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 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 75
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Pulse_Meddle - Review.

Tagline: Great Tagline. Nothing to add there.

Pictures: I'm not a fan of your pictures. I like of like the one where you're laying on the ground. It's an interesting shot and at least it's the clearest picture. the thing with pictures is that even though you're taking then with a webcam they should never look like that's what you've done. Try and get them CLEAR as possible. Use the best lighting. Only post pictures you think are GREAT pictures. You should also avoid hats in your pictures. We kind like seeing *you*.

Interests: Good broad range of interests.

Main Profile:So I guess this is the part where I explain who I am... Well I guess to really know who I am you would have to be around me... or I guess talk to me a lot.
But here are the basics


Yes. This is OBVIOUSLY the part where you talk about yourself and tell us what you're about. And you're right, we would have to be around you to truly know who you are, and that's the point isn't it? To have a profile that compells a person to send you a message/reply to the one you sent. This whole first section is pointless and considered filler. I'd take it out.

Well I consider myself southern raised but that doesn’t mean that I am bias to a lot of interest. I also think of myself as an everything fanatic I love a lot of things. I will usually give anything a chance. I would consider myself funny, shy- (at first meet… you just need to break me in like a shoe I guess), polite, and intelligent- (I try to learn what I can when I can). I am Random at times. Example my music taste might jump from country too heavy metal in a day or less.. I have a lot of morals. I personally try to look at personality before looks.

You're not bias to a lot of interest? What does that mean?

I'm not sure being an "everything fanatic" is generally a good thing. Or at least it doesn't seem to portray the right thing. Instead you could say "I love keeping my horizons broad and my life interesting by trying anything once"... It sounds a little cleaner.


I would consider myself funny, shy- (at first meet… you just need to break me in like a shoe I guess), polite, and intelligent-


I liked this part up until the brackets. Something about the way it's worded in the brackets, just doesn't sit right with me. Most people don't have to justify their intelligence.

When describing your music, try talking more generally... "I'm open to all kinds of music for example... My music taste might jump from country to Heavy metal in a day or less"... Having an eclectic music taste doesn't make you random, it makes you a music lover.

You have a lot of morals? Everyone's judge on morals is different. I think you either need to explain this a little more, or take it right out.

It's great that you look at personality before looks, but put that in the section where you tell us what you're looking for. It just doesn't fit in that paragraph.

Now the type of person I would like to meet well... I’d like to meet a girl that I can actually have a conversation with, to actually get to know the person and to share my thoughts and feelings.

You want a girl to converse with, which is great, but why don't you tell us what some of your favourite topics are. To converse with someone, means you're sharing your thoughts/feelings on many things. I don't think you need to repeat yourself, since it makes it seem like you just want to unload on some poor girl, the trappings of your childhood.

Someone with similar interest as I have, yet with different interest because I like to be introduce to new things. I also like to introduce new things that I enjoy to others.
A girl that respects herself yet has that little wild side.
Smart, funny, and sweet


Well you want someone who is the same yet different. That's undecisive. What would could say... is... "I'm looking for someone I have common interests with, but would be open to introductions into new activities" or something like that.

I also have a thing for Hair. I love girls hair! weird I know.
someone who will enjoy/respect who I am as I will to them. I’m open for change but with time. Everyone changes but yet they don’t you know?


SO you have a thing for hair, it's not weird, what do you love about it. Do you love playing with hair, does it matter the kind of hair? And you should put the hair thing at the end of the "what I'm looking for" section. Otherwise you've interuppted the flow of your profile.

"I’m open for change but with time. Everyone changes but yet they don’t you know?"

Yeah totally dude, wanna skip fourth period? I've got the quarters for the arcade...

This, I just don't like. You're open to change, you just need time to adjust. Ok that fair... but then you throw the doozy "They change, but they don't" at us... I'd just take it out.

But yeah if you would like to know anything else. Just send me a message and we shall go from there?

We know what to do if we are interested. We know how to click onto that little contact this user button. And hopefully since we are here we know how to type. I'd take this out. We know what to do, this is a pointless statement.

You should break your profile up into sections, clearly defined sections.

section 1 - A section about you. What kind of person you are. What sets you apart from everyone else here.

section 2- his is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time.

section 3 - this is where you tell us what you're looking for in a person. Trust me. We actually DO want to know if we are what you're looking for or not.

First date : Well Dinner or coffee, Trip to The Avenue to walk around and talk. I would like to do something to enjoy our time together and get to know each other. Maybe go lie in a field of grass or on the back of the car (have a little music playing out of the car radio) looking at the stars and just relaxing and getting to know each other... Anything I’m up for it. Maybe we could go fishing ha-ha. Or even a sporting event, concert, I would enjoy all of these things and more.

These are great first date suggestions.

Remember though that while having a great profile really helps you... The magic happens once you meet someone. A great profile is just the first stepping stone.

Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 76
soo..
Posted: 3/23/2007 7:54:35 AM
BRIGHTONLEE - Here is one for you.

Tagline: Good tagline... You avoided all the "profile death" words. Yay!

Pictures: Good set of pictures, we can clearly see what you look like.

Interests: Good list of interests. Nothing to add there.

Main Profile: Hey all!
I'm not the usual footy type. I'm a bit random. I love going to gigs and movies. I play guitar and write songs. I like to keep fit but am no health freak. I've done the whole marriage thing and not looking for that (but never say never). I've got two kids I love to pieces. I love conversations that make me think and reassess my opinions, love walking in the early hours (the whole world is unspoilt and mine!), got a couple of piercings, like to watch a dvd. If you can teach me something even better...maybe cooking, a language, something about art/literature how to juggle, anything.


I liked almost everything about this section. I don't like that you greeted with "hey all!"... And I don't know what "footy" means. Aside from that, it's a great opener.

I'm looking to date initially and then see where we go from there. If you can laugh at yourself and me (and anyone that falls over), if you have a passion for something in life, if you put in as much as you get out, if you aspire to more than just material gain, if you're into live gigs you're half way there with me

Also great.

Music: Nirvana, Foo Fighters, RHCP, The Verve, Oasis, The Distillers, Blur, The Vines, Audioslave, Staind, Metallica, Green Day in fact most Rock/Punk/Metal/Indie.

Films: American Beauty, Clerks, A Beautiful Mind, Mean Girls(yep), Ronin, Casino, Star Wars, Matrix, KPAX, Gladiator, American Pie, Butterfly Effect, Usual Suspects, Lock Stock & Snatch.


I personally think that music and films are something to chat about in messages. But how you did it, doesn't scream "No!"... so you are in the clear there. I'm neutral on this part, it's take it or leave it for me.

No pic, no reply - come on, it's 2007 and I like to see who I'm chatting to!
No, I won't w*nk on cam for you so don't ask!
No, I don't want to see you w*nk on cam either!
No, I don't want to see you and your husband/bf/neighbour/dog/farm animal do cyber either!


Ok good. A picture is needed. I'd take out the rest. In profile focus on the positive. I don't care that you won't jerk off on cam, or won't watch anything else jerk off on cam. Turned me off your profile. I'd leave the picture desire, but take out the rest.

If you're still reading you must be getting bored by now, I am. Come and have a chat and find out for yourself who I am. I might just be worth it.

If we are getting bored after reading a profile, your profile, why would that mean we should contact you? If the profile bores us, it's likely the person will as well. I'd take this out, and leave it at "No Pic, No Reply".

Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 77
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 8:21:46 AM
AIMER123 - A review.

Tagline: Nothing Clever to Say Well, I'm glad I learned you have nothing clever to say before I even ventured into reading your profile... I don't like it. It might be a joke, I don't know, because I haven't gotten any further. Taglines should be eyecatching. They shouldn't be the kind of thing that makes a person click "Next" before even looking at your pictures.

Pictures: Wow two pictues... Not even one of them is of you. People not here to date your art. WE WANT TO KNOW WHAT YOU LOOK LIKE. Having a picture up of art doesn't mean you have a picture up.

Interests: You've got some good interests listed... The more of your interests you have listed, the more hits your profile will get when someone does a search.

Main Profile: About myself, I'm a active person (or at least love physical activity but dont do it enough due to a busy life), I love to read and make art and do yoga. again none of these things do i do enough of. I like conversation and learning about how other people see the world.

All right, we know you lead a busy life. But why don't you tell what makes your life busy instead of just telling us you have one?

So if any of that interest you, message me.

You haven't given us anything about you. We know what you'd like to do if you were not too busy. But since you can't even do the things you love, due to your busy life, how would you have time for a date?

People know what to do if they are interested. You don't have to tell them to message you.

I'm not sure what is is im looking for in a someone eles. I would like someone who is active or willing to be. ***Walking is always better than driving*** I like to play like a kid so I do need a guy who will at the very least enjoy hanging around with a hyper immature girl. And also I need someone who again at the very least likes to listen to someone go on and on about things. Philosophical talk is very fun.

Hmmm... Playing like a kid and being a "hyper immature girl" are two very different things... One sounds like awesome fun. The other makes it seem like you'll need a baby sitter...
So you're a talker who won't let someone else get a word in edge wise. but is willing to sit and listen to you go on and on...

You've got the makings of a good profile, it just needs tweaking.

Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 78
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 11:14:37 AM
WINTERGIRL70 - A review.

Tagline: looking for a glass is half full man doesn't really make sense. I imagine you're trying to say that you're looking for an optimistic man, who veiws his glass as always half full... Try to make that a little clearer. Though I'd avoid words like looking, searching, needing, wanting... Taglines should be eyecatching and memorable.

Pictures: Your main picture is too dark and blurry, I can barely make you out in it. It's best to have clear pictures. Where one can see what you look like easily without having to strain their eyes trying to make you out in the darkness. Ideally you would have one close up face shot, one showing off your body type, and a few action shots.

Interests: You've got a good amount of interests listed, so I've got nothing to add there.

Main Profile: Hmmm... Who I am? Truly a question for the ages, but since we dont have ages here goes...I am a redhead ( for the moment) who is full figured but goes to the gym so work in progress towards hour glass, with big blue eyes.

All right, I'm not a fan of people repeating what has already been stated in the information above your picture. We know that your hair is red, and we can tell that it changes, because well you have two pictures up, and you have a different hair color in each.

We also know that you're full figured/BBW because that's what you put as your body type, though I guess it's ok to say it again, because you're mentioning as part of an activity (going to the gym). Though I don't think you need to mention what you're striving towards.

I am smart, fun, funny, sexy, hardworking, independent, loyal, caring, cuddly, honest and a positive thinker. I seek some one with the a mixture of similar attributes who is different enough to keep me on my toes... think this could be you.. drop me a line and ask. I like kids and have no problem with dating someone with children.

All right, it's great that you are all these things. But it's best, instead of just giving us a list of the qualities you have, if you tell us a little about why you're these things. You don't have to do it with all of them, but elaborate on some.

I'm ok with the rest of it, though I don't like that you said "drop me a line"... Men know what to do when wanting to contact someone...

It's good that you mention you're ok with dating men with kids.

First Date: Anywhere we could sit and chat over a nice cup of coffee or a glass of wine...patio season starts now after all, lol.

Many people over look the "first date" section. Which shouldn't be done, because it lets a person know what kind of date to expect with you.

I'd maybe flush yours out a little bit... Give a little bit more detail.

Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 79
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 11:24:59 AM
BRETTINS - A review.

Tagline: At first I wasn't a fan of your tagline, but it kind of fits with the rest of your profile so I'd leave it...

Pictures: Great pictures... Where is that wall by the way?

Interests: You have an all right amount of interests listed. Just remember, users like to do interest searches, so the more of your interests that you have up , the better.

Main Profile: Hello!

I am a singer and piano player... with dimples. You heard me, ladies. DIMPLES. For the moment, that probably isn't going to pay the bills, so I have gotten myself a degree in computer engineering. That aside, music genuinely is my passion and that is what I am currently pursuing. Really, if I could sing for my supper (all all other meals) and play piano for a place to live, I would think my life was goin' great.

I value straightforwardness in relationships... I am not the kind of guy to say one thing and mean another. I also like to crack jokes, and am always up for anything fun. Notably, a joke about cracks just came to my head, but I'm trying not to give away exactly how bad the jokes I always like to bust out are. A word of warning, as well: I am not a cat man. My apologies, but cats have the nasty tendency of causing me to cease breathing.

I'm looking for girls who are comfortable with themselves both physically and mentally. If you wouldn't dare be seen in a shopping mall in sweats and a t-shirt under any circumstances, I'm probably not looking for you. I'm not saying we have to go on sweatpants dates or anything. Just, be comfortable with yourself. :)

I enjoy goofing off, I'm a musician, I'm ambitious, and I like to think I'm funny. If any of those things sound appealing to you, then, there's a good chance we'd get along - so fire off an e-mail my way. If you're not sure what to say, feel free to ask me where that amazing "yes, I'm single and you can ask me out" wall in my picture is!


The only thing I'd suggest changing is taking away that dancing banana and the enthusiastic "Hello!".

First Date: I'm up for pretty much anything. I would like to get to know you. If fine wining and dining is your desire, a movie is your want, or you wish to be serenaded, these are things that can be arranged. Otherwise, I would love to take you for a warm, frothy, creamy drink of your choice at a local coffee shop where we can talk.

Your profile was awesome. I enjoyed reading it, and like another review I did here, I think you are just out to get a thumbs up. Which you get.

Thanks for the easy review.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 80
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 11:36:52 AM
EMSYWOO123 - A REVIEW

Tagline: A tagline should be eyecatching and memorable. If you can't think of something on your own, turn to your favourite song/book/movie/whatever and get inspiration from that.

Pictures: your face shots are good ones. Nice a clear and we can make you out. Ideally you would have a picture showing off your body type and a few action shots.

Interests: You have no interests listed. Which isn't good. How is one to find something in common with you, if you have no interests? List some interests. It's best to have around 10.

Main Profile: Oh my life what to say here then?! Something witty and snappy to draw you in........nope, nothing right now! so, about me.....well, I like throwing some shapes on the dance floor (yeah I know, the 1980's are calling me!)and generally spending quality time with my buddies! Evenings in can be just as magic as those out in my humble opinion!
While I would dearly like to thank the many 50+ age bracket of married men who "drop me a line", it's not really my bag. So save your sweet words for another!
If however, you are smart, funny, kind and sexy never ever goes amiss then get in touch!


Ok, this was ok. I'd suggest a re-write and I'm going to give you the structure for that. You've got a good basis so far... so don't worry.

FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.

SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.

THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.

And last but not least the FIRST DATE section. This is just as important as your "about me"... It's with this section (first date) and the about me section that we figure out what kind of person you are, and what to expect when out with you. These date ideas tell us whether you're a funny, romantic, sporty...etc kind of date. Use it to your advantage.

Remember to focus on the positive.

Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 81
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 11:42:15 AM
_NIKKI - A Review.

Tagline: I'm not sure what JEAA means, but it's eyecatching.

Pictures: Good pictures, except for the one where you're flipping the bird. But you should know you're quite attractive.

Interests: You should list some. People do interests searches. The more of your interests that you have listed, the more hits your profile will get.

Main Profile:My name is Nikki. I'm eighteen. I'm a Journalism student at Centennial College. I'm a major sports fan. Hockey is life. I'm too nice. I'm shy. I'm laid back. I'm very random. I'm too blunt sometimes. I act stupid sometimes. I don’t like attention. I like people who like good music. I have 4 tattoos & 9 piercings (most are in my ears) I love my school. I like Boys in who dress gangster. I love The color red. It's hard for me to express what I feel. I love death murder rap. I love old gangster movies. I don't like how I forgive people too easily. I love Taking Pictures. I like to hang out with my friends. Having no food when you're really hungry is not cool. I don't like guys who just want sex. Its hard for me to open up to someone. I hate people who use you. I like dying my hair. I'm a good listener. I love writing. I like warm summer nights while the sun goes down.

` Real, and real respects real. So come correct.
` Unique. Hard to catch my attention, but when you do, it's yours.
` No bullsh!t. Don't step out of line. Trust, I'll put you right back back in your place
` Loyal. Best friend type.
` Focused on? School, my family, my crew. That's all that matters right now.
` Got my mind right. I've seen enough to know not to take life for granted and fcuk around
` Nationalist mindset. Nationalist does not mean racist.
` Educated. I know who I am. I know what I am. I know what I want. I know where I'm going-- at any cost.
` Passionate about what I love. Which is very few things.
` Hip hop head + hockey expert. yep, expert.
` I'm different. Want to know how? Get at moi.


"hate is baggage. life's too short to be pissed off all the time. it's just not worth it." - American History X


I like it, it just needs some structure. But like thoughts in the same paragraph and whatnot. Doing that will make your profile easier to read.

Here is a good one.

FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.

SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.

THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.


Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 82
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 11:47:13 AM
SMILER7 - A review.

Tagline: keeps me smiling What keeps you smiling? Otherwise good, caught my attention.

Pictures: Good pictures.

Interests: Good list of interests.

Main Profile: I have a fear of smiling on photographs!!!
Never thought I’d be writing one of these but its quite fun!
Recently moved to Weston-super-Mare due to a promotion. Would be great to meet new friends round here.

I'm philosophical, fun, outgoing, Sarcastic, Generally thought of as a little bit of a loon but I have a kind heart. I can be a pain to get to know because I keep myself to myself but trying to make an effort in my new town.

I’m a little old before my time and have given up the Club scene for the Pub Scene. I enjoy great movies that have a twist, Fight Club, Saw, The Matrix, but just recently I read the Book Pride and Prejudice and then had to watch the five hour film.

I love Computer Games. I have a Nintendo DS and I just love it. I have spent too many wasted hours on it.

Tall Men make me go weak at the knees, I lose all sense of myself tut! Generally though I am won over with a great sense of Humour someone who is not afraid of my sarcasm, someone who likes to banter with me, looking for someone with good conversational skills a little bit of intelligence! I love to debate and keep an open mind for what others can teach me.

For those of you interested. I’m currently Studying Geographical information System with Kingston university along side my job. I plan to do a part time Course in Philosophy soon.
Feel free to drop me a line i dont bite.


Great profile. I wouldn't change a thing. IF I were a guy, I'd message you!

Have fun and good luck!
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 83
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 9:22:34 PM
BEAMER2006 - Review time.

Tagline:Swim with the Dolphins with me. Good tagline, it's not eyecatching, but's not common.

Pictures: No wonder your username is "Beamer" in all your pictures your face is lit up with a smile. Which is wonderful, you don't see too many smiling faces here on PoF.

Interests: Great range of interests and a nice hearty list.

Main Profile:About Me: I'm a very generous person with an abundance of life. My friends think I'm off the deep end because of my humourous personality. I just love to make people laugh....they say laughter is contageous......boy! are they ever right. I am also that friend you can rely on, a person who cares for other people and a great listener. I do wear my heart on my sleeve.

Great opener.

As you can see from above I do have various interests and hobbies. I do have a very outgoing personality and extremely extrovert. I have a deep trust with my friends and is never one to back down and turn the other cheek. I love going to any public events, whether it be a concert when Rod Stewart is in town, going dancing, a quiet evening at a piano bar or just plain shopping. I am currently looking to revamp my living room and any women's ideas are welcome. The colour of my living room set is of Chocolate Brown.

Again, A great paragraph. Nothing to add.

Anyway, back to me..........I am confident and independent. I have dreams that I would love to share and hopefully you could be that person. I love children, although I don't have any, I would welcome yours wholeheartedly. I would love to travel the world and share the most intimate at times with that special person. Family and friends are important to me and would love the opportunity for you to be part of my world as I would be with yours. I also love a good intellectual conversation on almost any subject.

Wow, I'm being repetitive. Great paragraph. The only suggestion I have is to take out
"Anyway, back to me.......".... It's not needed.

Life is full of surprises and curves and I'm ready for it.

Ain't that the truth.

My ideal partner: One who is very independent and have family values. Fun to be with and one who isn't shy in lending a shoulder to lean on. You are a person with morals and can handle any situation with no effort at all. One who loves a great conversation on almost everything and would welcome your opinion. Must have an outgoing personality. A woman who loves to be cuddled and be loved at the same time, affectionate, tender and passionate. You love the outdoors and other activities, one who can enjoy my company and others. One who loves watching sports (we can compromise) and going out to the movies or the theatre, going out for Chinese or Thai food. Sundays, is all about relaxing watching movies and maybe just loafing around. A Sunday drive out to smaller towns and checking the scenery is also an option. My culture is very important to me and my ideal partner should have an open mind.

Great. It's always a good thing to mention what you're looking for in a partner. Too many people over look this important element.

Well, there's more to say but I can save this for our first few dates..................so what do you say?

Leave me a message and I'll promptly return it with a response. I will apologize now if it takes longer than three days to respond. Thank you for reading my bio and I'll speak to you soon..............wait for the beep


I was happy with your profile. Though I think that this last section doesn't have to be here. It doesn't give us any more information. It just seems like filler.

First Date:We would meet on a sunny Sunday during the summer at a patio on the Market for some refreshments and chat. The second date would be to then go for a Sunday drive towards a smaller town like Renfrew or Merrickville and have a picnic by a quiet lake. Nice and romantic and hope it doesn't rain. But then again, I hope it would because we would playing under the rain.

Thanks for the easy review!
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 84
You want it? I got it... PROFILE REVIEWS!
Posted: 3/23/2007 9:34:27 PM
JESS0788 - A Review.

Tagline:Lookin for my country boy. In taglines one should avoid using words like "looking, searching, needing, wanting"... Taglines should be eyecatching and original. If you can't think of something on your own, turn to your fav book/movie/song.

Pictures: Your pictures are cute. Ideally though you'd have one showing off your body type.

Interests: Goo start on the interests list, remember the more of your interests you have listed, the more hits your profile will get.

Main Profile: Ummmm......well im a honest i dont play games or have time for pettiness . My friends say im outgoing and fun to be around while also spontanieous and loving. Crazy huh? I didnt say it they did so there itis............................................
You wanna Know anything else just ask......


First of all, I'd make sure you ran your profile through a program that checks spelling and grammer. As both are important in profiles and messages. You should only put 3 periods together like this "..." it's called an ellipse.

Your profile doesn't give up much information about you, so I'm going to give you a good structure for a profile.

FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.

SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.

THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.

First Date:Isnt this kinda the guys job to plan the first date????????? I THINK SO...................... or maby not if not i dunno....

Again with the ellipse/spelling/grammer.
Also these are modern times. Women ask guys out, we plan dates, we work and we can even vote.

-Good luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 85
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Posted: 3/23/2007 9:43:07 PM
PATHLES CHAUSEN - A Review.

Tagline:I'm Tired Of Just Being Used For Sex!!! "NEXT!!!!" is what I thought when I read that. Also that you're full of yourself. I'd change your tagline. As soon as possible. Taglines should be eyecatching and original. If you can't think of something on your own, turn to your favourite movie/book/song/poem/whatever to get inspiration.

Pictures: I really don't like your south park charachter picture. It's pointless. I'd take it out.

Interests: Good amount of interests listed.

Main Profile: The best dessert I ever had was in a small bar in the middle of nowhere. The previous week I had dinner at a semi-upscale place in the over-priced district and ordered the most exotic desert on the menu, and it turned out to be vanilla ice cream. But at this bar I got this a thick piece of this bread-like cake with this incredible moist texture with the best caramel I ever tasted oozing on top of it; just sweet enough to let the taste of the cake come through. Wine was not served. And I thought to myself how amazing it was that this place had outdone every restaurant I had ever been to previously. Then it dawned on me: you can't find the best things in the yellow pages or the internet, you have to go look for them.

Huh... Long story for a pointless moral. Especially since you are online looking for a long term relationship. I didn't like it.

I look for these things. I'm not impressed by price tags, or celebrities endorsements, or public opinion. I am looking for a woman who loves men, who has a positive outlook and a sense of self-worth, and who loves being a woman. If this could be you, send me a message (sorry, I don't IM).

Wow thanks for telling us what you're looking for without telling us much about you.

I suggest a whole profile re-write. Here is the best formula for that.

FIRST PARAGRAPH - A section about YOU. Who you are as a person. What qualities you have that would make a some want to talk to you and meet you over any other person on this site. This paragraph is where you set yourself apart from the rest of the fish out there.

SECOND PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us a little bit about your job, interests and how you enjoy spending your time. The more we know about you the more we can relate to. And that's a good thing.

THIRD PARAGRAPH - This is where you tell us what kind of mate you're looking for. This is really handy when browsing through profiles. People don't like contacting others when we are not sure whether we will be too tall, too short, too slim, too big, too anything... We want to know that we have a chance. So please, tell us what you're looking for.

First Date:Coffee. You're buying :)

don't even get me started.

Godo luck.
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 86
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Posted: 3/23/2007 9:52:46 PM
LILOLME12 - Here is one for you.

Tagline:Check, Check...Is This Thing On? Works for me.

Pictures: Your pictures are good and varied. Well done.

Interests: You've got a good hunk of interests listed.

Main Profile:Remember Calvin And Hobbes? That was me - hell, I even looked like him. I'd love to meet a good woman and Hobbes said try this, so here's some of me: I'm in the arts/entertainment field and have been all my life, not a 9 to 5'er - though I did spend 2 years as a manager in a Trader Joes (it's a grocery store chain). Currently working for The Mouse but I'm really not crazy about this area (Orlando) - why do I stay?...involves a recent surgery and a dying parent.

Hmmm, I think you should leave the comment about a dying parent out of your profile. That's something to share in messages. Not on a profile.

Oh and uhhh...I can actually listen and speak coherently.

I'd take this out. It's not needed.

More of a mountains and lakes kinda guy, the beach doesn't really interest me - nor does NASCAR. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy a nice walk on the beach...but NASCAR sucks. I'm something of a carpenter and enjoy working with my hands. I love the beauty of wood and how it can be shaped and I need to make things to satisfy that creative urge (a chair, a canoe) - which also means I'm pretty "handy".

Good. Good. Good.

Let's see...I have a BFA and once held National Certification as a massage therapist (yes really), I had my hip replaced at the end of January & might occaisionally walk with a cane (I've been told a limp - and scars, are sexy). I own a motorcycle and this one just happens to be a Harley. I'm not "biker dude" and went to Daytona for the first time this year - now I never need to do THAT again. I ride for relaxation. OH! Did I mention? In Florida, it's fun to say "NASCAR sucks".

Yes you mentioned that NASCAR sucks. This is a good paragraph (I'd actually make it one. Separate it on your profile). And take the last line out. From OH! to Sucks.

I'm looking for intelligence and common sense; humor and empathy; understanding and independence; good looking (of course with the understanding that beauty is in the eyes of the beholder) is nice too...

Ok, good to know.

Regarding the photos - The motorcycle shot is oldest. The primary is not the most recent but I'm rotating - and I haven't changed much. I have started shaving again - it's the Disney thing - (see the body shot and primary). I DO have pierced ears (but can't wear em) and shoulder tattoos (but can't show em)...and I made that canoe.

I'm not sure you have to explain every picture. Mention the piercings and the tat's in the about me section, then I'd take the rest out.


First Date:Food is a wonderful way to begin to share interests and I'm pretty good at avoiding awkward silences (which is not to say that normal silences don't happen but...they're not...oh, nevermind). I don't do the bar scene and especially avoid sports bars. Movies are nice...later. Ya can't converse at a movie (although coffee and a piece of pie afterwords is nice). Later, sure but not first date, why start by NOT talking? A mutually decided upon, neutral location. I can get us into the parks free for a roller coaster ride at the MK? - the carousel is nice too...

Ok, good date section.

Good luck!
 Beamer2006
Joined: 7/28/2006
Msg: 87
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Posted: 3/23/2007 10:46:53 PM
Hey Pink,
Thank you for the review. Yes, I'll ammend the little filler you mentioned and have yourself a great week-end.

Beamer
 brettins
Joined: 4/9/2006
Msg: 88
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Posted: 3/23/2007 11:09:25 PM
oops double post
 brettins
Joined: 4/9/2006
Msg: 89
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Posted: 3/23/2007 11:11:01 PM
thanks for the thoughts! Your well articulated reviews of everyone's profiles are really excellent.

The wall is actually in Stockholme's market area at a jeans store. I have no idea if it still around, it was quite a few years ago.
 that sam i am
Joined: 10/27/2006
Msg: 90
soo..
Posted: 3/24/2007 10:27:58 AM
Okay i'm game. review mine please :)
 SmileSeeker
Joined: 5/18/2006
Msg: 91
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Posted: 3/24/2007 8:51:59 PM
Like Brad Paisley says, can you check my profile for ticks?


Every time you take a sip
In this smoky atmosphere
You press that bottle to your lips
And I wish I was your beer
In the small there of your back
Your jeans are playing peekaboo
I'd like to see the other half of your butterfly tattoo.

Hey that gives me an idea
Let's get out of this bar
Drive out into the country
And find a place to park.

'Cause I'd like to see you out in the moonlight
I'd like to kiss you way back in the sticks
I'd like to walk you through a field of wildflowers
And I'd like to check you for ticks.

I know the perfect little path
Out in these woods I used to hunt
Don't worry babe I've got your back
And I've also got your front
Now, I'd hate to waste a night like this
I'll keep you safe you wait and see
The only thing allowed to crawl all over you when we get there is me.

You know every guy in here tonight
Would like to take you home
But I've got way more class than them
Babe that ain't what I want.

'Cause I'd like to see you out in the moonlight
I'd like to kiss you way back in the sticks
I'd like to walk you through a field of wildflowers
And I'd like to check you for ticks.

You never know where one might be
There's lots of place that are hard to reach
I gotcha.

I'd like to see you out in the moonlight
I'd like to kiss you baby way back in the sticks
I'd like to walk you through a field of wildflowers
And I'd like to check you for ticks.

I'd sure like to check you for ticks...
 dan2martin
Joined: 3/6/2007
Msg: 92
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Posted: 5/16/2007 5:56:43 PM
Just wondering if you gave up on profile reviews? Mine was next in line and then they stopped?
 PinkSalmon
Joined: 11/26/2006
Msg: 93
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Posted: 6/13/2007 10:57:19 AM
All right everyone I'm back!

It's been a tough time, my computer broke down and I haven't had steady access to one in a long time. I'll try and get around to all your reviews as my time allows. Please be patient.
 MountainDragon
Joined: 7/8/2007
Msg: 94
Honest opinion appreciated
Posted: 7/23/2007 3:07:14 PM
Thanks for starting the thread. Please be honest with your review of my profile. Thanks.
 giving back
Joined: 8/24/2007
Msg: 95
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Posted: 10/11/2007 10:32:36 AM
Please review my profile. I've never got one email sent to me, and have only been answered once. I don't understand what is wrong with my profile.
 dgqtz
Joined: 12/21/2006
Msg: 96
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Posted: 1/3/2008 4:22:42 PM
please review mine and let me know what u think. thanx
 rtwtravel
Joined: 9/26/2006
Msg: 97
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Posted: 1/3/2008 6:18:06 PM
Oh do me, do me! I mean.. review my profile.
 lonelygirl15
Joined: 9/18/2006
Msg: 98
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Posted: 1/3/2008 7:16:55 PM
pink salmon i would abbbbbbbbbbsolutely love a review!!
 3babiesandaman
Joined: 10/29/2007
Msg: 99
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Posted: 1/4/2008 3:49:10 PM
I know that I'm not going to be attractive to every woman out there but I would like to know If I'm sending up any red flags that would scare off an otherwise interested woman.
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