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geres

Joined: 8/9/2005

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OK, I've had a read and an edit... Posted: 11/15/2009 10:22:22 AM
Anyone looking to doctor their profile deserves a round of applause. Having a friend (especially a girl, target audience considered) is a big step in the right direction! I'm a dude, so take it allwith agrain of salt, but... I'd lead with "I'm a fairly relaxed..." Everything before it just a convo with yourself and doesn't lend much to who you are. Lead strong! "Oh yes, I suppose I'd best mention that!" Same deal as above... the read is stronger without it. "A bit bored of the whole getting made-up numbers from drunk women in bars thing too. All the usual stuff!" and "too to keep me from being bored in the evenings." Hmmm... I'm all about writing strong. It makes it sound like you're exhausted in a way... not that some of us aren't! :) It's just boarder line negative. That's not good for a profile. Better to fill it with something more dynamic and upbeat. Same with "If I've sent you a message and you don't reply to it I'll assume you're not interested - so if I've messaged you and you don't know what to say in reply a quick "carry on" is all I need!" The vampire photo shoot comment is helpful... but you still need a line to finish off the profile. A closer. Something to tie it all in. I'd also rethink the tag line. It has nothing to do with what you've written. Tie that into your profile... something like "Turning Around" would be better... still not strong, but you get the idea! You're articulate, skilled and have great shots. Success it just around the corner, I'd say.

geres

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Kicks and giggles Posted: 11/15/2009 9:57:06 AM
Well done! Bravo! I always admire anyone who puts more than less. :) Having said that, my read would be... Big props for staying positive the whole way through the profile. Nothing ruins it more than a negative. Kill everything before "No man is ever perfect." It's a much stronger line to start with and it's just filler before. Kill "thus". It just doesn't relate to this day and age. Stick with "well educated" but kill "intelligent." They say in writing you shouldn't say it, but show it. Let your writing speak for itself. It seems to be doing a good job without hitting anyone over the head ;) Numbers below 10 are always written out... ie. 1 is one. I took two years off life to rave... caching Carl Cox tonight. Talk about old school! Finally, your tag line needs work! It's the weakest part of your whole profile. I'd suggest something about being the "man." It's a strong theme throughout. Ex: "The Kind of Man I Am" " Truth and The Man" ... I don't know.. something that ties it all together would work better. Anyway, some thoughts for a Sunday. :) Cheers and keep the beats alive!

Tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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skittish about callng Posted: 4/26/2009 1:21:00 PM
Asking someone to call you who you've been in communication with is completely acceptable. It's a normal form of communication--and probably a better one for anyone looking to actually "meet" people online. As you say, you "messed things up." A good connection will make the phone call easy. A bad one won't. Better to get that out of the way before sending endless emails or wasting time on a date. I don't always feel 100% when I call someone, but I realize I'm an adult, it's one of those skills that you need to have, and better to jump in with both feet rather than stand on the sideline worrying about it... or worse, regretting your choice after. But again, that's just me... ;)

Tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Fakes On The Net..>WTF Posted: 4/26/2009 1:14:06 PM
I know a thing or two about fakes online. Both myself and a friend have had people steal and use our pictures. The funny thing was, when he complained to PofF, they deleted HIS profile, which was weird! I've also had my written profile copied, which is also a deceitful. However, throughout my entire online experience, I've never had a date go so wrong, or an experience, that I wanted to paint the entire online community with the same brush. I'm not sure what you're doing wrong, if anything. If I've ever heard of a case of bad radar, this would be it! I agree phone calls are the way to go, though. It should help lesson the impact of at least a few bad apples!

Tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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BUG: My Matches Not From My City? Posted: 4/22/2008 4:08:29 PM
I've cleaned my cookies, updated my postal code again, ran basic searches and it still won't grab my local matches. Any other ideas?

Tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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BUG: My Matches Not From My City? Posted: 4/22/2008 9:38:46 AM
I spend time between two cities and switch back and forth between the two (by postal code) from time to time. Everything worked fine until a week or so ago. Now, no matter what postal code I have under my profile, when I hit "My Matches" it just gives me Toronto. Any ideas?

Tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Images not showing up issues here...[Read the OP] Posted: 7/15/2007 6:32:15 AM
I'm having issues this morning as well. For the record, I've uploaded tons before, it's a 30k photo about 200x300. I hit upload and it's nowhere to be found AND yes, I put show on profile.

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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can yall rate my profile Posted: 3/20/2006 7:51:22 PM
Just some quick hits: -it seems like you have a great job – I’m jealous! -nice work on the photos! -need an “an” in your profile title, between ‘for’ and ‘honest’ -I’d drop your text into a spell checker like Word or Spellcheck dot net to clean up the punctuation. -In your lead you say “just” like it’s not important. Love is important! I’d remove it, but now I’m splitting hairs for no real reason ;) My 2cents ;) Something tells me you'll do okay on here, one way or the other! Enjoy the night ;)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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I am not totally wrapped up in myself but I will review ur profile Posted: 3/20/2006 7:42:01 PM
*Just stopping in to say hello. I love this thread! LMAO!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Rate my profile Posted: 3/20/2006 9:15:50 AM
OMG! I was asleep when I dropped by your profile apparently. The girls are on the ball, though! I missed you opening line. Yeah - keep things positive - ALWAYS! And putting intimate encounters is NEVER a good idea. Cmon, lets see version two!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Rate my profile Posted: 3/20/2006 8:35:40 AM
Well, your pics are decent - a little grainy, but they're good! I'd say expand your profile! Take two or three things you like to do and write a paragraph about each. Talk about who you do it with, what you do, where you do it, why you do it and how you feel doing it. Create a bit of a story so people can get the feel for what makes you tick. Anyway, just my two-cents worth. What you've written is great – but it still needs to be run through word or a spell check program – missing some ‘s in I’m for example, and a capital I. And my pet peeve – a lot is two words. A lot of people get that one wrong! ;) Best of luck!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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RE-REVIEW OF MY PROFILE PLEASE Posted: 3/19/2006 4:27:26 PM
Looks good - stays positive. No issues here! 2 should be spelled two, though, as with any number under 10. ;)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Assistance please ladies and gentlemen Posted: 3/19/2006 4:21:59 PM
Assuming they're you, great! :) Clearly, you need more clarity! You need better pics - and more of them! I don't chat with people who only have one or two grainy shots - and neither should you! People have access to cams these days. It's easy to pass someone by who has two shots for someone who has more. It helps build trust. If dating is important to you, I'd put the time and energy into getting good shots. 90% of this game is visual, whether you agree or not. Get that down and bring home the rest with your charm!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Need serious help.... Posted: 3/19/2006 4:16:48 PM
I think you know what the problem is. You’re a woman. There are men on this site. That's the problem right there. The good news is that your profile is great and all the sex-related replies you receive just help in pointing you away from the wrong directions!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Does my profile give you the creeps? Posted: 3/19/2006 4:11:49 PM
I'd agree with C&R. No creeps here, brother. But like she said, I try to keep anything negative out of my profiles. I hear what you’re saying about loudmouth guys, but why give them room in your profile? I’d spend my words on other, more interesting things… like yourself! I agree with you on people who talk about their exs, but why give those people fuel on how to win your heart and waste you time? Let them hang themselves so you know which ones are worth avoiding. I wouldn’t mention any of your dislikes – again, it follows the rule of avoiding negativity. I’d also lose the “hot and single” part. If you’re superficial, which I doubt from what you’ve written, then great! But things like that won’t ever win the heart of someone who is really good and true. The oinly other thing I would say is get more pics! This is a marketing exercise, and the more pics of the good, the better. Just avoid any with your clothes off ;) My two-cents, take it or leave it. One way or the other, good luck!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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How can you tell if a profile is fake or real? Posted: 3/19/2006 4:00:52 PM
I think we have to worry less about real and fake profiles on PofF - simply because it's free. I always look at the pictures. If there's only one or they 'all' look like mag cutouts, I don't waste my time. Also, someone once said, "If it seems too good to be true, it prob is." Not a bad litmus test!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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This jerk copied my profile!!! Posted: 3/16/2006 6:03:43 PM
I had a woman steal the meat of mine without telling me. I thought it was nice. Mind you, I'll give her a hard time if I ever bump into her in real life ;)

Tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Instant Messaging - Important? Posted: 9/16/2005 12:58:55 PM
Have you ever used it to contact someone?

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Instant Messaging - Important? Posted: 9/16/2005 12:41:52 PM
Quick poll for the fine PofF folks: How important is the ability to instant message to you when picking dating sites? I've always been an email guy and have my chat turned off. Would you consider not joining a site if it didn't offer it?

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Check your Baggage Here Posted: 8/25/2005 9:51:36 AM
haha - nice thread, Indigo! You're kind to allow two carry-ons . . . I only have room to carry a new romance in my life -- one that's going forward and not stuck in the past. Mind you, it's easy to say when you've been single for close to four years! Having said that, I'm now doomed to find someone who is a complete mess. But when it's right, nothing else seems to matter, does it?

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Public Affection? What is your take on it? Posted: 8/25/2005 9:37:42 AM
It seems most hear are in agreement. PDA's are about the couple and not anyone else. Personally, I'm pretty conscious about making other people feel uncomfortable, but I'm not going to hold back if her heart and mine says GO! Life's way too short to put the brakes on when love in involved. ;)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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How important is sex in a relationship? Posted: 8/25/2005 9:30:50 AM
Agreed! Once a week for sure . . . personally, I'm at least once a day, but that can be too much for some. However - having sex less at the start for the sake of having less sex?? Eeek!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Can men and women be friends without sex? Posted: 8/24/2005 1:49:21 PM
LOSTGUY SAYS: Any attractive female friends I have I'd at least like to sleep with. Doesn't mean I do. True enough but your girlfriend would probably also consider them attractive enough to be a threat so why put the trust you've built in danger by putting yourself in situations where you're alone with Ms. Attractive?

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Can men and women be friends without sex? Posted: 8/24/2005 1:46:23 PM
It’s not right in my books to "go out" with other women if I was in a serious relationship with some girl. It's a trust issue and I think the "trust" falls on him in this situation to not put what you’ve built together in jeopardy. I have a bunch of friends who would disagree, but then these aren’t the people who have model relationships in my books. But we’re not all after the same things, are we? ;)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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How important is sex in a relationship? Posted: 8/24/2005 1:42:27 PM
I think sex is a personal thing and if he says it was too much for him, it was too much! :) You can't judge someone for their personal tastes. We're only built the way we're built - there's not a lot we can do to change the chemistry after! ;) Just my 2cents!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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How Long Posted: 8/19/2005 5:07:37 PM
It's always good to choose a place where you can kick back and relax while you wait for a date. Sometimes things come up and people aren't going to run a bit late. Cell phones really help and take the guesswork out of waiting. Fifteen minutes goes by and I'm calling to see if everything is okay and if they can find the place. If I'm there first, I'll usually order a drink and if they're not there by the time I'm done, I'm out! That's usually between 30 and 45 minutes. Everybody’s time is valuable and being late is a lousy first impression! Just my 2cents ;)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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how many online dates have you had? Posted: 8/15/2005 3:01:35 PM
Probably around thirty over the past three years. All have been great accept for two where I dropped my guard and didn't check the pics as well as I should. Online dating is the way to go in my books.

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Young Kids! Posted: 8/15/2005 2:51:30 PM
I was contacted last night by a girl who was ten years younger than me, and although she sounded mature, that's too big an age gap for anything. But that's 18 to 29. I think there's a little more room for play with age difference the older you get. But if a guy half your age is knocking on your door, he's probably juyst attracted to you. If that's the worst thing you get, I think you're doing okay! :)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Date that Never showed up Posted: 8/15/2005 2:45:38 PM
Hmmm . . . I'm not sure, but it sounds a little odd. Are you sure he stood you up and isn't stuck in a ditch somewhere?

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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How can you tell if your special someone is pulling away from you? Posted: 8/15/2005 2:43:22 PM
I think if you have to ask the question, then you already know the answer. Long distance is hard. I couldn't do it. My hat is off to you for making the attempt, though!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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What do you think about my pic.... Posted: 8/14/2005 11:28:41 PM
It looks like you - and that's what matters! I feel safe in saying this, seeing as I've had the pleasure to meet you in the flesh! ;) Dance floor, anyone?

tyric

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To Shave Or Not To Shave Posted: 8/12/2005 4:04:31 PM
Brother, I came thinking only of good will. I think I'd surf other sites if I was looking for other forms of . . . errr . . . shaving.

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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How many actually read profiles versus just pics??? Posted: 8/11/2005 6:32:12 PM
I'm with you and 99 per cent of people are the same way. The stats show it. However, if she's smoking hot and only has one line, or even a few, she won't be receiving mail from me. Call me picky, but I'm all about the total package.

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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To Shave Or Not To Shave Posted: 8/11/2005 6:29:10 PM
Okay, in case you might miss it, I'm a guy and I'm straight. With that out of the way, what about something a little less full? A goatee with a two-day growth or a . . . well, I don't know what ya call it, but I have a little thing under my bottom lip. I think the mid-ground would look pretty decent. But I'm a guy - and I'm straight - just in case you missed that point ;)

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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need a profile rating Posted: 8/10/2005 7:03:26 AM
Like I said - I liked your profile. Just some thoughs. As you had it last night: "however i do like girls with good sexual tastes, and has likes in romantic as well" sex in sentence one, romance in sentence two. It's subtle, but it's there. It jumped out at me. Anyway, you need some women to comment! Hey LADIES!! G'luck!

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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check out my profile Posted: 8/10/2005 12:01:19 AM
I never saw the profile before, but was there more there? Dude, SAY SOMETHING! You don't need to write a book, but you need more. Why are you moving? What is about Stanley Park that makes you love it so much? What do you do to relax? Better yet, what would you do to relax together with Ms Right? (PLEASE, for all our sakes, keep it clean! :P! What is it you like about hockey and football games? What teams are you into? Who are your favourite players?? Can ya tell me about a memorable game you saw? For your perfect date . . . I’m sure it would be a nice time, but you really need to get people excited about it. What would you see while walking around? Would you have to walk carefully to avoid unfortunate signs of seabirds on the walkway and smell the air as it rolled in off the water? What would you talk about? Would you discuss your plans to buy a boat and sail up and down the coast sipping Coronas and singing old Zepplin tunes? Maybe you’d stop at a hotdog vendor and have really bad sausages and yap till dusk about the pros and cons of peptobismal (sp?) and water sports. Given, this kind of writing may might just make you puke . . . hey, are you okay over there?? :P The point is that the more you put into making a scene vibrant for the reader, the more vivid a picture they’ll have of what it’s like to enjoy what you think would be the perfect day for you. It’s all about how you package the product. ;) I’m just talking out of my butt cuz it’s late and am trying to put myself to sleep . . . and I think it might be working . . . but there are some ideas for you. Also, run everything through a spelling and grammar-checking program like word or type grammar checker or spelling checker into Google to get online versions. You only get seven or eight chances to make a first impression, so it would be a shame to blow it on something trivial like lack of style. :P

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Ok, I Have To Ask Posted: 8/9/2005 11:42:15 PM
HAHAHA! To get it, you'd have to get guys, I guess. The lips . . . they scream passion . . . and . . .errr . . . sex . . . but not necessarily in that order. It’s the same type of thing that attracts guys to pics of women in their underwear. If that’s the kind of guy you’re after, whip out the lipstick and start peeling off the clothes. Otherwise, take comfort in the fact that those are the girls that are distracting all the perverts, giving the good-guys more time to focus on you! (okay, I don’t REALLY believe that this is the way that it works, but wouldn’t it be nice!! :))

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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need a profile rating Posted: 8/9/2005 11:36:44 PM
Aight. I only looked at your first paragraph . . . or the thing that looks kind of like it wants to be a paragraph . . . :P Here goes! -Your lack of punctuation is an obvious statement of who you are. I’m not against that – it’s character. As long as you’re okay with some people thinking you’re an uneducated, careless (insert unfortunate comparison here), then no worries. Personally, I come from the view that using proper style will never offend anyone but playing it like you have COULD turn a hot, educated goddess who’d like a bit of a bad boy in her bed away. Think about THAT and see how well you sleep tonight! :P -“I dedicate” sounds like you’re referring to yourself in third-person, which always creeps me out. Your lead is your most important sentence. Using “I’ve dedicated myself” seems stronger – and stronger suits your style. -womens’ should be women’s -Sex comes before romance in your profile. What’s a girl to think? It’s perfect if you’re on here looking for that specifically. You’ve nailed it. However, if you want to improve the number of women who send you mail, think about how many women female strip joints there are in town and then try and count the male ones. Everyone loves sex, but the majority of women aren’t quite as obsessed – or are REALLY good at hiding it. Aim for the majority for better results. -Again, you use a lot of incomplete sentences. It’s style if you say it is, but that goddess may disagree. -“atleast” is at least two words. Run a spell check, even if you’re going for the “careless artist” feel. But hey, WTF do I know? ;) It’s late. They shouldn’t let me near a keyboard at this time of night. WAY too many coffees and this is what you get. Other than that, great read.

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Ok, roast me Posted: 8/9/2005 11:16:37 PM
Your profile makes me smile – your personality comes across, and that’s a great place to start! You write well, but since you asked, here’s my two cents! -You have a U in your first sentence. That needs to be a “you’re” unless there’s special meaning behind it. Even a “you” still mucks up a perfectly good sentence. You wouldn’t meet someone in person with your fly open on purpose so why begin a profile with a glaring grammatical error? -Your lead is okay, but could be stronger. The intro to the second paragraph might be a more interesting way to start it off. The junker comment made me smile and you can’t have enough of that! I have no problems with self-depreciation. I think it’s admirable. Better than coming off as a**** jack-arse (not sure how strong they allow language on here J) -You write like you’re talking to yourself. Talk to the women that will be reading your profile! Bring them in! -Instead of making them do the work with your “likes” by asking them to search elsewhere in your profile, bring your likes down into your profile and expand on them! What bands do you like or favourite tunes get you screaming? Have you had a paranormal experience? What was it like?? What are you reading? Throw me some quotes! Saying I like rock climbing isn’t as compelling as describing the view from the top of the last face you scaled. Do that and let people fall in love with your passions through your eyes! -Dislikes? NOPE! Negativity has no place in a first impression – and that’s exactly what your profile will be when Ms Right stumbles across it. -Whoa – hold up! You skirt the most awesome thing! I wanna hear these lofty goals! Most people never set goals. If you set them and they’re important to you, lay them to paper! Worst case, people know you have focus. Best case, she has the same goals and you can reach the twice as fast together. -HAHA! I love the line about you not using your sense of humour! Sarcasm is a hard sell in print, but you hit it perfectly there. (You were being sarcastic, right?? ;)) And your ending was really funny, too! Hehe – but it has to go! Why? Cuz you’re on about dislikes againa nd I hope you scratch them from any further revisions! As for your pics, the first one is great. It’s clear and it’s you! The last two are a little blurry, but that could be the way the way POF shrinks them. Plus, they need to be cropped, which should help. I might drop a shade over one of them, or B&W, just to add some variety. If you need a hand, drop me a line and I’d be happy to shoot you some versions. OKAY – done. Take it or leave it – those are just some thoughts. Remember, I’m A) a guy, which might mean I can’t be trusted B) I lack a degree in dating profile creation, but I date for a living (hey, get your mind out of the gutter – it’s all above-board! :P ) C) you can never have everyone dialled so what I think may or ma not apply to the women who fall for you. Change your profile, you risk loosing those that love it the way that it is. But if you’d care to gamble, roll away! <-- just cuz I know you love'em! :P

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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s it possible to fall out of love? Posted: 8/9/2005 10:46:52 PM
Songbird has it right: what's best for the kids is what's best for you. Staying together for their sake is two wrongs rolled into one and we all know that doesn't make it right! :) And crystalise also has a good point. You can fall back in love! 50 First Dates makes that point. Sandler's character did it each day. How? By concentrating on the little things. But that takes desire and conviction. I guess the question is: do you want it bad enough? (Yes, I know I'm using an example from the land of make-believe, but it was just to illustrate the point! :P )

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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Do you know what qualities you want in a perfect mate Posted: 8/9/2005 10:37:32 PM
They're easy to mention, but love has a funny way of changing the order they fall in. I gave up on lists - not that you shouldn't have one! I'm just tired of proving that I haven't got a clue about what's really important to me in a mate! :) Do you have a list?

tyric

Joined: 8/9/2005

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is it possible to fall out of love? Posted: 8/9/2005 3:50:11 PM
Of course - the divorce rate proves it! And what should you do? Move on. It's not fair to you and not fair to them to keep at it. The only comfort is knowing it's the right move.

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