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sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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please help tweak my profile Posted: 4/12/2009 8:50:12 PM
spellcheck is your friend OP. Your profile is littered with grammatical and spelling mistakes. Most sentences start with I so I think you need to change that. Add some interests, fun is not an interest. You are focussing too much on whether meeting someone would work or not. That is very obvious and negative. Talk about your business, things you like to do, what kind of person you are and what kind of person you would like to meet. I would delete it and start again.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Requesting a review Posted: 4/11/2009 6:18:30 PM
why won't you say what you do for a living? If you are job seeking then say so.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Ladies the man of your dreams does exist Posted: 4/11/2009 12:00:12 PM
your spelling isn't so great though!

sparklingseas

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Second Date - Not Too Excited ..? Posted: 4/11/2009 9:36:09 AM
I have never changed my mind by going on a second or even third date. If I wasn't that attracted during the first date or meet, then it's not gonna change for me. If I like someone but don't find him sexy and attractive (to me) then it would be leading him on. I do not want to waste my time or his by doing the second date and I am not desperate for a meal out. Better to say no to Date #2

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Am I really all that bad??? Posted: 4/10/2009 6:28:16 PM
why would you be on a dating site if you are just looking for friends? There are thousands of websites with forums and chat rooms. Maybe your local football team, some hobby or other interest has a chat room? It's like being on a Christian website and saying you are a Jew just looking for non Christian friends. Sorry but I just don't get it.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Can anyone help me fix this? Posted: 4/10/2009 4:04:31 PM
well let's start with pictures, your first one is blurred, the second one looks like somebody is mowing the snow, then we have patio furniture... confused? yes I am. What are you selling? No, seriously let's have 4 good pictures of you, smiling. Please, whatever you write break the flipping thing up into paragraphs! It's not rocket science but it makes for easier reading. You are making yourself out to be just a normal guy but we are not reading anything special about you. What do you like to do, what is a fun vacation? Hobbies? Anything you want to do or see in the future or travel to? Tell us about your job? Too much emphasis on thin women and your own ways of eating and keeping healthy although you smoke so maybe remove that line. we know your age from your profile so you don't need to tell us again. And yes we are all here for dating so that is also redundant. Independent NOT independant. Come up with some ideas for a first date. Better pictures will bring in a lot more views. good luck

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Sure-Fire First-Date Killers Posted: 4/10/2009 2:44:49 PM
a first date to be and I arranged to meet at the beach with our dogs one Sunday morning. I get out of my car, he looks at me and says 'you're cute do you want to go steady?' I said we had only just met!! That was about the extent of his conversation. Needless to say there were no more dates.

sparklingseas

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please review my profile Posted: 4/9/2009 8:12:17 PM
hi your main pic is blurred and in your second one you are pulling a silly face, then 2 of them are of your dog and 2 are of scenery. so ............ new pics would be a start. you don't really say anything about yourself at all except that you don't mind trying something new. I think a paragraph about yourself, where you moved from, whether you work shifts or days, what your job means to you. What kinds of things are you interested in. Then what kind of guy you are looking for. you are limiting people who could email you, remove men, activity partner and talk/email. There is no reason why a local woman couldn't email you - you are new to Fl so you might make new friends. Activity partner does not mean sex! anyway good luck

sparklingseas

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ok what am I doing wrong Posted: 4/9/2009 8:07:04 PM
Amost every sentence starts with I, and most sentences are very short so it doesn't read easily. Get rid of the line at the start 'Ladies ...' it makes you sound like you are selling us something at a market stall. We want to feel special not as though you are talking to an audience. Also scrap the line about kissing and affection, those kind of sentences come across as creepy. You could do with a close up photo which should be #1.

sparklingseas

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New to all this and would like some help with my profile Posted: 4/9/2009 8:02:21 PM
ok just a few things I noticed. I would scrap the photo of you in a suit and get some more new photos that are more casual but make sure one is a close up for your first pic. ''my friends would describe me" is boring and totally unlikely. Describe yourself don't tell us what a bunch of strangers would say (if indeed they have even said it). Your profile is a bit dry, not feeling any humor in it.

sparklingseas

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multiple send outs and no positive replys Posted: 4/9/2009 5:41:21 AM
oh and lose that first line of your profile about online dating. Everyone is here for that so it's very negative.

sparklingseas

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profile HELP!!! Posted: 4/9/2009 5:39:31 AM
Use capital I instead of i and try not to start all your sentences with I. lose the pics with you in a swimsuit, contrary to men's beliefs there is nothing sexy about strangers' bare chests! too many short sentences so it doesn't flow.

sparklingseas

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I Feel like giving up Posted: 4/9/2009 5:36:55 AM
Delete your profile and start again, it's dull and sounds like so many others. Change your pics to ones of you smiling and make #1 a close up of your face with a smile.

sparklingseas

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multiple send outs and no positive replys Posted: 4/9/2009 5:34:57 AM
There's nothing wrong with your profile but it's a bit dull and generic and sounds like a lot of others. It needs some spicing up, some humor and something that makes you sound different. You need a close up which should be picture #1. Your opening line when you write to someone is lame. You need to give a reason for a woman to write back to you, focus on something in her profile and ask a question to get a dialogue going. See what I mean now about your own profile, what can a woman focus on to ask you a question?

sparklingseas

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What do you think of my Profile? Posted: 4/9/2009 5:26:12 AM
I like your profile and would write to you. I would lose some of the 'interests' because there are a lot of them! But your screen name is a little offputting. JMO.

sparklingseas

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any spice up tips would be greatly appreciated Posted: 4/8/2009 5:18:21 PM
I am in your age range and I would say this: having a lot of pictures is good but choose them carefully. Half naked ones on the beach are NOT a turn on for women, nor are pictures where a woman's hand or arm is over your shoulder or some of her blond hair is obvious. I would take those away and put up some new ones. You may know who the women are but we don't. Definitely get rid of the line about loving to laugh and laughing. It is very overused and redundant. When I see anybody in my age range or older say they are young at heart I immediately think that they are old and pretending not to be.

sparklingseas

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New profile advice? Posted: 4/8/2009 3:22:14 PM
I would start with changing your pictures. You need to smile not look frightening! I don't think you have really said anything about yourself nor the type of girl you are looking for even though you think you have. The whole profile is too 'this and that' and easygoing.

sparklingseas

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How does my profile look? Posted: 4/8/2009 2:54:28 PM
hmm, there's a lot to change here. Firstly change your pictures, the light in the two closeups doesn't do you any justice except give you a shiny forehead. Forget the text speak like tho, use capital I instead of i and spellcheck eg, here goes not here go's. you haven't said what you do for a job, is it a secret or are you unemployed or what? You need to elaborate. I think the profile has a mix between 'I don't care' and 'I want to get married'. Remove the word sh*t. I am confused about the line about working in the house and sleeping. Be more proactive, you say you are waiting for guys to contact you, take that line out. Overall I think your profile is a little aggressive and I also don't know if a lot of men would be put off by your open desire to get married and have children.

sparklingseas

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A little help sharpening... Posted: 4/7/2009 5:13:16 AM
hi, it is a short novel!! Maybe cut it down by half. Also way too many interests. More photos.

sparklingseas

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Please review ‘be gentle, I’m new at this’ :79: Posted: 4/7/2009 5:10:46 AM
boasting about being a good kisser is pretty crass and telling us all about how you like to please a woman in bed is even more crass. sorry. Just get rid of both of those comments because it sounds like you are just looking for sex. I agree you need better photos. you might want to say how long you have been separated and when your divorce will come through. A lot of women will not date a separated man.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Care To Write Someting About... Posted: 4/6/2009 6:03:54 PM
I think it's a little long and there are too many interests. It needs to have snappier sentences. Change your main photo to one of you on your own. Cut out photos with you and other women.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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you had a nice date but.... Posted: 4/6/2009 6:00:25 PM
I was just looking for a nice way to say it, I suppose there is no nice way. Anyway I did send him an email.

sparklingseas

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you had a nice date but.... Posted: 4/6/2009 4:59:24 PM
you liked him, he really likes you but you don't feel any attraction towards him. He has emailed twice since the date and you want to let him know that he's a nice guy BUT.... any suggestions of how to say there was no attraction? Email ok? He has emailed me today to ask if I would like to see him again.

sparklingseas

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I'm new here. Please comment on my profile. Posted: 4/5/2009 3:58:08 PM
well you say you like getting dirty but you don't list your interests so that would be a start. more pictures. Break up the single paragraph. Where do you find ancient ruins and rainforests in the USA? Maybe be more specific about where you would like to travel to.

sparklingseas

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Suggestions on my profile please! Posted: 4/5/2009 9:15:30 AM
somebody who knows the difference between their and theyre??? it's they're!

sparklingseas

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Stood up...this sucks! Was it me??! Posted: 4/5/2009 9:10:45 AM
it sucks and has happened to me too many times, a few months ago it was 3 different guys in the same week. I can never understand standing up someone you have never met yet because it's so easy to email, text or call to say to say you can't make it for whatever reason BEFORE you set off for the date. I do think some people like the thrill of arranging a date but have no intention of ever showing up for it.

sparklingseas

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Are there any people left that date one at a time? Posted: 4/5/2009 8:31:47 AM
sometimes dating is like waiting for buses, none for ages then three show up at once. I have found that suddenly 2 0r 3 guys start to email me at around the same time so I will agree to go out on all three dates in the same week. It can get a bit confusing like what you have said to who and who has told you what, but until I have met these guys I have no idea if there will be mutual attraction and like. I do not consider this multiple dating. Once I have had one date and know if I am not attracted I will let them know immediately that it was not a match. I have never been in a position where I have liked 2 or all 3 guys and would have to choose.

sparklingseas

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whats the deal with my rating Posted: 4/5/2009 6:08:42 AM
I think the word 'crap' is overused in your profile - can you find a better word? The profile is a bit negative so concentrate on turning it round. your pictures are fine.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Hmm... Profile Tune Up (Again) Posted: 4/5/2009 6:03:52 AM
I honestly think you need to beg borrow or steal a camera. Buy a disposable camera and have Walgreens transfer the film to disc and upload some photos. Someone at work with a camera phone? A 3 year old picture at 24 is daft, you need to get some current photos and quickly. Take out the line that some people think you are strange. And the line I love to laugh, it's so overused and obvious. Nobody writes I love to cry!!

sparklingseas

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how about a review pls. Posted: 4/4/2009 2:53:33 PM
I would spellcheck your profile and make sure you are using the correct spelling for your and you're. Capitalize all your I's and punctuate your sentences. It sounds trivial but it's important.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Do you think my profile is giving me the wrong kind of attention? Posted: 4/4/2009 2:48:59 PM
your profile doesn't say anything about you. Nothing except you are not very good at this, whatever this is. If anyone writes to you or answers you it will be just about your pictures because we don't know who you are at all.

sparklingseas

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Shark out of water!!! Constructive Crtitisim please. Posted: 4/4/2009 2:46:43 PM
hi firstly I would take away the pic of you at the beach semi naked for a couple of reasons. As a first pic it doesn't show your face and as the first pic is the thumbnail pic when you are in a row of 'who viewed me' you don't stand out. Secondly, most women do NOT like seeing naked chests on dating sites. Your profile is kinda dull and sounds like 99% of other guys. Most sentences start with 'I' so it's boring. Cliches like 'I love to laugh' and 'family oriented' are a dime a dozen. Erase and start again, list some interests and try to be different, talk about your job a little as a tech. good luck

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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The List Posted: 4/4/2009 9:51:00 AM
I sure have a list of sorts but it is not written. And yes I do go through that list when first talking to someone (such as they must have a job, not live too far away, non-drug user, height etc). Then when meeting in person, assuming there is an attraction and those first few items on the list are met, there is also a sub-list in my head with non-deal breaker items but ones to consider nonetheless.

sparklingseas

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Review input requested Posted: 4/4/2009 9:44:18 AM
fox has given you an excellent homework assignment. Also why not change your upper limit to 60, nothing wrong with a woman 5 years older and I would move 40 as your lower age limit to 45. Not being mean or anything but 40 is a little optimistic! Your profile needs some humor which is seriously lacking. No reason why women with no photo shouldn't contact you, new people often don't have photos and they can always send one later.

sparklingseas

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New to Site - Profile Review Posted: 4/4/2009 9:36:24 AM
I would maybe break it up into paragraphs because a big chunk like that is hard to read. Perhaps make your sentences a little shorter and snappier. I would take away your photo of you camping virtually naked!! I am not in favor of those shots showing the chest and I don't believe ladies my age are either. Also, if that child is not yours (assuming they are all over 18 I might delete that because some women may think you have a young un). Add some interests. good luck

sparklingseas

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female input please! Posted: 4/2/2009 5:05:32 PM
The profile is way too long. Since you are separated I would mention how long for and when the divorce will be finalized.

sparklingseas

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Just looking for opinions Posted: 4/2/2009 5:17:43 AM
why would you want to be with someone who 'will tell me what he thinks I want to hear'?

sparklingseas

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out of the wood work they will come Posted: 3/29/2009 8:16:56 PM
way too long and too negative. You sound bitter. Remove all the stuff about intimacy and sex and the paragraph about women emailing you for sex. your first picture is not good enough as a first pic, it should be a smiling close up which is visible from the list of thumbnails when you look at who has viewed you or in the searches. The second one you are not smiling.

sparklingseas

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Please review my profile changes Posted: 3/29/2009 3:58:28 PM
Your pictures are fuzzy and blurred so I think some new ones would be great. Why is your profession a secret? Your niece and nephew ages are not interesting, nor is it interesting how many you have. It is redundant to say meet at a restaurant that we agree on or mutually convenient so chuck all that out. Your first date sounds like most others so make it a bit more interesting. to be honest your profile is a bit long and feels very stiff. I am not getting a sense of you being fun and witty even though you say you are.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Need help please Posted: 3/29/2009 3:54:03 PM
your spelling isn't good so please use spell check - many sentences have mistakes. a movie is a terrible first date unless you want to find out what someone's profile looks like in the dark and how much popcorn they eat! nearly all your sentences start with I. Talk more about your flying, where you have flown to etc.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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profile review Posted: 3/29/2009 3:50:16 PM
wow it's incredibly negative and way way way too long. I would shorten it to about 3 paragraphs and be totally upbeat about who you are, what you have done in your life and what you are looking for. saying things like I don't have many friends, life throws 'sh** ' at you, women such as this are not for me comes across as a total downer. also in profession 'used to be a truck driver' is not helpful. looking for work is better. more pictures and for goodness sake SMILE

sparklingseas

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critique of pure reason Posted: 3/29/2009 3:45:35 PM
The pictures are good. The profile is a little dull and to be honest nothing much makes you stand out from zillions of others, I cannot remember what you like and like to do and I just finished reading your profile! take out the line about computer dating, we are ALL doing that here so it's redundant.

sparklingseas

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Hi, can I get some help with this?? please Posted: 3/29/2009 3:38:52 PM
too many sentences start with 'I like to ...." so it's a little boring and the sentences are a bit short. Less of the mundane would be better. Agree with Mixer you need more pictures of you smiling. Also agree that you need to say how long you have been separated and when the divorce is expected. A lot won't date separated men/women so it's going to be an issue.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Ladies opinions needed on my profile! Posted: 3/29/2009 1:13:43 PM
it's really not bad at all, I would just remove the first sentence about not having much luck and coming onto POF because obviously everyone is in the same boat so it's a redundant sentence. take out the line about being shy, it is not an endearing characteristic to have. good luck

sparklingseas

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Review my profile Posted: 3/28/2009 10:51:28 PM
don't say what you've done on previous dates such as frisbee, it sounds as though it won't be special with the next person.

sparklingseas

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Killing the Butterfly... Posted: 3/28/2009 5:06:03 PM
some years back I met a 'first date' for coffee and we sat down and he pulled out a piece of paper and started asking questions from it such as 'what is your favourite movie' what is favourite type of food'. I said are you kidding? He said no, I said I gotta go.

sparklingseas

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Can I please get a review? Thank you. Posted: 3/28/2009 4:21:45 PM
I would remove the picture of the little girl since she is not yours. Remember men just look at the pretty pics so automatically they might think that's yours. I think your profile is a bit too short now, a couple more paragraphs about you, and take away that negative comment about not having chemistry and wasting time.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Hello! What do you guys think about this? Posted: 3/28/2009 4:19:29 PM
I would make my first pic a close up because when someone looks at the thumbnails of people in a long list we can't see your face.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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Why are so many in such a hurry to meet...? Posted: 3/28/2009 3:43:07 PM
I'm in the meet quickly camp. A few emails, a few phonecalls and set up the date. If after a couple of phonecalls I don't feel any connection then I don't even set up a date and break off all contact. Some of my best first dates have been arranged within half an hour of making contact. Even if they have amounted to nothing due to lack of chemistry it's fun to go out spur of the moment. And I haven't wasted weeks talking to someone to find out there is no chemistry.

sparklingseas

Joined: 10/3/2008

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WTH is going on?!?! Posted: 3/28/2009 3:36:13 PM
ain't nothing wrong with British accents - I have one. OP be grateful you didn't meet him and fall for him in person, or sleep with him. Be grateful he was not a scammer. In the meantime do not have long email conversations with people on the internet. Move it to the phone fairly fast and then arrange to meet. You cannot fall in love with an email or succession of emails.

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