the ladies, who I assume would be interested in someone who is stable and/or career-minded.

Look dude, you are 18 years old. Your profile is just fine. Frankly I realy hope that this is not your primary outlet for meeting girls, as the teen aged set ain't heavy online dating. Get out there and meet people in the flesh. You will find a lot more success there than here.
18 -19 year olds are not too concerned with a guy being career minded or stable. Heck they are usually estatic if you don't live with your parents!

That said, the pics are wayyy too dark!
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
Why don't I get responses?
Posted: 10/24/2009 5:29:59 PM
Your profile comes across as boring and redundant. It says next to nothing about you and you generate zero interest with it. Your single picture shows you poorly. It focuses on your forehead making it look like a drive in movie screen. Try a different angle.


Hi there, thanks for looking at my profile! Well I'm a 23 year old man and I have just moved into my new pad in Redditch, I am looking initially for new freinds and possibly more in the future with the right person.

A complete waste of time. Why you ask? Well we know that you are 23 because you already listed it. We know that you live in Redditch becaus eyou list that as your city. We know that you are looking for new friends and possibly more because that is your tag line. In your very first sentence you repeat yourself three times... with boring information to boot! As the first responder said, if you are looking to date then just say it. I honestly doubt that your secondary priority is to get a few dates here. This is a dating site. We all know what the game is. Guys being coy is a turn off. try and come up with something interesting to say as your opener.Something that will make the reader interested in reading more about you.


I am very keen on Athletics and fitness in general, and have interests in Art, Music and Cars amongst other things.

Keen? Have an interest in? Yawn... What kind of sports do you do? What do you enjoy? Talk about yourself here. You come across as very impersonal. An interest in art? So how many Dalis do you have in your collection? Oh what you don't collect paintings? Then what sort of clay do you prefer when you sculpt? Pardon? You don't sculpt? Well then what kind of interest in art do you have? Do not speak in such massive generalaities. When you do, you essentially say nothing. We have no idea what your interest in art is so tell us. You have an interest in cars? Do you just read about them or do you build kit cars? Do you race? Have you been to a track day? Are you into import tuner cars, muscle cars or luxury cars? Do you own a car that you are really into? Tell us something.

I enjoy spending time with people and think it is important to keep close to those you care about!

?? Enjoy spending time with people doing what? Being in prison? What is it that you enjoy doing? Drop the close care about part.

I am laid back person

Read ten profiles. Laid back and easy going are easily the most over used terms on here. Try and think of something unique about you to say. Speaking of which...

with a cheeky sense of humor

I understand that you are Brittish, but saying that you have a 'cheeky' sense of humour sounds really bad. Sorry. It may impress your grandmother, but it does not make women your age think 'Wow! That's hot!'

so please drop me a message if you'd like to chat!

I personally like to refer to this as the final reminder of how truly desperate that I am!! Look, no one needs instructions on what to do if they are interested. Never beg anyone to contact you! It's just bad.

I know that I come across as slamming you here. I liked none of your profile. I think that it works against you not for you.
Erase the entire thing and start again. This time try to remember that you want to come across as fun. You want to come across as interesting. You want to come across as confident. Talk about what you are into and how you like to spend your free time. Use actual solid terms. Then spend a paragraph talking about what you are hoping to find in a woman. You do not have to paint a picture but talk about traits and qualities that you think that you would be a match with. Do not waste your time trying to convince anyone that you are just looking for friends. If you are looking to date then man up and say that you are looking for a romantic tye relationship, not a platonic one.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 5 (view)
 
Need review please, 28 Male
Posted: 10/22/2009 10:11:59 PM
see You Go First? I am being nice. See?
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 4 (view)
 
Need review please, 28 Male
Posted: 10/22/2009 10:10:57 PM
Ouch. It was bad.

First things first... dude, you understand that the computer will not respond back right? That little 'wussy' rant that you did makes you look like you may be hard to dealk with in person as you may not be able to properly direct your anger and frustration. We read what you write brother! Remember that.

Frankly the pics are not that great. The profile picture is a decent one, but not a good one for the main picture. try one with you smiling and looking happy. the other one is of you not smiling in an old see through t-shirt.


I am very much looking for someone to be with, be loyal to, and be needed by. I am an extremely shy person, which makes it hard to meet others, and that's basically why I'm here. I'm not really experienced at all in personal or intimate matters, but I know I want a relationship with a wonderful girl I can truly love. I wish I could make my intentions perfectly clear by just writing this description, but I'm not very good at any of this. I guess maybe, if you like just lying there, holding one another, and being happy, you might like me.

Ouch! Erase this entire thing. It makes you sound desperate. Really desperate. You come off way too strong. Look, I'll be honest. We all want that. That would be great! But you seem to 'need' that. it reads like you don't want to date until you find that special person. You wil just take whomever gives you the time of day. that is a turn off.
Dial everything down a few notches. Forget the whole finding someone to love bit. You really should be looking for someone that you simply enjoy spending time with and seeing what develops. That is really the key to dating. You are taking this whole process too seriously. Write about how you like to spend your time. Write about some of your opinions and show some of your personality.


I enjoy exercising daily, but mostly inside, and at my tae kwon do class. I have an athletic body type, usually between 190-210lbs.

Much better.

I enjoy watching movies.

What kind of movies? Action? Horror? Do you have a huge DVD collection? tell us about yourself.

I don't do a lot of activity outside, but I would enjoy trying anything new that you like to do.

This is a good example of the desperation thing that I am talking about. You would enjoy doing anything that she wanted/ What if she enjoyed streaking? Or panhandling? What if she enjoyed simply living outside in the winter or frankly anything that you would not enjoy doing? Don't be so desperate to find someone. Talk about the things that you like to do. You want to find a person that enjoys what you enjoy and would be a good match, not someone that will simply allow you to be in her presecne!

Video games are a big part of what I do to relax, I would enjoy playing them with anyone, but I'm not addicted. I find myself turning off all outside distractions just to be able to get closer to someone I like.

Drop this it's all bad. If you feel the need to defend anything that you write then don't write it. people do not like a boyfriend/girlfriend that drops their friends and life to only spend time with them. It's a turn off.


I can't think of much more to describe who I am and what I want in a girl, but if you show an interest in me, trust me, tell me things about yourself you might not tell others, I find that very attractive. I love goofing around and joking, a lot, but if you can also find it in your heart to be serious with me sometimes about your hopes and dreams and your feelings towards me, I would love to talk to you.

Ugh. Drop all of that.
I don't usually do this but you seem like a nice guy and sorta lost.
You need to fix a few things that will make your life easier. You need to get out there and develop some confidence and some social skills. You need to get around some women in an easy and no pressure social setting. Take an art class, Take a cooking class, take a massage class at the local college, take an improve class. These things will get you out and talking to women and get you a social life! It is obvious that you have little to no experience with women and you are trying to hard. We all experience the feelings that you are talking about, it's just that you do not seem to have the tools to interact with women and successfully date. That's okay! Trust me, take one (or all) of those classes and it will be a start in the right direction. best of luck.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 6 (view)
 
I'm I over the top
Posted: 10/14/2009 5:15:36 PM
Well disrespectful is a point of view. It sounds like you are lonely and more than a little horny. You list yourself as looking for "Other Relationship" so you may really be just looking to hook up (which is fine. We are all adults here) making it fine that you list not sure under children.
If you are not just looking for a romp in the sack then this profile will simply attract those looking for said romp.
 canam miles
Joined: 7/14/2007
Msg: 3 (view)
 
What kind of impression am I giving off?
Posted: 10/11/2009 2:59:00 PM
Ouch.
There is some great and some bad. You have the makings of a good profile, but you have some missteps.
Your pics are good. I like them.

Your interests... you list them in the profile, but just have many. It smacks of laziness and lack of effort. The interests are searchable and you seem to have some good ones. Put them there.

I was born and raised in a small town outside of Syracuse and I moved to LI to start a new chapter of my life.

I am not sure that this is the first thing that you want people to know about you. Put it later in the profile.

There is a lot of opportunity and action here, but I still miss the open, laid-back feel of the country. Grass and trees are underrated, the cost of living is kind of nuts,

Great stuff. But again later in the profile.

and there are enough meatheads to make me wish I wasn't Italian. But you can make a good living and you do meet a lot of interesting people so it all works out in the end.

???? Are you serious? Did you just malign the Italians in your area?? Seriously? Every self respecting Italian woman (and many other self respecting women) just clicked on to the next!! There are meat heads every where bro! Trust me I live in Detroit! But this is not the time or place to go into the meat heads of the world! Especially with a healthy spoonful of hate on the side! It was offensive.


I'm easy-going but also driven, light-hearded but also deep and analytical, friendly to all but picky about my friends. I've been told that I'm open, honest, trustworthy and considerate. Those are important qualities to me and I am looking for the same.

Yawn. The list of qualities are boring. Let the reader find out for herself or demonstrate those qualities here. You have been told that you are? At thirty years old, you don't know if you are open and honest? If you are, then say that you are. If you can't say it about yourself, then don't say it.

I need to be attracted to someone physically before anything else, but I am not so shallow that I ignore someone's views and personality in the process.

Although you try and say that you ain't so shallow, it comes off as shallow. Drop this. Simply ask that they have a few pictures available and then you can decide if you are attracted to them or not.


I'm pretty easy to get along with if you aren't a douche,

Here is the deal. This is the third crappy thing that you have said in your profile. Many people will simply click on to the next. It comes off really badly. It does not sound easy going. Frankly saying that if you can't get along with someone then they must be a douche, is pretty bad. The repeated bad mouthing of other people in your profile paints a terrible picture of you!!

and my friendship comes with a free CD from Time Life Music, a $20 value, yours to keep even if you decide to cancel your subscription. I love computers, reading, TV and movies, video games, clothes, sushi, women of substance, vacations, golfing, good music, talking, thinking, sleeping and make-up sex. I also like bright orange shirts.

Uhhh... dude, don't talk about your love of make-up sex in your profile. It's pretty crass. Unfortunately all in all the bad completely out weighs th good in your profile.
and my friendship comes with a free CD from Time Life Music, a $20 value, yours to keep even if you decide to cancel your subscription. I love computers, reading, TV and movies, video games, clothes, sushi, women of substance, vacations, golfing, good music, talking, thinking, sleeping and make-up sex. I also like bright orange shirts.

Hopefully that covered the basics. There is a lot more to me as a person but I'm not trying to sum all that up right here.
 
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