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|The written part is pretty good. Add a bunch more photos and a short paragraph about what kind of women (traits) you'd like to meet.|
Posted: 6/26/2013 4:02:12 AM
|My suggestion is to change language from woMEN to woMAN so the reader feels like you are speaking to HER, rather than untold thousands who might also see the narrative. That will naturally require rephrasing the sentences.|
Posted: 6/26/2013 5:44:45 AM
|Hi :) and welcome to my coffee break/ free advice.|
One photo.. no. Room for 8, pls get 8 posted :/
Header - makes you sound a bit insecure about your looks. Women like confident men so change it.
You use the word GUY oodles.
So you did a brief summary of you - what drives you, what are your passions?
Who are you seeking - describe her.. not blonde 120 pds but traits
Posted: 7/10/2013 4:25:54 PM
|I still don't think one not-great photo is going to get anyone to read your profile (except us). Okay I see someone told you to change women to woman. But you also changed it a few times in the wrong place. Woman is one of them; women are a bunch.|
Capitalize all your i. Change the im to I'm many times. Yeah perhaps if a man looks so good that women are drooling while looking at the photos, they can get away with things like that. Regular people can't.
Posted: 7/10/2013 4:26:11 PM
|worst Header EVER! and how many times must people tell you it is WOMAN not WOMEN?|
one picture means you are dead in the water ( and you were told that as well) Means you are hiding something - women aren't going to ask you to send more - plus you can't with the changes to POF.
So - Don;t use the words dead women in your header.
and your friends and you are ball busters? wth????
Posted: 7/10/2013 6:11:07 PM
I might only have one picture up for now but it represents me well
Hmmm...I don't know about that. I'm personally not keen on what you have now as a primary pic. You appear quite tipsy - not flattering and not the best first impression. Try for a decent, well lit, head and shoulder shot with a big smile, sans all booze, hats, caps, hoodies, friends, kiddies, sunglasses, etc.,
Your username denotes someone who's been burned so badly, ditched, jilted and jaded, trampled on and his heart almost destroyed. Not very optimistic if you ask me. At least, that's the impression you gave me immediately.
Headline: "Wanted: a good woman"
Not original at all and snoozeville. You don't want a "crappy" woman, do you? Of course ALL guys want a "good" woman. Try again! Be creative!
Btw, 'high school' is not capitalized unless it's prefixed by a name IE: London High School, etc.,
You're missing an apostrophe in, I'll and it's. You have a few of those in your profile. Minor, I know, but there are women out there who are sticklers for good grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc., You have erred in the spelling of, 'too.' I advise you run your profile through MS Word and correct ALL you can.
The name, Johnny Cash is capitalized.
Posted: 7/10/2013 6:20:58 PM
|yes, nver heard of a pack of men being called Ball busters before. Is that like a circle jerk?? DUH|
Posted: 7/10/2013 8:54:00 PM
|We should seriously give up on this particular OP. |
His horrendous spelling errors remain weeks after they were indicated to him.
Energy is best spent on people who care to improve their profiles.
Posted: 7/11/2013 5:01:31 PM
|Yes, Eric is right. Next.|